One Wish
A Boy with a Favor From God25 total reviews
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Wow! the colors in this rainbow. This may be the prettiest rainbow I ever witnessed. I love your color choices, the deep purple. the words sealed the deal for me.Just as good as the picture. Read smoothly and I enjoyed every line and quatrain. I was satisfied, translation, a happy camper! Not too long for me to read. Worth it's weight in gold, pot of gold at the end of the rainbow. Fantastic! wackydo
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Wow! the colors in this rainbow. This may be the prettiest rainbow I ever witnessed. I love your color choices, the deep purple. the words sealed the deal for me.Just as good as the picture. Read smoothly and I enjoyed every line and quatrain. I was satisfied, translation, a happy camper! Not too long for me to read. Worth it's weight in gold, pot of gold at the end of the rainbow. Fantastic! wackydo
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
Comment from Mark Valentine
This one and the Lemonm Cake one are like "Touched By An Angel" epsiodes - very heartwarming - impossible to read and not be touched by these. And of course there's always that one line - today's winner is "the drops were of wondrous belief" - you can feel the miracle happening - could it be any more perfect?
Great poem! Thanks for a little mid-day hearwarming.
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This one and the Lemonm Cake one are like "Touched By An Angel" epsiodes - very heartwarming - impossible to read and not be touched by these. And of course there's always that one line - today's winner is "the drops were of wondrous belief" - you can feel the miracle happening - could it be any more perfect?
Great poem! Thanks for a little mid-day hearwarming.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
So many children let down by parents - it is so sad.
The rainbow is such a wonderful testimony to God's promises.
The colours you use lift the mood of the poem too.
Warmly,
Juliette
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So many children let down by parents - it is so sad.
The rainbow is such a wonderful testimony to God's promises.
The colours you use lift the mood of the poem too.
Warmly,
Juliette
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
A lovely story Lois, and heartwarming. The verse has a great little lilt and I like the rhymes as well, they're hardly noticeable except to punctuate the emotion of the read. Kenny
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A lovely story Lois, and heartwarming. The verse has a great little lilt and I like the rhymes as well, they're hardly noticeable except to punctuate the emotion of the read. Kenny
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
Comment from Ben Colder
I am so glad that God is not man. His ways are past understanding. It is a feeling nobody can understand when He answers prayers and you witness it. Excellent poem. Thanks you for sharing. Blessings
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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I am so glad that God is not man. His ways are past understanding. It is a feeling nobody can understand when He answers prayers and you witness it. Excellent poem. Thanks you for sharing. Blessings
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Ben. Your words mean a great deal to me.
Comment from DR DIP
Really like this Loanna 8 line rhyme.. interesting.. I like this format . it really creates the beat and canter of the poem well dine Lois well done
dip
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Really like this Loanna 8 line rhyme.. interesting.. I like this format . it really creates the beat and canter of the poem well dine Lois well done
dip
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Thank you for such nice comments. You know, I think my brain just operates in some meters that are a bit left of center...lol
Comment from Delahay
I really enjoyed this poem and the message it conveys. Such a simple wish from a young child but one that is so difficult to try to fulfill. With love and devotion his aunt comes through.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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I really enjoyed this poem and the message it conveys. Such a simple wish from a young child but one that is so difficult to try to fulfill. With love and devotion his aunt comes through.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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You have made my day.Thanks for taking time to read these. This one was very close to my heart.
Comment from krys123
LoannaLois, The picture you have chosen definitely is exceptionally a great choice to complement this poem. Each one of your verses are a spoken pieces of wisdom in a story/poem that is inspirational and enlightening. Very well composed with excellent rhythm and rhyme and a well needed tempo and meter. The rhyming was neither force nor labored while your rhythm flowed smoothly without your poem. This story is so very touching and remarkably close to being a tearjerker. This an excellent job all throughout this poem.
Thank you for sharing them posting this for everyone and maybe you have a good one would have you do and where you go.
Alex
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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LoannaLois, The picture you have chosen definitely is exceptionally a great choice to complement this poem. Each one of your verses are a spoken pieces of wisdom in a story/poem that is inspirational and enlightening. Very well composed with excellent rhythm and rhyme and a well needed tempo and meter. The rhyming was neither force nor labored while your rhythm flowed smoothly without your poem. This story is so very touching and remarkably close to being a tearjerker. This an excellent job all throughout this poem.
Thank you for sharing them posting this for everyone and maybe you have a good one would have you do and where you go.
Alex
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Hi Alex...I hope this finds you well. I really appreciate your ability to comment on writing as a whole. It is so helpful to read your words. Thank you.
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You are so sincerely welcome my friend
Comment from Kausar_Javeria
Hello there~
This is an amazing poem. Absolutely splendid. How much joy little things can give us. Great JOb!
Thanks for sharing this wonderful piece~
God Bless~!
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Hello there~
This is an amazing poem. Absolutely splendid. How much joy little things can give us. Great JOb!
Thanks for sharing this wonderful piece~
God Bless~!
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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I am so honored by the gift you gave me of stars. I am humbled, and smiling.
Comment from Dean Kuch
What a lovely, inspirational piece of writing, LoannaLois. I felt as I read this that it sounded far too realistic to be made up, and then I read your author's notes. You know, one of those "Ah-ha!" moments? It is a beautiful story.
It's so nice to know that for some, in some corner of a world filled with hate, violence sex, immorality, death and famine, that miracles do come true, if for just one crippled boy.
Well done!
~DK~
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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What a lovely, inspirational piece of writing, LoannaLois. I felt as I read this that it sounded far too realistic to be made up, and then I read your author's notes. You know, one of those "Ah-ha!" moments? It is a beautiful story.
It's so nice to know that for some, in some corner of a world filled with hate, violence sex, immorality, death and famine, that miracles do come true, if for just one crippled boy.
Well done!
~DK~
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Hi Friend ,
Thanks for the kind words and your comments . I agree with your thoughts on the world.Maybe that's why I often gravitate to stories with a moment of clarity for me.You brought a smile and I thank you.
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it was a pleasure to read, Lois. You're very welcome.
