Forever New
A Pantoum Sonnet61 total reviews
Comment from MizKat
Hi Steve,
This is a great Pantoum Sonnet for the contest. You did a wonderful job in writing it. I enjoyed every word of it. I hope it will win the contest.
Kat
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
Hi Steve,
This is a great Pantoum Sonnet for the contest. You did a wonderful job in writing it. I enjoyed every word of it. I hope it will win the contest.
Kat
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Kat!
Steve
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your repeat line fall into place and works well in this sonnet
your rhyme is within the format
good enjambment within verses
good visual
as poet's write of storm you treasure the lasting love that you share great message portrayed
flows well
cheers..Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
good luck in the contest
your repeat line fall into place and works well in this sonnet
your rhyme is within the format
good enjambment within verses
good visual
as poet's write of storm you treasure the lasting love that you share great message portrayed
flows well
cheers..Smoothiecool
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Smoothie!
Steve
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welcome..SC
Comment from Lulube
Good job with this style. too confusing for me, I would have to map out each line on a board first, then move them into their new space. lol Good flow throughout and a serene love message in your words.
good luck in the contest
lulube
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
Good job with this style. too confusing for me, I would have to map out each line on a board first, then move them into their new space. lol Good flow throughout and a serene love message in your words.
good luck in the contest
lulube
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Thank you!
Steve
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welcome
lulube
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Forever New' is an exceptionally well-written and heart-warming piece. This talented poet has a love which should be treasured. It was a privilege to read and review a work of this quality.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
'Forever New' is an exceptionally well-written and heart-warming piece. This talented poet has a love which should be treasured. It was a privilege to read and review a work of this quality.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Thank you!
Steve
Steve, you're very welcome.
Best wishes, the Duchess
Comment from Bryan G
Excellent. I love your comparison of love that is a raging fire to a love that is safe and warm. You have beautifully captured the raging fire (passion)and the safe, warm love as the essence of true love. Passion may wane but agape love continues on forever. Great work.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
Excellent. I love your comparison of love that is a raging fire to a love that is safe and warm. You have beautifully captured the raging fire (passion)and the safe, warm love as the essence of true love. Passion may wane but agape love continues on forever. Great work.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Bryan, thanks for the thoughtful review and the six stars - much appreciated.
Steve
Comment from Bill Schott
This display of the pantoum sonnet is well done and reminds me that the steady compassion that endures is made special in the flash of passion that may also burn itself out.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
This display of the pantoum sonnet is well done and reminds me that the steady compassion that endures is made special in the flash of passion that may also burn itself out.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Louise Michelle
I like your original take on a love poem and think it speaks to lasting relationships. Yes, a storm - or passion - can be exciting, but safety and warmth are what we seek as we get older. Nicely done. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
I like your original take on a love poem and think it speaks to lasting relationships. Yes, a storm - or passion - can be exciting, but safety and warmth are what we seek as we get older. Nicely done. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Lou.
Steve
Comment from Ben Colder
Yea, I like mine to be cozy as well. I read the others wondering what causes their misery. Good worded poem that makes sense to me. Shalom.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
Yea, I like mine to be cozy as well. I read the others wondering what causes their misery. Good worded poem that makes sense to me. Shalom.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Bobby Jo
That is our love after 17 years of marriage. Secure, safe, warm. This is really a cool way to put this. Thanks for sharing and God bless you with your relationship.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
That is our love after 17 years of marriage. Secure, safe, warm. This is really a cool way to put this. Thanks for sharing and God bless you with your relationship.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Thanks, BJ, for the kind words and the six lovely stars.
Steve
Comment from James Dooney
I like what you have done with this work of yours. I can feel that the words really do back up on the light that your candle is showing. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
I like what you have done with this work of yours. I can feel that the words really do back up on the light that your candle is showing. Well done.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Thanks, James.
Steve