Comment from Ridley Williams

Excellent

Hi Dean,
I can relate to your author's notes. My mother would allow no playing cards in our house where I grew up. However, The church had no problems with the game of Rook. It was a suit and trump game, and there where the same amount of cards as a poker deck, and you could play virtually the same games... but somehow it felt "cleaner", I suppose, lol.
This is an enjoyable and wild story of Dandy Dan and the devil... loved the ending. I only caught one thing...
In the stanza that starts, "Let's raise the stakes higher... second line,"give(s) these fools a show". Other than that, a great read. Best wishes, Bill

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014

Thanks very much, Bill, I am truly glad you enjoyed Dan's story.

I'll fix that error straight away, thanks for pointing that out. This will be voted on by the Faceless FanStory Committee, so it must be error free.

Thanks again!


~DK~

Comment from Alan K Pease

Excellent

Good story in a poem Dean. Dan got his redemption and saved his family from the Deevil's clutches retiring to a better life. The closing of the saloon and probable the town is part of the story of a lot of Ghost towns in the old West except for a few that might be used by John Wayne in his movies. Excellent abab rhyme in a ream of different words to end each verse.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014

Thanks for your insights into this work, and excellent rating, Alan. All are greatly appreciated.

~DK~

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

This is absolutely brilliant. You captured my full interest immediately and I just love the artistic presentation. Superb job with this one and clearly a top contender in the contest too. I sincerely wish you all the best.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014

Thanks for the well-wishes and the fabulous review, Smurphgirl. It's always a pleasure to hear your point of view.

~DK~

Comment from Erik McGinley

Excellent

Thought you might like this .. being honest .. I prefer the Devil .. a good human is better than God any day

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014

Excellent video, Erik! Who are those guys? Chris de Burgh. I'll have to look them up.

They sound Irish or Scottish, perhaps?

I've saved it to my favorites. Great song, thank you!

~DK~

reply by Erik McGinley on 15-Jun-2014

He's Irish iirc. Liked him for a very long time because he writes such evocative and poetic music.

reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014

Well, he's got a new fan in your truly now!

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

Hi Dean, what a write...this took time and a lot of thought...I love the story...as I am from a family of big poker player...so it had my attention from the title....I love all the pictures and it is a great write...one of you best....very well done...Luff Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014

Thank so much, Linda. I'm very glad to know that you enjoyed it, my friend.

~DK~

reply by l.raven on 15-Jun-2014

totally...soooooooooo welcome...luff

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

I have never been a card player. It just doesn't interest me but I feel Dandy Dan was very lucky to beat the Devil at his own game. You told your story with flair and it is an excellent contender. Good luck Dean. Nancy

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014

Thanks, Nancy, I appreciate it. I abhor playing cards, and know very little about poker. I had to do a great deal of research to get this story right, as far as the terminologies and various hands.

Thanks again!

~DK~

Comment from padumachitta

Exceptional

Hi. Yup, a western Devil and Daniel Webster, old Faust would be proud too.
I enjoyed the rollick. I like how the Devil talked in red and the play of the game(you must play poker yourself)
The pictures were super. Often the pictures can sort of detract from a poem...but, with this story poem they added a certain flair and ambiance.

padumachitta

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2014

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

This is a nicely crafted story in poetic form. You should have entered this in the quatrain contest or story one. It shows that you put a lot of time and effort into it. Well done.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2014

Comment from acerisestory

Excellent

Another fabulous story by the amazing Dean Kuch! If I had a six, I'd definitely give it to you. I particularly like the part about Dan coughing up a black mass and it hitting the floor like a ton. Yikes! Great job. Good luck with the contest. Alana

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2014

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Exceptional

Dean, a most awesome write telling this story. Your presentation is so well done. A well crafted and beatifully presented write. Take care, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2014