As Fragile is the Love
a pantoum sonnet - see contest rules124 total reviews
Comment from BLACKDYKE
So simple, such a joy. I love all
poetry whether formal or unconstrained
by rules and format. I also enjoy
repetitiveness as long as it serves
the purpose. Nice picture to compliment.
I do like to see a picture!! Eric
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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So simple, such a joy. I love all
poetry whether formal or unconstrained
by rules and format. I also enjoy
repetitiveness as long as it serves
the purpose. Nice picture to compliment.
I do like to see a picture!! Eric
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Eric, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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My pleasure
Comment from ronnie k
"As fragile is the love I trust to you, there is no other course I can pursue" a lovely poem that tells of the love is blind and never assigned, love is just because.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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"As fragile is the love I trust to you, there is no other course I can pursue" a lovely poem that tells of the love is blind and never assigned, love is just because.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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ronnie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hello Brooke,
I loved your repeating lines in this tender write of love and its consequences. I was struck by these two thoughts, "There is no other course I can pursue" and "I can't refuse to follow love's design". Those statements say everything to me, for to do otherwise, would be to consign oneself to a life of loneliness. Love, is indeed, a fragile gift we give to another in hopes of reciprocation.
Nice work with this thought... and best of luck with your entry, Bill
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Hello Brooke,
I loved your repeating lines in this tender write of love and its consequences. I was struck by these two thoughts, "There is no other course I can pursue" and "I can't refuse to follow love's design". Those statements say everything to me, for to do otherwise, would be to consign oneself to a life of loneliness. Love, is indeed, a fragile gift we give to another in hopes of reciprocation.
Nice work with this thought... and best of luck with your entry, Bill
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Thank you so very much, Bill :-) Brooke
Comment from poetbear
Precious indeed.
Reads and flows well.
Very touching and moving.
Makes sense and reads well.
Beautifully written with a stunning photo.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Precious indeed.
Reads and flows well.
Very touching and moving.
Makes sense and reads well.
Beautifully written with a stunning photo.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Maddy, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Jackarrie
I love the sentiments in this wonderfully written poem Your choice of words are magic. It rhymes and flows beautifully. The image is just gorgeous, Most enjoyable and good luck in the contest.
well done
Mary
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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I love the sentiments in this wonderfully written poem Your choice of words are magic. It rhymes and flows beautifully. The image is just gorgeous, Most enjoyable and good luck in the contest.
well done
Mary
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Mary, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from mfowler
You've mastered another form in this pantoum, Brooke. The structure and meter work well, the sentiment in the message is a real truism of relationships, and I got a real sense of sincerity from the reeled lines like:I still entrust what I cannot withhold. Well done.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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You've mastered another form in this pantoum, Brooke. The structure and meter work well, the sentiment in the message is a real truism of relationships, and I got a real sense of sincerity from the reeled lines like:I still entrust what I cannot withhold. Well done.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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mfowler, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'As Fragile is the Love' is an extremely well-written and heart-warming piece. True love is blessed by God. It was a pleasure to review this talented poet's work.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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'As Fragile is the Love' is an extremely well-written and heart-warming piece. True love is blessed by God. It was a pleasure to review this talented poet's work.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Duchess, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Brooke, as always you're very welcome
:-) the Duchess
Comment from Ekim777
I enjoy writing a Pantoum however flawed it may be. When the repeated line slips neatly into place, it can be magic. Is the earnestness of our poet driven by the polish of her phrases or by the seductive seriousness of her subject matter. How does one define love. Is there something eternal about it, or is it something as fragile and as transforming as life itself. I look forward to a sequel.
-Ekim777
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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I enjoy writing a Pantoum however flawed it may be. When the repeated line slips neatly into place, it can be magic. Is the earnestness of our poet driven by the polish of her phrases or by the seductive seriousness of her subject matter. How does one define love. Is there something eternal about it, or is it something as fragile and as transforming as life itself. I look forward to a sequel.
-Ekim777
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Ekim, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Aussie
Best wishes for your pantaloons entry; lovely words that tell a story of two hearts beating together through all kinds of weather. I did enjoy this poem - let us hope that the two little people remain good friends for a very long time. Well done nana. Congratulations on your win!!
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Best wishes for your pantaloons entry; lovely words that tell a story of two hearts beating together through all kinds of weather. I did enjoy this poem - let us hope that the two little people remain good friends for a very long time. Well done nana. Congratulations on your win!!
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Kay, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Leineco
Again, with the misleading picture ;-)
(which seriously belies the grown-up nature of this piece)
for hearts will wither if they're not consigned,
I can't refuse to follow love's design
and I would surely die if you were gone.
poetically structured - or simply a declaration
these words speak volumes about the nature of bonded love.
Very nicely done - I wish I had been a little thriftier with my sixes this week :-(
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Again, with the misleading picture ;-)
(which seriously belies the grown-up nature of this piece)
for hearts will wither if they're not consigned,
I can't refuse to follow love's design
and I would surely die if you were gone.
poetically structured - or simply a declaration
these words speak volumes about the nature of bonded love.
Very nicely done - I wish I had been a little thriftier with my sixes this week :-(
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Leineco, thank you so very much :-) I appreciate your generous comments :-) Brooke
