Forever New
A Pantoum Sonnet61 total reviews
Comment from GBTEXT
"Forever New' sees the poet's writing imbued with truth and love that turn it into 'our fine flame that's safe and warm". It sees truth to be synonymous with love, but differentiates passion from true, enduring love. Its language presents a metaphor in 'a raging fire that sears" and is as well quite romantic. In this sense, "glows ...through the passing years" and "outlasts eternity".
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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"Forever New' sees the poet's writing imbued with truth and love that turn it into 'our fine flame that's safe and warm". It sees truth to be synonymous with love, but differentiates passion from true, enduring love. Its language presents a metaphor in 'a raging fire that sears" and is as well quite romantic. In this sense, "glows ...through the passing years" and "outlasts eternity".
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Thank you for the thoughtful review.
Steve
Comment from Angel Debbie
You have so many beautiful lines written in this write it was hard to pick my favorite. This has to be the best:
Is passion for a day a love that's true?
It dazzles then it dies. Our fire more pure
outlasts eternity, forever new;
through darkest night it burns both strong and sure.
Nice beautiful write, I love it keep up the great work.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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You have so many beautiful lines written in this write it was hard to pick my favorite. This has to be the best:
Is passion for a day a love that's true?
It dazzles then it dies. Our fire more pure
outlasts eternity, forever new;
through darkest night it burns both strong and sure.
Nice beautiful write, I love it keep up the great work.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Debbie - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Debra White
I enjoyed this Steve :)
The searing intensity of a new love that quickly diminishes and often burns out, whilst thrilling at the time, can never compare to a sure and steady glow.
Nicely done and all the best in the voting booth.
Kindest regards as always, Debra
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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I enjoyed this Steve :)
The searing intensity of a new love that quickly diminishes and often burns out, whilst thrilling at the time, can never compare to a sure and steady glow.
Nicely done and all the best in the voting booth.
Kindest regards as always, Debra
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Debra, thanks for the warm review.
Steve
Comment from Zue65
This poem deserved an all time best status recognition for its fluidity and smooth rhythm. I like best the following lines," When poet's write of love that's like a storm, i treasure our fine flame that's safe and warm". God bless, an excellent write indeed.
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This poem deserved an all time best status recognition for its fluidity and smooth rhythm. I like best the following lines," When poet's write of love that's like a storm, i treasure our fine flame that's safe and warm". God bless, an excellent write indeed.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Skilfully done, as I would expect from you. Romantic and passionate, it's a sweet tribute to a love long lasting.
A great contender for the contest, no doubt!
Av
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Skilfully done, as I would expect from you. Romantic and passionate, it's a sweet tribute to a love long lasting.
A great contender for the contest, no doubt!
Av
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Av
Brooke burnt off a strong field in the contest - hard to argue with an army of 1500 fans!
Steve
Comment from Carole Rosa
Steve, You have composed a very romantic poem with a strong indication of love for another. The lovely message of passion within this poem is immensely powerful. Very Very nice. Carole
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Steve, You have composed a very romantic poem with a strong indication of love for another. The lovely message of passion within this poem is immensely powerful. Very Very nice. Carole
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Carole!
Steve
Comment from ravenblack
You certainly have that right. A perpetual storm cannot be maintained. True love, growing old together, is a quiet flame of comfort. And that certainly does not mean that those candles do not flare...often, they do.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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You certainly have that right. A perpetual storm cannot be maintained. True love, growing old together, is a quiet flame of comfort. And that certainly does not mean that those candles do not flare...often, they do.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
This is a beautiful Pantoum Sonnet. The wording is lovely and the sonnet form is perfect. I have never tried a Pantoum and am full of admiration for those who have. I did think, from reading about Pantoums, that the first and last lines of the poem should be the same. Maybe I'm wrong, but I love your final couplet. If they should be the same then these two lines could simply be transposed. A beautiful read. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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This is a beautiful Pantoum Sonnet. The wording is lovely and the sonnet form is perfect. I have never tried a Pantoum and am full of admiration for those who have. I did think, from reading about Pantoums, that the first and last lines of the poem should be the same. Maybe I'm wrong, but I love your final couplet. If they should be the same then these two lines could simply be transposed. A beautiful read. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Dorothy/
In a more traditional pantoum the first and last lines would be the same.
This contest was for the variant pantoum sonnet where the final couplet consists of the first and third lines from the first stanza.
Steve
Comment from Ekim777
A fine poem but does it define that out worn word called love. We are drawn to the temptations of raging instincts; the seduction of our insatiable desires and those savage passions. I suppose love can be measured by self sacrifice. Whatever the case, can human love be eternal? Is it not as transient and the passing of our lives; ever transforming itself? I was so taken by the content I overlooked the fine way your lines slipped into place. -Ekim777
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A fine poem but does it define that out worn word called love. We are drawn to the temptations of raging instincts; the seduction of our insatiable desires and those savage passions. I suppose love can be measured by self sacrifice. Whatever the case, can human love be eternal? Is it not as transient and the passing of our lives; ever transforming itself? I was so taken by the content I overlooked the fine way your lines slipped into place. -Ekim777
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Mile, thanks for the thoughtful review and the six stars - much appreciated.
Steve
Comment from acerisestory
I very much enjoyed reading your pantoum sonnet, Steve. I attempted to write one recently and found it to be very daunting. So, I applaud you for presenting such a nice message and staying with the "rules." I like the alliteration: fine/flame. Good luck with the contest. Alana
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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I very much enjoyed reading your pantoum sonnet, Steve. I attempted to write one recently and found it to be very daunting. So, I applaud you for presenting such a nice message and staying with the "rules." I like the alliteration: fine/flame. Good luck with the contest. Alana
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Alana.
Yes it can be a bit like a tricky jigsaw getting the pieces of one of these to fit together.
Steve
