Bright Flame
A Triolet79 total reviews
Comment from Lulube
A quiet cry for help. Just an arm around you to feel safe again. To help pass through the guilt and blame.
Excellent entry for this contest. The reader can feel this hand out, hoping it will be grabbed.
good work
lulube
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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A quiet cry for help. Just an arm around you to feel safe again. To help pass through the guilt and blame.
Excellent entry for this contest. The reader can feel this hand out, hoping it will be grabbed.
good work
lulube
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Thank you , Lulube...
Somehow many readers don't seem to notice the plea for a comforting touch...
Steve
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welcome Steve
If you know about the horoscope signs, I am a Pisces. The one that has the deepest emotions, intuition, capable of feeling the pain of others-sometimes more than they themselves.
lulube
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
you have your rhyme and repeat lines in place
your well chosen words allow the reader to see and feel the bright flame's you call upon to ward off any evil in your life that will confine you
good rhyme
good enjambment
cheers..Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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good luck in the contest
you have your rhyme and repeat lines in place
your well chosen words allow the reader to see and feel the bright flame's you call upon to ward off any evil in your life that will confine you
good rhyme
good enjambment
cheers..Smoothiecool
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Thank, SC
Steve
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welcome..SC
Comment from akulkumol
Very well written Triolet with smooth word flow, making it very romantic giving a warm feeling. Wise Choice of words.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Very well written Triolet with smooth word flow, making it very romantic giving a warm feeling. Wise Choice of words.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from fairydancer
Very well done!
Liking the change of punctuation in the fourth and seventh lines.
Great repeating lines ~ smooth and changeable in the context.
Very smooth flow throughout too.
Great stuff ~ Cally :)
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Very well done!
Liking the change of punctuation in the fourth and seventh lines.
Great repeating lines ~ smooth and changeable in the context.
Very smooth flow throughout too.
Great stuff ~ Cally :)
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Cally.
Yes, I do like to fiddle with the punctuation and meaning of those repeating lines.
Steve
Comment from Moh Ana
Lovely triolet! Simple yet touching! Wonderful rhyming too! Greatly enjoyed reading it, especially the call to "ward off the prowling beasts of blame that stalk" us every day so we can be free of "guilt and shame"! Such is the power of the warmth of "love's bright flame" indeed! Many thanks for sharing, and all the best for the contest! :)
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Lovely triolet! Simple yet touching! Wonderful rhyming too! Greatly enjoyed reading it, especially the call to "ward off the prowling beasts of blame that stalk" us every day so we can be free of "guilt and shame"! Such is the power of the warmth of "love's bright flame" indeed! Many thanks for sharing, and all the best for the contest! :)
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Thanks for the kind words and for the great review.
Steve
Comment from Domino 2
Excellent enjambment to add flow to the top meter and unforced rhymes of this triolet.
I particularly like:
'ward off the prowling beasts of blame'
Excellent plea in a metaphor for love to be renewed and rescue your despair.
Best wishes, Ray
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Excellent enjambment to add flow to the top meter and unforced rhymes of this triolet.
I particularly like:
'ward off the prowling beasts of blame'
Excellent plea in a metaphor for love to be renewed and rescue your despair.
Best wishes, Ray
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Ray, thanks for the excellent review.
Steve
Comment from fairy77
Wow! Liked dispel the darkness from my mind:)This is beautifully presented and a lovely triolet. I only ever wrote two:)Nice job! beth fairy77.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Wow! Liked dispel the darkness from my mind:)This is beautifully presented and a lovely triolet. I only ever wrote two:)Nice job! beth fairy77.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Beth
Steve
Comment from ishita90
Your writing is truly full of warmth. Only love can enlighten and warm our lives against all kind of darkness..! well said and I liked it a lot! :)
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Your writing is truly full of warmth. Only love can enlighten and warm our lives against all kind of darkness..! well said and I liked it a lot! :)
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from dennis0530
Nicely penned with feelings of want and longing.
By using this format, the writer is given the chance to repeatedly invite his loved one with "come warm me" with a soft persistence.
It is a an urging in search of comfort and clarity.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Nicely penned with feelings of want and longing.
By using this format, the writer is given the chance to repeatedly invite his loved one with "come warm me" with a soft persistence.
It is a an urging in search of comfort and clarity.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from krys123
Steve, first a blog like to wish you good luck in the Tiolet poetry contest because this is an excellent entry. Even use of rhymes which help with your rhythm to flow smoothly throughout your poem and rhymes that are neither are labored or forced. The pictures quite blurry however what I do see definitely compliments your poem. I do love the picture though as it sets a metaphor within your poem. Thank you so much for sharing them posting this for everyone and may you have a good one and all your endeavors.
Alex
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Steve, first a blog like to wish you good luck in the Tiolet poetry contest because this is an excellent entry. Even use of rhymes which help with your rhythm to flow smoothly throughout your poem and rhymes that are neither are labored or forced. The pictures quite blurry however what I do see definitely compliments your poem. I do love the picture though as it sets a metaphor within your poem. Thank you so much for sharing them posting this for everyone and may you have a good one and all your endeavors.
Alex
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Alex, thanks so much for your warm review.
Steve
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You are so sincerely welcome Steve
