Comment from Alan K Pease

Excellent

I feel the same way about writing of love from the sanctity of its purpose.You last verse is a fine summary of your own feelings about a shared love. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014

Thanks, Alan.

Steve

Comment from strandregs

Excellent

Lovely lovely lovely
Great flow ,meaning, tenderness ,passion .
Enjoyed reading. Safe and warm wins any day.
Great rhyme a rythm.Z.

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014

Hi, Zelick, Where've you been?

Thanks for the great review.

Steve

reply by strandregs on 22-Jun-2014

I've been to London to see the the queen . He he he.
D.I.Y. house renovating. Feel like jumping from the roof. He. He.he.Z

reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014

yeah, renovating will do that for you!

Comment from poetbear

Excellent

Ten stars and a big hug.
You touched my heraet and hot a nerve.
I don't know if we love stronger than others but I think we do.
I know I couldn't love my hubby stronger or more than I do today and tomorrow.
Bravo, What a gem!

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014

Thank you - glad this struck a chord with you.

Steve

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Oh I wish I had a plethora of sixes for this....you have captured what love truly is...I don't want the meteoric tail spin crash and burn passion that leaves craters of divorce. I also treasure the flame that's safe and warm.
It's kindling is deep respect.
God bless and thanks

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014

Jenny, thanks for the warm review and the virtual six.

Steve

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

This is very well written with a smooth transition from line to line. This poem is rather musical form of reading. It was just so easy to read. It Flows off of the tongue, so very well. The verse also contains a good message as well. This was an excellent piece of poetic art to have read and written this response for... John

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014

John, thanks for the generous and thoughtful review.

Steve

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I really enjoyed reading your strong contest entry. I agree. Lust will only last for that moment, but true unconditional love is what will take your through the long haul. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014

Thanks, Barbara.

Steve

Comment from Just2Write

Excellent

A beautiful entry into the Pantoum Sonnet contest, Steve. It is such a fine example of how one should be written. It's also so gentle in the voice of love - a telling of how a flame that's safe and warm (like a candle that slowly offers warmth and comfort) vs. a fire storm of passion that can quickly rage to temperatures too hot to withstand, and that quickly burn themselves out.


I thought your repetition of line six was brilliant when you turned the line into a question. Bravo.
I had to re-read it a couple of times to ensure you hadn't changed the line - and was delighted to find that you were in full compliance with Pantoum rules.

So glad you got your entry in under the wire, Steve. It is such a worthy submission.

Rose.

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014

Thanks, Rose - glad you enjoyed this. It always means more coming from someone who knows just what the form is all about.

What a lot of strong entries there are in this!

Steve

reply by Just2Write on 22-Jun-2014

Well, I'm not so sure about knowing what I'm doing - I still have much to learn. So far, my entry is at the bottom of the heap.
Can't argue with that - I'll just have to re-read some of the more popular submissions, I guess. :o)
Rose.

Comment from sgalletti

Excellent

Hi Steve! I love these two lines:

When poets write of love that's like a storm,
I treasure our fine flame that's safe and warm.

and feel that way about my own relationship with my Johnny-Boy. Terrific enjambment in this poem, a poetic device I prefer and do not often see. As a result, your poem flows beautifully. Nice consonance as well. Simply stated message in a well crafted poem. Best of luck in the contest, Sue

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014

Sue, thanks so much for the kind words - the sentiment seems to have struck a chord with many readers.

Tough competition here, though.

Steve

Comment from nancyjam

Exceptional

Another excellent, well crafted poem, Steve.
I like the use of enjambment for beautiful flow.
Wonderful imagery, rhyme and placement of
repeating lines. Should do well in the contest. Good luck. Nancy

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014

Nancy, thanks for the kind words and the six stars.

Contest looks like being too tough this time.

Steve

Comment from Nosha17

Exceptional

I concur totally with your concepts on love; the enduring love outshines all the rest. Lovely words and rhymes to convey your thoughts and it was a smooth and enjoyable read. Good luck in the contest. Faye

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014

Thanks, Faye. The enduring love theme struck a chord with many readers. As for the contest, though, ....

Steve