Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Hi Steve,

This is a great Pantoum Sonnet for the contest. You did a wonderful job in writing it. I enjoyed every word of it. I hope it will win the contest.

Kat

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014

Thanks, Kat!

Steve

Comment from Smoothiecool

Excellent

good luck in the contest

your repeat line fall into place and works well in this sonnet

your rhyme is within the format

good enjambment within verses

good visual

as poet's write of storm you treasure the lasting love that you share great message portrayed

flows well

cheers..Smoothiecool

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014

Thanks, Smoothie!

Steve

reply by Smoothiecool on 24-Jun-2014

welcome..SC

Comment from Lulube

Excellent

Good job with this style. too confusing for me, I would have to map out each line on a board first, then move them into their new space. lol Good flow throughout and a serene love message in your words.

good luck in the contest

lulube

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014

Thank you!

Steve

reply by Lulube on 26-Jun-2014

welcome

lulube

Comment from duchessofdrumborg

Excellent

'Forever New' is an exceptionally well-written and heart-warming piece. This talented poet has a love which should be treasured. It was a privilege to read and review a work of this quality.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014

Thank you!

Steve

reply by duchessofdrumborg on 24-Jun-2014

Steve, you're very welcome.

Best wishes, the Duchess

Comment from Bryan G

Exceptional

Excellent. I love your comparison of love that is a raging fire to a love that is safe and warm. You have beautifully captured the raging fire (passion)and the safe, warm love as the essence of true love. Passion may wane but agape love continues on forever. Great work.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014

Bryan, thanks for the thoughtful review and the six stars - much appreciated.

Steve

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This display of the pantoum sonnet is well done and reminds me that the steady compassion that endures is made special in the flash of passion that may also burn itself out.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

I like your original take on a love poem and think it speaks to lasting relationships. Yes, a storm - or passion - can be exciting, but safety and warmth are what we seek as we get older. Nicely done. Hugs, Lou

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014

Thanks, Lou.

Steve

Comment from Ben Colder

Excellent

Yea, I like mine to be cozy as well. I read the others wondering what causes their misery. Good worded poem that makes sense to me. Shalom.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from Bobby Jo

Exceptional

That is our love after 17 years of marriage. Secure, safe, warm. This is really a cool way to put this. Thanks for sharing and God bless you with your relationship.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014

Thanks, BJ, for the kind words and the six lovely stars.

Steve

Comment from James Dooney

Excellent

I like what you have done with this work of yours. I can feel that the words really do back up on the light that your candle is showing. Well done.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014

Thanks, James.

Steve