A Ladybug of Several Dots
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Comment from DanielEkine
The use of alliteration in this work stands out. Great job. A well-crafted rhyme.
"dots/spots/day/stay.
lots/dots/one/sun?
grass/pass/dots/spots.
grace/place/allots/dots."
I'm always humbled to read your work.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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The use of alliteration in this work stands out. Great job. A well-crafted rhyme.
"dots/spots/day/stay.
lots/dots/one/sun?
grass/pass/dots/spots.
grace/place/allots/dots."
I'm always humbled to read your work.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Daniel, thank you for your most thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
Sound lovely, soaking up the sun like that lady bug with no cares in the world. I loved this and you captured what being a lady bug might be like
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Sound lovely, soaking up the sun like that lady bug with no cares in the world. I loved this and you captured what being a lady bug might be like
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Thank you, ExperiencingLiphe, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your abundant "ots" sounds and lighthearted descriptions of the ladybug's travels. Oh, ladybug, ladybug, fly my way! Thanks for the fun and happy weekend- Joan
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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I enjoyed your abundant "ots" sounds and lighthearted descriptions of the ladybug's travels. Oh, ladybug, ladybug, fly my way! Thanks for the fun and happy weekend- Joan
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Joan, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Pearl Edwards
The ladybug, a very special little creature and I think its her spots that attract us. Great rhyming in this poem as this little ladybug ambles through her day.
valda
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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The ladybug, a very special little creature and I think its her spots that attract us. Great rhyming in this poem as this little ladybug ambles through her day.
valda
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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valda, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Acquired Taste
The second poem of yours today and I could simply copy what I wrote on the caterpillar offering. I hope you are keeping these in specific chapters (bugs, butterflies, etc.) for your babe. I know he will treasure these one day.
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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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The second poem of yours today and I could simply copy what I wrote on the caterpillar offering. I hope you are keeping these in specific chapters (bugs, butterflies, etc.) for your babe. I know he will treasure these one day.
AT=/
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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AT, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello adewpearl, Brooke, A very, very sweet poem. I do love ladybugs. Please send one my way 'cause my Granny use to say ... if ladybug lands on you, you're going to come into money. So Brooke, please free the farm - lol.
I especially liked:
So as the sun would shed its grace
on every green and leafy place,
she'd savor all the sun allots,
this ladybug of several dots.
(Great imagery ... now, Brooke, send that ladybug my way 'cause there are a few things that I would like to savor as well ... and now would be nice while I'm still able to savor and remember what I just savored - lol.)
Thank you for making me smile. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Hello adewpearl, Brooke, A very, very sweet poem. I do love ladybugs. Please send one my way 'cause my Granny use to say ... if ladybug lands on you, you're going to come into money. So Brooke, please free the farm - lol.
I especially liked:
So as the sun would shed its grace
on every green and leafy place,
she'd savor all the sun allots,
this ladybug of several dots.
(Great imagery ... now, Brooke, send that ladybug my way 'cause there are a few things that I would like to savor as well ... and now would be nice while I'm still able to savor and remember what I just savored - lol.)
Thank you for making me smile. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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coming into money - well, I had better find a couple then, one for me and one to share with you :-) Thanks so much, Late Bloomer :-) Brooke
Comment from sibhus
Ladybug, or those annoying Japanese beetles? Well, anything Japaness is annoying. I digress, wonder poem, simple and touching with this simple travls of a Ladybug. They are pretty with their multiple spots on red. Good stuff there, Brooke.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Ladybug, or those annoying Japanese beetles? Well, anything Japaness is annoying. I digress, wonder poem, simple and touching with this simple travls of a Ladybug. They are pretty with their multiple spots on red. Good stuff there, Brooke.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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sibhus, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from HAREEDS
An excellent poem up to the poet's usual high standards. You have a good knack for writing children's poetry, I think you've found your niche in your writing life.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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An excellent poem up to the poet's usual high standards. You have a good knack for writing children's poetry, I think you've found your niche in your writing life.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Hareeds, thank you so much for your thoughtful response to this poem. I appreciate your generous six stars also :-) Brooke
Comment from elchupakabra
Another perfectly crafted piece. The wordplay with the spots and dots works well and I thought you did a great job with more subtle alliterations to help with the flow and pacing of this work. You seem to be in a buggy mood the last few writes lol. Great work and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Another perfectly crafted piece. The wordplay with the spots and dots works well and I thought you did a great job with more subtle alliterations to help with the flow and pacing of this work. You seem to be in a buggy mood the last few writes lol. Great work and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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elchupakabra, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is a great poem about the ladybug, Brooke, it is simple enough for children to memorise and recite themselves, which can only be a good thing. We call them the 'Ladybird' over here, but they are the same thing, both are red with black spots. Another nice one! :) Sandra.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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This is a great poem about the ladybug, Brooke, it is simple enough for children to memorise and recite themselves, which can only be a good thing. We call them the 'Ladybird' over here, but they are the same thing, both are red with black spots. Another nice one! :) Sandra.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, Sandra, for your generous response to this poem. I am still pondering why you guys call a bug a bird. LOL :-) Brooke
