As Fragile is the Love
a pantoum sonnet - see contest rules124 total reviews
Comment from ArtGal
Oh Brooke, this picture is just so precious! What a gentleman holding an umbrella for his true love, Chloe! His mother is teaching him well, lol. BTW, it's so much easier to give kisses this way, and hide them from others. Wow, you did a great job on this poetry form, and I'm sure it wasn't that easy. I love the wording very much, and truly wish you the best of luck in this contest. I would be quite surprised if I don't see a win on this. . .Sharon one. . .Sharon
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Oh Brooke, this picture is just so precious! What a gentleman holding an umbrella for his true love, Chloe! His mother is teaching him well, lol. BTW, it's so much easier to give kisses this way, and hide them from others. Wow, you did a great job on this poetry form, and I'm sure it wasn't that easy. I love the wording very much, and truly wish you the best of luck in this contest. I would be quite surprised if I don't see a win on this. . .Sharon one. . .Sharon
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Sharon, thank you so much :-) Miranda says she watched Chloe lower the umbrella a couple of feet, as if she had this intimate encounter all planned out. LOL :-) Brooke
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Too funny, lol! Sorry but having trouble with my computer so will write more when I can.
Comment from Nosha17
When love is really true, it withstands all the upheavals and cannot be doubted. Your choice of words and
rhymes was lovely and most befitting the sentiments of the poem. Most enjoyable and good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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When love is really true, it withstands all the upheavals and cannot be doubted. Your choice of words and
rhymes was lovely and most befitting the sentiments of the poem. Most enjoyable and good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Faye, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from w.j.debi
I really like what you have done with the Pantoum Sonnet form, and you do it so eloquently. Looks like perfect iambic pentameter to me. The thoughts flow well from one line to the next as you build upon the repeated lines. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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I really like what you have done with the Pantoum Sonnet form, and you do it so eloquently. Looks like perfect iambic pentameter to me. The thoughts flow well from one line to the next as you build upon the repeated lines. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Debi, thank you so much :-) I appreciate your review and kind contest wishes :-) Brooke
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
What a precious poem this is. With the repeating lines of the Pantoum Sonnet you communicate both the strength and the fragility of this love - as well as the inevitability. "There is no other course I can pursue." Love, Jeanie
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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What a precious poem this is. With the repeating lines of the Pantoum Sonnet you communicate both the strength and the fragility of this love - as well as the inevitability. "There is no other course I can pursue." Love, Jeanie
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Jeanie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brooke,
This is another great poem. I doubt that I'd ever try to write a Pantoum Sonnet. I generally just write poetry from my heart. Anyway, the picture of Sawyer and his girlfriend fits the poem perfectly.
Kat
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Hi Brooke,
This is another great poem. I doubt that I'd ever try to write a Pantoum Sonnet. I generally just write poetry from my heart. Anyway, the picture of Sawyer and his girlfriend fits the poem perfectly.
Kat
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Kat, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Brooke,
A very nice pantoum I think and it carries your message beautifully. Another little bit of philosophy for Sawyer when he's old enough to appreciate it.
Patrick
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Hi Brooke,
A very nice pantoum I think and it carries your message beautifully. Another little bit of philosophy for Sawyer when he's old enough to appreciate it.
Patrick
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Patrick, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the sonnet rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with trust/to...what/withhold...course/can...not/nature/...be/bold...will/wither. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Good use of the sonnet rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with trust/to...what/withhold...course/can...not/nature/...be/bold...will/wither. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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righteous riter, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from ravenblack
Love just got the sake of it without expecting any return, a fragile love part of the design that cares enough to keep caring even if the object of that love slips away. Like the love of God for mankind.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Love just got the sake of it without expecting any return, a fragile love part of the design that cares enough to keep caring even if the object of that love slips away. Like the love of God for mankind.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Thank you, ravenblack, for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
The combination of these forms is a delightful poem to read and enjoy, Brooke. The power and emotion of your words, along with the rhyme and meter, was even more enjoyable during the second reading. I wish you best wishes in the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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The combination of these forms is a delightful poem to read and enjoy, Brooke. The power and emotion of your words, along with the rhyme and meter, was even more enjoyable during the second reading. I wish you best wishes in the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Karyn, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Auroraboreal800
The picture is really delightful! As it is the poem, in both Sonnet form and as a Pantoum. I love the beautiful message. Good Luck in the contest.
Great job Brooke!
:)
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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The picture is really delightful! As it is the poem, in both Sonnet form and as a Pantoum. I love the beautiful message. Good Luck in the contest.
Great job Brooke!
:)
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Thanks so very much, Aurora :-) Brooke
