A Ladybug of Several Dots
A Quatern126 total reviews
Comment from mermaids
Love the focus on the dots of the ladybug,they are what we think of when ladybugs come to mind. Your use of descriptive words gives a clear picture to the reader as the ladybug ambles along.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Love the focus on the dots of the ladybug,they are what we think of when ladybugs come to mind. Your use of descriptive words gives a clear picture to the reader as the ladybug ambles along.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Elaine, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from w.j.debi
Another new form for me. I couldn't find a Quatem on the Internet or Poetry Dances so I'm guessing by what you have written that it has
A repeating line that slides down one line in each quatrain
iambic tetrameter
rhyme pattern of Aabb aAcc ddAa eeaA
Excellent choice of repeating line and its end rhyme with lots of possibilities
Smooth use of enjambment to keep the verse flowing
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Another new form for me. I couldn't find a Quatem on the Internet or Poetry Dances so I'm guessing by what you have written that it has
A repeating line that slides down one line in each quatrain
iambic tetrameter
rhyme pattern of Aabb aAcc ddAa eeaA
Excellent choice of repeating line and its end rhyme with lots of possibilities
Smooth use of enjambment to keep the verse flowing
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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That's odd that it isn't easy to Google as it's an old form. Shadow poetry.com has it in their types of poetry section, I'm sure - that is a far better site than Poetry Dances. You're right about what you deduce from my poem. I usually write abab rhyme for this form, which is also acceptable. Thanks for reviewing, Debi :-) Brooke
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Thank you for the information, Brooke. I'll try that site. It's a new one to me as well. I appreciate your willingness to share information! Debi
Comment from seaglass
As an organic gardener I think of ladybugs as my friends. The is a fun rhyming poem with repeated lines that give it a playful essence
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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As an organic gardener I think of ladybugs as my friends. The is a fun rhyming poem with repeated lines that give it a playful essence
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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seaglass, thank you so much - yeah, I know what good little aphid eaters they are :-) Brooke
Comment from ravenblack
Spots- her markings. Spots - favorite places to sun. Spots- different aspects of her character all valid, all deserving to feel the heat and grace of the sun. Really like your interplay of spots and dots.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Spots- her markings. Spots - favorite places to sun. Spots- different aspects of her character all valid, all deserving to feel the heat and grace of the sun. Really like your interplay of spots and dots.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, ravenblack - I had fun with this one :-) Brooke
Comment from catch22
Hi Brooke, this is a very cute poem about one of my favorite creatures--the ladybug! I loved how the moving refrain line worked itself through each stanza in the poem--it sounded natural in each placement. I even forgot you were using a formal structured poem. As always, flawless iambs in your lines and the message is adorable--carpe diem:)
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Hi Brooke, this is a very cute poem about one of my favorite creatures--the ladybug! I loved how the moving refrain line worked itself through each stanza in the poem--it sounded natural in each placement. I even forgot you were using a formal structured poem. As always, flawless iambs in your lines and the message is adorable--carpe diem:)
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, Gail. This is one of my favorite repeating line forms. I'm thrilled you forgot I was using a formal structure, which is always the goal :-) Brooke
Comment from words
Love it, Brooke.
The lady bug of several dots is now my new role model.
I am all forb sabvoring " all that the sun alots".
You manage to get infuse real content into even your most light-hearted of poetic romps.
Sorry, I don't have any sixes left.
Hugs, your fan, d
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Love it, Brooke.
The lady bug of several dots is now my new role model.
I am all forb sabvoring " all that the sun alots".
You manage to get infuse real content into even your most light-hearted of poetic romps.
Sorry, I don't have any sixes left.
Hugs, your fan, d
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Diane :-) I had oodles of fun with this one. Miranda particularly likes my sillier poems, so while this one is supposedly for Sawyer, it's really for her :-) Brooke
Comment from krys123
Brooke, This is a marvelous an excellent poem for children to learn about ladybugs and other bugs for that matter. I find it a most pleasing read and enjoyed it very much. Your tempo and meter help cure rhythm flow smoothly throughout your poem why your rhyming was neither forced nor labored. The concept in context of your poem was rich and enlightening and had moments throughout with excellent imagery. Thank you for sharing and posting this for everyone and may all your endeavors be good ones.
Alex
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Brooke, This is a marvelous an excellent poem for children to learn about ladybugs and other bugs for that matter. I find it a most pleasing read and enjoyed it very much. Your tempo and meter help cure rhythm flow smoothly throughout your poem why your rhyming was neither forced nor labored. The concept in context of your poem was rich and enlightening and had moments throughout with excellent imagery. Thank you for sharing and posting this for everyone and may all your endeavors be good ones.
Alex
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Alex, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are so sincerely welcome my friend
Comment from Angel Debbie
Another cute little story for Sawyer.
WHat a grandma you are, Making your Daughter and Grandson such stars!
I can feel the love it runneth so deep.
Thank You for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Another cute little story for Sawyer.
WHat a grandma you are, Making your Daughter and Grandson such stars!
I can feel the love it runneth so deep.
Thank You for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Angel - they definitely are stars in my world :-) Brooke
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hi Brooke,
I always love the way you take a simple thought and bring it to the page. This verse, of the ladybug, is no exception. Solid rhyme and meter enhance the theme and make for a delightful read, well done. Another great addition to Sawyer's "Book of Rhymes" from grandma, lol. He's a lucky, little guy... best wishes, Bill
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Hi Brooke,
I always love the way you take a simple thought and bring it to the page. This verse, of the ladybug, is no exception. Solid rhyme and meter enhance the theme and make for a delightful read, well done. Another great addition to Sawyer's "Book of Rhymes" from grandma, lol. He's a lucky, little guy... best wishes, Bill
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Bill, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from LIJ Red
Love them tough mean little predators. They help control unsavory insect brethren. if you breath on one and chant
Ladybug, ladybug, fly away home your house is afire your children will burn-what was supposed to happen? I forgot, if I ever knew...rhetorical ramble..
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Love them tough mean little predators. They help control unsavory insect brethren. if you breath on one and chant
Ladybug, ladybug, fly away home your house is afire your children will burn-what was supposed to happen? I forgot, if I ever knew...rhetorical ramble..
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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LIJ, thank you so much :-) Brooke
