As Fragile is the Love
a pantoum sonnet - see contest rules124 total reviews
Comment from elchupakabra
Do you ever get tired of hearing me say the same things over and over? I do. You're just that good though, that I really have nothing to offer you in the way of constructive criticism. I've yet to read one of your writes that wasn't perfectly crafted where I could even offer a way to improve. You're truly gifted and I'm glad to know your writings. How is a book deal coming along? Anything out already?
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Do you ever get tired of hearing me say the same things over and over? I do. You're just that good though, that I really have nothing to offer you in the way of constructive criticism. I've yet to read one of your writes that wasn't perfectly crafted where I could even offer a way to improve. You're truly gifted and I'm glad to know your writings. How is a book deal coming along? Anything out already?
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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elchupakabra, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from James Dooney
This is really good here once again and you convey your message so well here. Its short, sweet and I loved it so I did. Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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This is really good here once again and you convey your message so well here. Its short, sweet and I loved it so I did. Well done.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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James, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Fleedleflump
A wonderful evocation of the helplessness of love and how we follow our hearts regardless other concerns. You've done a particularly fine job considering the restrictions in place here. Combining two forms often results in rain wrecks but yours has reached its destination and this passenger is happy :-).
Apologies for the clumsy metaphor, lol.
Mike
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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A wonderful evocation of the helplessness of love and how we follow our hearts regardless other concerns. You've done a particularly fine job considering the restrictions in place here. Combining two forms often results in rain wrecks but yours has reached its destination and this passenger is happy :-).
Apologies for the clumsy metaphor, lol.
Mike
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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LOL - thank you, Mike :-) Just finished reading your Archer entry - that is really really good! :-) Brooke
Comment from Bryan G
Beautiful thoughts on love. There is no other that I can pursue. You have captured the power of love in that phrase. That sums up love for me. As always hats of to Sawyer for his part in helping to tell your story
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Beautiful thoughts on love. There is no other that I can pursue. You have captured the power of love in that phrase. That sums up love for me. As always hats of to Sawyer for his part in helping to tell your story
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Bryan, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Bill Schott
This a terrific pantoum sonnet which maintains the gentle sense of passion as it flows in iambic pentameter and fulfill the format requirements of the combined structures.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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This a terrific pantoum sonnet which maintains the gentle sense of passion as it flows in iambic pentameter and fulfill the format requirements of the combined structures.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Bill, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from J.Byers
What a beautiful form, and, as far as I can see, perfectly written according to the contest rules, and the nature of this form. Reading love poetry is an especially interesting past time, as some people write about love as a powerful, strong force, not easily broken, while others describe it as something both beautiful and fragile, like a budding flower, easily crushed with one wrong step. While the poem is in the style of the latter, I love it as much as any powerful love poem.
Blessings,
~ J.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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What a beautiful form, and, as far as I can see, perfectly written according to the contest rules, and the nature of this form. Reading love poetry is an especially interesting past time, as some people write about love as a powerful, strong force, not easily broken, while others describe it as something both beautiful and fragile, like a budding flower, easily crushed with one wrong step. While the poem is in the style of the latter, I love it as much as any powerful love poem.
Blessings,
~ J.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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J, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Lulube
You are so great at these types of poetry styles where you have to repeat lines in certain orders. Seems all to confusing to me. Good spill on this crush, as seen for Sawyer.
good luck in the contest
lulube
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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You are so great at these types of poetry styles where you have to repeat lines in certain orders. Seems all to confusing to me. Good spill on this crush, as seen for Sawyer.
good luck in the contest
lulube
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Lulube, thank you so much for your kind contest wishes and generous rating. I do love repeating line forms :-) Brooke
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lol welcome and good luck\
lulube
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, brooke, you did an excellent job writing this pantoum sonnet about the love that is fragile and precious. i just love that adorable picture. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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this is very well written, brooke, you did an excellent job writing this pantoum sonnet about the love that is fragile and precious. i just love that adorable picture. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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sweetwoodjax, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from fairy77
Aww first love:)I remember an Oliver. I'm returning to fanstory and I've missed you all. I loved this and the pic was adorable:)Well done with this pantoum sonnet very challenging style:)Happy Summer friend. Congrats on six!beth fairy77.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Aww first love:)I remember an Oliver. I'm returning to fanstory and I've missed you all. I loved this and the pic was adorable:)Well done with this pantoum sonnet very challenging style:)Happy Summer friend. Congrats on six!beth fairy77.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Beth, thank you so much :-) I'm so glad you've returned. I appreciate your generous sixth star and thoughtful comments. :-) Brooke
Comment from missjosi
Very sweet and lovely poem.......you meld your words together beautifully ....... a true master......... A sweet flowing poem...... Excellent :)
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Very sweet and lovely poem.......you meld your words together beautifully ....... a true master......... A sweet flowing poem...... Excellent :)
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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missjosi, thank you so much :-) Brooke
