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As Fragile is the Love

a pantoum sonnet - see contest rules

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Comment from CR Delport
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The pic of the Cute Little One and his girlfriend is just too cute. Between your beautiful writing and the pic assist, others stand no chance :) Good luck.

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
    CR,thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from rjuselius
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this is a fabulous entry for a pantoum sonnet! it is again as light as a feather:)your poems are pure genius!
thank you for sharing!
good luck in contest!

rebekka x

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
    Rebekka, thank you so much - I'm honored by your comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Domino 2
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I've also reserved a spot in this one, Brooke, but I keep putting off even the thought of writing is, as it seems too difficult to me to get right.

You've chosen the perfect theme, in love and trust, which most can relate to, and your poem expresses that extremely well.

Grrr - I just can't get my head around these necessary bloody repeat lines.

Excellent.

Good luck and best wishes, Ray


 Comment Written 16-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
    Ray, the looming deadline finally motivated me - I've been trying to cook up an idea forever. I love the pantoum form, but adding it to the sonnet can be tricky :-) I'm sure yours will be brilliant. Thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Preston McWhorter
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Hi,:-) Brooke,
"As Fragile as the Love" is an exceptionally exceptional piece of verse. Not only is it a finely crafted poem with excellent meter and rhyme, figurative language and imagery (day withholds its light from dawn) but it carries a message that resonates (follow love's design). We must some times be bold and take chances or we will miss out on Life.
Preston

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
    Preston, thank you so very much for your encouragement and generosity :-) Brooke
Comment from Tomes Johnston
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This is yet another beautiful poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. Love is indeed a wonderful thing. I am glad that I have found it at last.

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
    Tomes, thank you so much :-) Brooke
reply by Tomes Johnston on 22-Jun-2014
    My pleasure
Comment from visionary1234
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LOVE this pantoum sonnet from you, Brooke. Always fun to see you writing in the more complex forms - you show us all how it's done! Good luck with this one - I have an entry in as well!
:)Sharyn

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
    Sharyn, thanks so much. The pantoum is at the top of my list of wonderful repeating line forms :-) Brooke
Comment from words
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I am so sorry that I am out of sixes, Brooke. This is a haunting and deeply romantic poem.

I especially love the repeating line:" for hearts will wither if not consigned".

I am happy to say that I consign my heart on a daily basis.

Hugs, d

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
    Thank you so much, Diane - I signed up for this contest ages ago and finally had to bite the bullet and write - nothing like a looming deadline for motivation :-) and nothing like Sawyer for inspiration :-) Brooke
Comment from Gert sherwood
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So true Brooke one must trust when the are in love
this part tells it so--
with out trust

hearts will wither if they're not consigned.
Though it is not my nature to be bold,
I can't refuse to follow love's design,

Gert

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
    Thank you so much for your thoughtful reading, Gert :-) Brooke
Comment from Dean Kuch
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Such a wonderfully composed, well written Pantoum Sonnet, Brooke. This is a tricky poem to master, at least for yours truly. However, not only do you pull it off with an obvious ease and a style that we all on this site have come to know and love, you manage to weave your well chosen words into an eloquent poetic proclamation of innocence and love.

Excellent rhyme, in perfect 10 syllable lines set to an iambic pentameter, this should do exceptionally well in the contest's outcome.

Great work, and good luck!

~DK~

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
    Dean, thank you so much :-) Brooke
reply by Dean Kuch on 18-Jun-2014
    My pleasure as always, Brooke...:>}
Comment from InterestingRon
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Hi Brooke,
A lovely love poem.
Although I suspect these love poems will give Sawyer and Chloe red-faces when they are teenagers? LOL
Good luck in the contest!
Ron z

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
    Ron, I am sure we have a huge collection of photos that will embarrass them both at a later date. There are a bunch of them with her kissing his cheek or him kissing hers. He has learned from his hispanic nanny to tell her, Te amo, mamacita. LOL Brooke