Comment from BLACKDYKE

Excellent

Another gem kiwi' I love this repetitive
magic rhyming and rhythm. Very deserving
of it's all time best accolade. I also
like the approximate rhyming of 'confined
and mind' it works well for me. Eric

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014

Thanks for the kind words, Eric.

Steve

reply by BLACKDYKE on 20-Jun-2014

My pleasure

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

A well written triolet, with a plea to the flame of love to help you forget deep hurts. A strong repeating line and good rhymes. The image goes well with your poem

Well done,
good luck in the contest
Mary

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014

Thanks, Mary!

Comment from Righteous Riter

Excellent

Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with blame/flame. Good alliteration with warm/with...dispel/darkness...my/mind...me/my...beasts/blame. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from persevere

Excellent

This is a strong plea for love's flame to over-ride a past riddled with guilt and shame. You have indicated that just as a fire would burn waste so love's balm can dispel darkness. A well written piece with fine imagery.

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from mumsyone

Excellent

Nicely done, Steve. I like your repeated/changed line: Come, warm me now with love's bright flame,
come warm me. Now, with love's bright flame,
Come warm me now. With love's bright flame,
I haven't seen this done so well before.

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014

Thanks, Mumsy.

Yes, I like to fiddle with that line to try for another layer of meaning.

Steve

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Nicely written triolet that is asking for the power of love to calm worried, doubts and fears.


The flame in the picture is fuzzy and seems to need something to bring it to full strength, like the love in the poem is needed to make the person strong and whole/

Keep writing.

Joan

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014

Thanks, Joan.

Fuzzy, maybe, but still impying warmth and comfort I am sure.

Steve

reply by dragonpoet on 19-Jun-2014

No problem, Steve. Yes, the warmth you are looking for physically and psychologically with love.

Joan

Comment from comanalbert

Excellent

A flame can warm you ,can light the way or can light your mind. It can help you think more clearly and you can be embrace. The way you describe bright flame is awesome. Poem is a very "hot" and I was glad to read it.

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

You've got a strong central message in "Come, warm me now with love's bright flame,dispel the darkness from my mind." It's built on strong imagery and is well supported by the reeling phrases and lines that follow. Good work. Good luck!

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from duchessofdrumborg

Excellent

'Bright Flame' is an exceptionally well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to review.

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

reply by duchessofdrumborg on 18-Jun-2014

Steve, you're more than welcome.

Best wishes, the Duchess

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

To have the company of a loved one, or lover will surely ease the pain, especially by the fire with a warm drink. You create a wonderful coziness. Nice rhyming throughout. Thanks for sharing. Les

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014

Thanks, Les!

Steve