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A Pantoum Sonnet61 total reviews
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Steve,
Nicely written, heartfelt, love that is tried and true doesn't have to hormones and electricity in the air. It is steadfast, and can be savored.
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Keep Smilin'... Jax
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Hi Steve,
Nicely written, heartfelt, love that is tried and true doesn't have to hormones and electricity in the air. It is steadfast, and can be savored.
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Keep Smilin'... Jax
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Jax.
Steve
Comment from DR DIP
STEVE that is absolutely beautiful for I can so relate to your words as many here will
thank you so much for sharing and posting what others mey feel but cannot always express
well done and good luck!
you have my vote for sure!
dip
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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STEVE that is absolutely beautiful for I can so relate to your words as many here will
thank you so much for sharing and posting what others mey feel but cannot always express
well done and good luck!
you have my vote for sure!
dip
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Dip.
You are right - this has struck a chord with many readers - who are obviously not voters!
Steve
Comment from adewpearl
strong rhymes in good English sonnet pattern
excellent use of steady iambic meter and enjambment
effective repetition of lines in good pantoum format - I like the way is passion turns into a question in its repeat performance
good alliteration in dazzles/dies and fine flame
beautiful imagery to convey this thoughtful declaration of love in fine pantoum sonnet form :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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strong rhymes in good English sonnet pattern
excellent use of steady iambic meter and enjambment
effective repetition of lines in good pantoum format - I like the way is passion turns into a question in its repeat performance
good alliteration in dazzles/dies and fine flame
beautiful imagery to convey this thoughtful declaration of love in fine pantoum sonnet form :-) Brooke
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Brooke.
What a lot of fine entries we had for this contest - including yours!
Steve
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I agree - one of the strongest fields I've seen in a long time.
Comment from Irish Rain
I just loved this entire poem, I like the way it's written,..the style, I love the sentiments it expresses...I feel exactly the same...I'll take a flame that's safe and warm anyday! Blessings tonight!
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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I just loved this entire poem, I like the way it's written,..the style, I love the sentiments it expresses...I feel exactly the same...I'll take a flame that's safe and warm anyday! Blessings tonight!
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Jo.
Many readers have shared similar sentiments.
Steve
Comment from Bina1
Wish I had a six for your lovely poem! Such a rewarding read, thank you for sharing. A love forever more has to have the stamina to continue!
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Wish I had a six for your lovely poem! Such a rewarding read, thank you for sharing. A love forever more has to have the stamina to continue!
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Thanks for the kind words and the virtual six.
Steve
Comment from Dean Kuch
I suppose the Pantoum Sonnet Contest deadline is drawing to a close as this will be my sixth poem read today in this format.
Odd how so many of you wait until the closing moments to write your contest entries. Hell, I have to begin weeks, sometimes months in advance, so it can be tweaked, edited and reedited based on reviews. It must be nice to have such talent and confidence.
That being said, this entry is a well written poetic proclamation of perfect love and a flame for passion that can never be extinguished.
Well done and best of luck in the contest, Steve.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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I suppose the Pantoum Sonnet Contest deadline is drawing to a close as this will be my sixth poem read today in this format.
Odd how so many of you wait until the closing moments to write your contest entries. Hell, I have to begin weeks, sometimes months in advance, so it can be tweaked, edited and reedited based on reviews. It must be nice to have such talent and confidence.
That being said, this entry is a well written poetic proclamation of perfect love and a flame for passion that can never be extinguished.
Well done and best of luck in the contest, Steve.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Dean.
I may well be the antithesis of your approach - I often scrawl something just in time to make a deadline. In this case I had to be reminded that the deadline was upon me.
Fortunately, I had started on a piece of scrap paper somewhere, so once I had located that I was able to wrangle it into shape.
Steve
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You're very welcome, Steve. I wish you the best of luck, my friend.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
You make it hard for the other contestants Steve, with such a fine entry. Your creation here has a fine sophistication not commonly seen either here or in published works. As always... I find this a pleasure to read. Well done, my friend. Giddy
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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You make it hard for the other contestants Steve, with such a fine entry. Your creation here has a fine sophistication not commonly seen either here or in published works. As always... I find this a pleasure to read. Well done, my friend. Giddy
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Giddy - it may be more the other way around - they make it hard for me - as you can see by visiting the booth...
Steve
Comment from krys123
Steve, I truly enjoyed reading your pantoum sonnet and had a lot of meaning into it and as a poet I really enjoyed reading it sincerely. It's a great home at describing a Polish sincere feelings and thoughts. Good luck in the contest because I consider this an exceptional entry. It's rhyming is neither forced nor labored while the rhythm flows smoothly throughout your poem. Thank you for sharing and posting this for everyone and may all your endeavors be good ones.
Alex
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Steve, I truly enjoyed reading your pantoum sonnet and had a lot of meaning into it and as a poet I really enjoyed reading it sincerely. It's a great home at describing a Polish sincere feelings and thoughts. Good luck in the contest because I consider this an exceptional entry. It's rhyming is neither forced nor labored while the rhythm flows smoothly throughout your poem. Thank you for sharing and posting this for everyone and may all your endeavors be good ones.
Alex
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Alex, thanks so much for your review and thoughtful comments.
Steve
Comment from tbacha58
When poets write of love that's like a storm
beyond control, a raging fire that sears,
I treasure our fine flame that's safe and warm
yet glows more brightly through the passing years.
I so much enjoyed this strong phrases. The rhyming is fantastic, it gives a huge boost to your poem. Each word said here is so true and one should read your poem more then once. I enjoyed it so much, and the picture joins so much the words in that poem. Good luck, well done. Hugs Terry xoxo
My six star from Montreal will shine above you. xoxo
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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When poets write of love that's like a storm
beyond control, a raging fire that sears,
I treasure our fine flame that's safe and warm
yet glows more brightly through the passing years.
I so much enjoyed this strong phrases. The rhyming is fantastic, it gives a huge boost to your poem. Each word said here is so true and one should read your poem more then once. I enjoyed it so much, and the picture joins so much the words in that poem. Good luck, well done. Hugs Terry xoxo
My six star from Montreal will shine above you. xoxo
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Terry, thanks so much for the warm review and the virtual sixth star - even if I can't see it shining over Canada!
Steve
Comment from humpwhistle
Steve, you've struck a certain chord with me. I have an issue with 'poetic grandiousity', and I appreciate a true poet pointing it out.
Some sunsets are so-so.
Some beauties are less-so in the morning.
Some loves are lusty illusions.
Glad you have your head on straight, my friend.
Peace, Lee
It dazzles then it dies. -- a fine descriptive line.
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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Steve, you've struck a certain chord with me. I have an issue with 'poetic grandiousity', and I appreciate a true poet pointing it out.
Some sunsets are so-so.
Some beauties are less-so in the morning.
Some loves are lusty illusions.
Glad you have your head on straight, my friend.
Peace, Lee
It dazzles then it dies. -- a fine descriptive line.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Thanks, lee - first to review, last to get thanked.
Yes, of course poets are bullshitters of the highest order (not like those ever so truthful story-writers!) and I don't mind reminding myself and others of that fact from time to time.
Steve
