The Sad Saga of Dandy Dan
A poker game with the highest of stakes...81 total reviews
Comment from DanielEkine
My emergency plan has arrived. For a beautiful poegasm your words are. I am so glad I am right being a fan I chose well. Very descriptive, great presentation and choice of diction. Remarkable as always.
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My emergency plan has arrived. For a beautiful poegasm your words are. I am so glad I am right being a fan I chose well. Very descriptive, great presentation and choice of diction. Remarkable as always.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
Comment from GWinterwin
Good poem with a good message about winning. Good word flow and rhyming make it fun to read. So old Satan wasn't as crafty as he thought, Huh?
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Good poem with a good message about winning. Good word flow and rhyming make it fun to read. So old Satan wasn't as crafty as he thought, Huh?
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Nope, GWinterwin, old Dandy Dan got the best of him...this time, anyway.
Thanks for the read & review. Much obliged, pardner!
~DK~
Comment from w.j.debi
This is a lively and well told story in your poem. I'm interested to see what you have the devil up to next--first down in Georgia playing the fiddle, now playing poker...
The story is engaging and it takes some thought to go back and see how well you have crafted the rhyme and meter because the story is so interesting. The formatting is awesome--with just the right pictures and colors (like the devil's dialog in red).
Best of luck in the contest.
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This is a lively and well told story in your poem. I'm interested to see what you have the devil up to next--first down in Georgia playing the fiddle, now playing poker...
The story is engaging and it takes some thought to go back and see how well you have crafted the rhyme and meter because the story is so interesting. The formatting is awesome--with just the right pictures and colors (like the devil's dialog in red).
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
Comment from Spitfire
A different take on the showdown with the fiddler. The stakes are much much higher. Scary setting right with the first line--ghostly shimmer,ghastly game, buzzards swooped. A nice twist with the townsfolk rooting for the devil.
Clever use of red font when the devil speaks. The flashing deck of cards are all black--must be the devil plans to win my cheating. Yea! What a production when Dan wins and then hacks up the cancer. That's what happens when you pray.
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A different take on the showdown with the fiddler. The stakes are much much higher. Scary setting right with the first line--ghostly shimmer,ghastly game, buzzards swooped. A nice twist with the townsfolk rooting for the devil.
Clever use of red font when the devil speaks. The flashing deck of cards are all black--must be the devil plans to win my cheating. Yea! What a production when Dan wins and then hacks up the cancer. That's what happens when you pray.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
Comment from Eric1
This has got to be one of the best story poems I have ever read!It would surely have won as an entry in the story in a poem entry, this whole thing just flows so well and in my humble opinion is flawless! thank you so much for sharing.
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This has got to be one of the best story poems I have ever read!It would surely have won as an entry in the story in a poem entry, this whole thing just flows so well and in my humble opinion is flawless! thank you so much for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
How can I not give you a 6 for this mammoth tale in perfect rhyme - not truly plausible, but that's what stories are like. Besides I like happy endings. A good read Dean and such great pictures. Regards Dorothy
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How can I not give you a 6 for this mammoth tale in perfect rhyme - not truly plausible, but that's what stories are like. Besides I like happy endings. A good read Dean and such great pictures. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
Comment from elchupakabra
Whiskey flowed freely, like blood in a war - That was my favorite line and a beautiful simile. I thought you did a fantastic job constructing this well thought out tale of a gambler. Kenny Rogers would be proud :) I thought the alliterations were excellent, the cadence and flow were smooth and the tale was fantastic. Six stars wasn't enough, bud, but it's all I have to give. Really great work and best of luck in the contest, thanks for sharing.
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Whiskey flowed freely, like blood in a war - That was my favorite line and a beautiful simile. I thought you did a fantastic job constructing this well thought out tale of a gambler. Kenny Rogers would be proud :) I thought the alliterations were excellent, the cadence and flow were smooth and the tale was fantastic. Six stars wasn't enough, bud, but it's all I have to give. Really great work and best of luck in the contest, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
Comment from sibhus
Wow, this is really quite a story in a poem. Always cool to read a legend-like tale from the old west, and this really feels like that. Great details and I liked how you have Ole Nick speak in red. This is a great piece, and good luck with the contest, Dean.
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Wow, this is really quite a story in a poem. Always cool to read a legend-like tale from the old west, and this really feels like that. Great details and I liked how you have Ole Nick speak in red. This is a great piece, and good luck with the contest, Dean.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of abab rhyme
good alliteration in title
poker's five card stud - add apostrophe for possessive
good touches of alliteration
love the concept of playing poker with the Devil himself
I haven't written an entry for this contest yet - now I have to write a really good one to compete with this :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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solid use of abab rhyme
good alliteration in title
poker's five card stud - add apostrophe for possessive
good touches of alliteration
love the concept of playing poker with the Devil himself
I haven't written an entry for this contest yet - now I have to write a really good one to compete with this :-) Brooke
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Brooke, and I'm sure that anything you write will blow this here thang right out of the water.
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I really appreciate the read & review, my frriend.
Comment from faragon
Great poem...I again bow to the Master. This could almost be a song as well. I love the story that you tell. The verses read really well and easy. I also like how you put a touch of history about Dandy Dan. As always, the pictures are great!
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Great poem...I again bow to the Master. This could almost be a song as well. I love the story that you tell. The verses read really well and easy. I also like how you put a touch of history about Dandy Dan. As always, the pictures are great!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
