A Ladybug of Several Dots
A Quatern126 total reviews
Comment from Terror2s
You always mange to make nature seem whimsical and fun. Thanks do much for sharing this delightful piece. Hope you are having a nice summer. T2
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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You always mange to make nature seem whimsical and fun. Thanks do much for sharing this delightful piece. Hope you are having a nice summer. T2
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Abby, thanks so much :-) Always good to hear from you :-) Brooke
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
This is a beautiful Quatern but perfect for reading to children, you make the dots into such a lot of fun, Brooke. I think the ladybug must be envied by other insects because of its beauty and flamboyant colours. Giddy
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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This is a beautiful Quatern but perfect for reading to children, you make the dots into such a lot of fun, Brooke. I think the ladybug must be envied by other insects because of its beauty and flamboyant colours. Giddy
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Giddy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from rama devi
Nice photo. Nice poem. Over the years, I've grown to know you love ladybugs (and dandelions). LOL!
Enjoyed the playful beat and tone of this. Good internal rhyme adds harmonic notes.
Nice word play with SPOT here:
each spot a special place to stay.
Like these lines:
for who can choose a single one
when spots aplenty catch the sun?
* (not a correction--just a suggestions for dramatic pause effect, if it appeals to you)"
The sun shone down on leaves and grass
each time the ladybug would pass,(--)
this ladybug of several dots,
who ambled through her favorite spots.
*ditto above comment:
So(,) as the sun would shed its grace
on every green and leafy place,
she'd savor all the sun allots, - Love this creative line.
this ladybug of several dots.
Flawless meter and cadence. Well done!
Warm smiles,
rd
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Nice photo. Nice poem. Over the years, I've grown to know you love ladybugs (and dandelions). LOL!
Enjoyed the playful beat and tone of this. Good internal rhyme adds harmonic notes.
Nice word play with SPOT here:
each spot a special place to stay.
Like these lines:
for who can choose a single one
when spots aplenty catch the sun?
* (not a correction--just a suggestions for dramatic pause effect, if it appeals to you)"
The sun shone down on leaves and grass
each time the ladybug would pass,(--)
this ladybug of several dots,
who ambled through her favorite spots.
*ditto above comment:
So(,) as the sun would shed its grace
on every green and leafy place,
she'd savor all the sun allots, - Love this creative line.
this ladybug of several dots.
Flawless meter and cadence. Well done!
Warm smiles,
rd
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Thanks, rama devi, for your thoughtful feedback. I'll reread those lines. Brooke
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Comment from Smoothiecool
spots and dots
so cleverly put together
good enjambment to allow flow within verses
good AA/BB rhyme theme through out
great visual
good alliteration in
spot, special, stay
lots, lots
can, choose
sun, shone
sun, shed
she'd, savor, sun
good assonance sound all through with "ots"
happy bouncy read
great for children
cheers..Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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spots and dots
so cleverly put together
good enjambment to allow flow within verses
good AA/BB rhyme theme through out
great visual
good alliteration in
spot, special, stay
lots, lots
can, choose
sun, shone
sun, shed
she'd, savor, sun
good assonance sound all through with "ots"
happy bouncy read
great for children
cheers..Smoothiecool
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Faye :-) Brooke
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always welcome..SC >. Faye
Comment from nomi338
Another winner. I swear you seem to have a full storehouse of wonderful poetic expressions. Each one fresh and inventive. My hat as always is off to you and your immense talent.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Another winner. I swear you seem to have a full storehouse of wonderful poetic expressions. Each one fresh and inventive. My hat as always is off to you and your immense talent.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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nomi, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Tegan1311
A very well done poem. Your subject matter, a lady bug finding a sunny spot, is simple but it reads so well and is interesting. Great job.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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A very well done poem. Your subject matter, a lady bug finding a sunny spot, is simple but it reads so well and is interesting. Great job.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Tegan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from GWHARGIS
I don't know how you do it, but each poem reads effortlessly. You make it seem so easy when I know it isn't. Great imagery and fun spectacle. Nice rhythm and the story was magical as always.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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I don't know how you do it, but each poem reads effortlessly. You make it seem so easy when I know it isn't. Great imagery and fun spectacle. Nice rhythm and the story was magical as always.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Gretchen, thank you so much for your generous and encouraging response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from angelface2
Aw Brooke, you write such sweet poems. I love this one and the picture is the best. I recently saw a quilt with ladybugs and thought of writing a poem. Just hadn't gotten around to it. Funny how things work. LOL. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Aw Brooke, you write such sweet poems. I love this one and the picture is the best. I recently saw a quilt with ladybugs and thought of writing a poem. Just hadn't gotten around to it. Funny how things work. LOL. Miss Sally
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Miss Sally, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Eric1
What a fantastic Quatrain, the rhythm as with the rhming and flow are exceptional, I wish I could hang on to a couple of my sixes for work such as this.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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What a fantastic Quatrain, the rhythm as with the rhming and flow are exceptional, I wish I could hang on to a couple of my sixes for work such as this.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Eric, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
I enjoyed your spotty ladybug poem very much, Brooke. I liked the repeating lines, and your enjambment and alliteration always makes your poetry a joy to read.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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I enjoyed your spotty ladybug poem very much, Brooke. I liked the repeating lines, and your enjambment and alliteration always makes your poetry a joy to read.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Karyn, thank you so much :-) Brooke
