A Ladybug of Several Dots
A Quatern126 total reviews
Comment from Warren Rodgers
Cute poem once again, you are so good at these you may want to consider teaching a class. :) Great wording throughout, lots of alliteration in personifying the ladybug; Unique word choices like 'ambled/ambling" and "aplenty". I don't know why but it makes me think of the old commercial for "good 'n plenty" candy. As always a pleasure to read and review. Sorry, I have no sixers left.
All the best, Rodger
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Cute poem once again, you are so good at these you may want to consider teaching a class. :) Great wording throughout, lots of alliteration in personifying the ladybug; Unique word choices like 'ambled/ambling" and "aplenty". I don't know why but it makes me think of the old commercial for "good 'n plenty" candy. As always a pleasure to read and review. Sorry, I have no sixers left.
All the best, Rodger
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Rodger, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from marijmd
I can feel the sun and the lovely day when the lady bug came out to play. It has great meter - a very lighthearted ditty you crafted!
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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I can feel the sun and the lovely day when the lady bug came out to play. It has great meter - a very lighthearted ditty you crafted!
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Thank you, marijmd, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Deniz22
I'm running out of adjectives with which to express my admiration for your work and in imminent danger of becoming a "groupie", which I assume, you already have many! How's that for a run-on sentence? LOL Dennis
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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I'm running out of adjectives with which to express my admiration for your work and in imminent danger of becoming a "groupie", which I assume, you already have many! How's that for a run-on sentence? LOL Dennis
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Dennis, thank you for your lovely sentence and your generous rating :-) Brooke
Comment from N.K. Wagner
We get an abundance of ladybugs every fall and winter. And they move indoors. Sometimes by the hundreds. But they keep the houseplants clean over the winter months and love sunny windows. There are just so many crunchy corpses to vacuum up. I like your vision better. :D Nancy
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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We get an abundance of ladybugs every fall and winter. And they move indoors. Sometimes by the hundreds. But they keep the houseplants clean over the winter months and love sunny windows. There are just so many crunchy corpses to vacuum up. I like your vision better. :D Nancy
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Nancy, thank you so much :-)Crunchy corpses, now that would make for a different kind of poem. LOL Brooke
Comment from RGstar
I like the theme of nature with these last two poems, colorful and cute. A nice way of highlighting nature with a close up simple effect.
A nice aabb structure again with good end rhymes.
Best wishes,
Rgstar
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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I like the theme of nature with these last two poems, colorful and cute. A nice way of highlighting nature with a close up simple effect.
A nice aabb structure again with good end rhymes.
Best wishes,
Rgstar
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Thank you, RG, for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Sanku
Children would love this poem because all kinds of bugs attract them at the age of 3-5.This is a lovely poem with smart upbeat rhythm with the repeated rhyme scheme of 'ot'.Children would find it easy to sing or recite.I liked the bug's attitude -to savour all that the sun allots.there is a lesson for us . Thank you for this fun poem
I have always wondered why they are called ladybirds( that's what we were taught to call them in English -it is the British name for it ,I suppose)Ladybug is better ,though it does not explain the 'lady'.And they are not bugs either (as per my scientist friend' definition) they are beetles !
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Children would love this poem because all kinds of bugs attract them at the age of 3-5.This is a lovely poem with smart upbeat rhythm with the repeated rhyme scheme of 'ot'.Children would find it easy to sing or recite.I liked the bug's attitude -to savour all that the sun allots.there is a lesson for us . Thank you for this fun poem
I have always wondered why they are called ladybirds( that's what we were taught to call them in English -it is the British name for it ,I suppose)Ladybug is better ,though it does not explain the 'lady'.And they are not bugs either (as per my scientist friend' definition) they are beetles !
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Sanku, thank you so much :-) I don't get why the Brits call them birds either. LOL And as for the lady, who knows? LOL Brooke
Comment from Jay Squires
You write with such verve and ease, Brooke, your grandkids and any kids who read this or have it read to them ... must love you.
I can imagine the little tyke opposite your poem is looking down at the ladybug doing her thing, perhaps listening to your words like a melody in the background.
Something sure has his attention!
You are of professional caliber, Brooke, as this once again proves.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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You write with such verve and ease, Brooke, your grandkids and any kids who read this or have it read to them ... must love you.
I can imagine the little tyke opposite your poem is looking down at the ladybug doing her thing, perhaps listening to your words like a melody in the background.
Something sure has his attention!
You are of professional caliber, Brooke, as this once again proves.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Jay, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from amada
Such a lovely rhyming work! I like the theme of lovely curiosity,enlightenment and charm. Great Quatern style "this ladybug of several dots..."
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Such a lovely rhyming work! I like the theme of lovely curiosity,enlightenment and charm. Great Quatern style "this ladybug of several dots..."
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Nancy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from livelylinda
Brooke: great poem with lots of fun rhyme. I'm wondering how much time you are spending in the garden, chasing down all these bugs you are writing about! LOL Linda
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Brooke: great poem with lots of fun rhyme. I'm wondering how much time you are spending in the garden, chasing down all these bugs you are writing about! LOL Linda
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Linda, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from His Grayness
Dear Brooke: I like the spunky and upbeat rhythms of this delightful poem. The photo is perfect and as usual, the entire package is simply exceptional....and fun! Vance sorry to be out of sixes......Friday you see!!
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Dear Brooke: I like the spunky and upbeat rhythms of this delightful poem. The photo is perfect and as usual, the entire package is simply exceptional....and fun! Vance sorry to be out of sixes......Friday you see!!
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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His Grayness, thank you so much :-) Brooke
