The Sad Saga of Dandy Dan
A poker game with the highest of stakes...81 total reviews
Comment from chasennov
"The Sad Saga of Dandy Dan" What a Devil of a poem. Especially when you have 'The Devil's Bible,' or 'The Devil's Picture Book,' in your hand. An excellent poem, brilliantly executed. Well done.
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"The Sad Saga of Dandy Dan" What a Devil of a poem. Especially when you have 'The Devil's Bible,' or 'The Devil's Picture Book,' in your hand. An excellent poem, brilliantly executed. Well done.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
Comment from c_lucas
This brought to mind, the old George Burns movie, about God and the Devil playing a hand. Your poem is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
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This brought to mind, the old George Burns movie, about God and the Devil playing a hand. Your poem is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Charlie. I love that movie, "Oh, God" I think it's called, with co-star John Denver.
Thanks again, my friend.
~DK~
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The one I was thinking of was the sequel featuring a little girl. Both movies were excellent. You're welcome, Dean. Charlie
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Dean,
This was a really good story! I always like the way you format your work as well. Just no better time than the old west to make you feel GOOD! Perhaps that accounts for why I write westerns. Nostalgia, Ha-cha!
Even the Devil should have known not to challenge ole Dandy Dan!
Really a pleasure to read.
Cheers,
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
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Hi Dean,
This was a really good story! I always like the way you format your work as well. Just no better time than the old west to make you feel GOOD! Perhaps that accounts for why I write westerns. Nostalgia, Ha-cha!
Even the Devil should have known not to challenge ole Dandy Dan!
Really a pleasure to read.
Cheers,
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
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Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
Comment from kiwisteveh
What a story you relate here - one of your specials!
While the rhyming is impeccable, the meter is far from regular but it hardly seems to matter here in this story of the old-time West with its supernatural flavour.
You have cleverly woven together quite a complex story with the details of the card game, raising the tension along with the stakes.
Impressive entry for the contest - good luck.
Steve
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What a story you relate here - one of your specials!
While the rhyming is impeccable, the meter is far from regular but it hardly seems to matter here in this story of the old-time West with its supernatural flavour.
You have cleverly woven together quite a complex story with the details of the card game, raising the tension along with the stakes.
Impressive entry for the contest - good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
Comment from forestport12
Whew! I was so glad this turned out okay. I got chills down my spine when the devil talked about wanting his "sweet baby girl with hazel eyes." I never thought I would enjoy reading poetry as much as I do when I ready yours. It's high-noon for all them there sidewinders. The devil's coming to collect. I would love to use that picture of the man on is horse with flames coming out. Can I?
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Whew! I was so glad this turned out okay. I got chills down my spine when the devil talked about wanting his "sweet baby girl with hazel eyes." I never thought I would enjoy reading poetry as much as I do when I ready yours. It's high-noon for all them there sidewinders. The devil's coming to collect. I would love to use that picture of the man on is horse with flames coming out. Can I?
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
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Sure you can, Stan, you're very welcome to use the picture if you like.
I really appreciate what you said about reading my poetry. Like I've said countless times before, I don't consider myself a true poet, but rather a story teller who enjoys telling tales that just happen to rhyme.
Thanks so much again for your wonderful review, and those six stars.
Much obliged, pardner!
~DK~
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Damn, I could go on and on about this one but I will sum it up. Supernatural. I love the pictures you provided and the words are excellent too. There are boo coo loads of info here, mindboggling. I will save this unit for future reference and study. Did you see the ghost contest? Surprised you ain't in it. I'm basically, speecless trying to catch my breath. This is out of this galaxy. I hope me puny six stars are adequate to suffice Dean. I'm impressed. You would be hard to beat in any spooky stuff. Count your doubloons, Dean.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
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Damn, I could go on and on about this one but I will sum it up. Supernatural. I love the pictures you provided and the words are excellent too. There are boo coo loads of info here, mindboggling. I will save this unit for future reference and study. Did you see the ghost contest? Surprised you ain't in it. I'm basically, speecless trying to catch my breath. This is out of this galaxy. I hope me puny six stars are adequate to suffice Dean. I'm impressed. You would be hard to beat in any spooky stuff. Count your doubloons, Dean.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
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Hah, well, one reviewer jut laid a three-star review on this poem, Whackydo, so I ain't countin' up them gold doubloons yet, my friend. But I'm happy to know that you enjoyed it, at least. I have always appreciated your enthusiasm and support of my humble poetic efforts.
Thanks for the excellent review and six stars, my friend!
~DK~
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That reviewer must had been a rookie. They have no clue? This will help balance it out. Don't they drop the lowest rating? Wonder if he was standard membership?
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I just hope it's not all that bad. She said she really liked the story, but it didn't have enough "intrigue" for her to rate it any higher. Of course, no offers of constructive suggestions were made, just the hit and run review.
As far as them being a rookie, should it really matter? That's what worries me. Is it really any good, or is there immense room for improvements? I've been working on it for over three weeks, thinking I had all the bugs and ticks worked out. Oh well. I just hope the FanStory voting Committee likes it when the time comes to vote.
Thanks again, Wacydo.
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You can't please everyone, mate. You got your resisters. I try to please myself, first. Sometimes, I use too many , - () ! ing and metaphors. I try to use sailor slang but it doesn't meet the SPAG profile. Some people got no sense of humor or imagination. Hell, I don't want to read a dictionary with perfect dull words. So, sometimes I thin k they get a wee bit jealous. They ain't got the gift but they may be a wizard at SPAG and try to bring you down. I know good work when I see it. I got scout eyes. I look for the intangibles, heck, all that SPAG stuff is elemetary. i fit is so easy, why don't teachers write novels? Who was that reviewer, if you don't mind me asking. Don't let a few bee hive rounds discourage you. they wish, they could be like you. sincerely, wackydo
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Her name is Kaila Mari. She joined FS this month. She has one poem posted which received an overall rating of five stars. I looked at the poem but didn't offer a review.
I agree, Wacydo, I write for me, myself & I, above all else. If I feel happy and confident with something I've written, then generally most people who read it will too.
Thanks again, my friend.
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I saw a lot of sixes in your review. i wish I cculd get that many. She is just wet behind the ears. you can't learn everything from a book? you look like a prodegy to me. May, the next Stephen King. I'm sure, he had reviews like the one you got.
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He still gets some nasty reviews, even today, believe it or not. Personally, I think the man's a genius.
I've never considered myself a true poet, one who knows all of the intricacies of meter, rhyme, and all of that technical stuff the poetic purists like to toss out at me. Rather, I'm just a simple, sorta crazy guy, who happens to enjoy telling stories in rhyme. It's where my passions lie, and all I can keep doing is doing my best.
Comment from Kausar_Javeria
HEllo there~
This is certainly a strong entry for this contest and I think it's really well-written. Hmph...I don't really have anything else to say~ Just, good luck in the contest~
God Bless~!
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HEllo there~
This is certainly a strong entry for this contest and I think it's really well-written. Hmph...I don't really have anything else to say~ Just, good luck in the contest~
God Bless~!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
Comment from Kaila Mari
The story is quite interesting. Liked it very much. I realize that you are very knowledgeable at "cards". The piece flows quite nicely and although the outcome is anticipated from the get-go the ending still makes for a good ending climax. Good luck in your writing and God bless!
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The story is quite interesting. Liked it very much. I realize that you are very knowledgeable at "cards". The piece flows quite nicely and although the outcome is anticipated from the get-go the ending still makes for a good ending climax. Good luck in your writing and God bless!
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Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Kaila Mari, and any suggestions you might have for improvement would be more than welcome. It is rather long already, and I was always taught that when it comes to poetry, shorter is usually (but not always) better.
Thanks again for reading and reviewing my humble effort.
Comment from Jay Squires
You have such a Gift, Dean. And this poem is more proof of it. You find the most unlikely of rhymes and at the end of the stanza they all fit. Great job!
A good follow up to "The Devil Went Down To Georgia". I think you had another title for it.
By the way, have you ever heard of the old Western song called "The Deck of Cards" by Tex Ritter? Way before your time, but take four minutes and listen (and see) it on YouTube. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LsCiaxPhtVY&feature=kp
Again, I love your poem and your writing, generally.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
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You have such a Gift, Dean. And this poem is more proof of it. You find the most unlikely of rhymes and at the end of the stanza they all fit. Great job!
A good follow up to "The Devil Went Down To Georgia". I think you had another title for it.
By the way, have you ever heard of the old Western song called "The Deck of Cards" by Tex Ritter? Way before your time, but take four minutes and listen (and see) it on YouTube. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LsCiaxPhtVY&feature=kp
Again, I love your poem and your writing, generally.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
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Thanks a bunch, Jay, and I'll be sure to listen to it. I appreciate yo giving me a heads up about the song as I don't believe I've ever heard it.
Thanks for your complimentary review and six stars, my friend. Much obliged!
~DK~
Comment from country ranch writer
Cards were banned by the church as the devils hands and one day during the Christmas holiday a soldier sat in the front pew the priest told him to put the cards away. He did not and after the service he asked the soldier why he defied him. He said, sir this is my bible. He went on to explain to the priest what each card meant. From then on he never said another word about the deck of cards. I am sure you heard this story too.
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Cards were banned by the church as the devils hands and one day during the Christmas holiday a soldier sat in the front pew the priest told him to put the cards away. He did not and after the service he asked the soldier why he defied him. He said, sir this is my bible. He went on to explain to the priest what each card meant. From then on he never said another word about the deck of cards. I am sure you heard this story too.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
