Comment from visionary1234

Excellent

ouch! an unusually maudlin one from you Steve ... getting a bit cold in Kiwiland are we? Seriously though, a lovely triolet ... those 'prowling beasts of blame' have a lot to answer for, don't they? Well done.
:)Sharyn

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014

Bloody beasts - they get everywhere. Spend most of their time lounging near the fire, absorbing all the heat.

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

solid rhyming in good triolet pattern
good use of alliteration in phrases like dispel the darkness and beasts of blame and keep me confined
effective use of the form's repeating lines
a warm invitation to love in good triolet form and employing excellent imagery
Brooke

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014

Thanks, Brooke!

Steve

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This is a truly lovely Triolet. The message is soft and soothing like the candle flame in the picture. You have met and exceeded contest expectations with this offering. I wish you all the best in the judging and thank you so much for sharing this with me.

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from acerisestory

Excellent

The triolet is a new form of poetry to me. You've done a lovely job, it appears. Your rhyming is very nice and you've used perfect iambic pentameter. I like the alliteration you've used: dispel/darkness; beasts/blame. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from nancyjam

Exceptional

This is an amazing example of a Triolet. I
love the way you used punctuation to change the
meaning of the first line as it flows through the poem.
Perfect rhyme and meter and meaningful thoughts
conveyed.
I know this will do well in the contest! nancy

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014

Thanks, Nancy.

Yes, I like to adapt that line where I can without changing the actual words.

I'm glad you thought it worked well here.

Steve

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

A very strong contender for this competition, i love the way this triolet works and flows, the rhyming is nigh on perfect and I personally feel it has a strong chance!

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014

Thanks, Eric!

Steve

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

A nice calming, soothing style of poem, written with sincerity and warmth of feeling. Your rhymes worked well and you made excellent choice of words to express your thoughts. A smooth and enjoyable read. Good luck in the contest. Faye

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014

Thanks, Faye!

Steve

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

This is very well written in the Triolet format. It has a smooth flow of words, making for a very romantic read. Good luck in your contest.

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

reply by c_lucas on 19-Jun-2014

You're welcome, Steve. Charlie

Comment from Kenneth Schaal

Excellent

Jeez, I haven't done one of these in ages. I think you did a nice job here keeping the thought, rhythm, rhyme going with some good enjambment. Good luck. Kenny

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from Mark Valentine

Exceptional

Love how you vary the punctuation to give the same line different meanings. I also love how this can be read as a romantic love poem or a spiritual poem. I'ver read several of the entries for this contest - this one's by far the best I've read. Just the right amount of alliteration and the "ward off the prowling beasts of blame...' line is fantastic. Well done!

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014

Mark, thanks so much for the great review and the six stars. These contests are always hotly contested so I am sure there will be a few more masterpieces to come out of the woodwork yet, but I'll keep my fingers crossed.

Steve