Bel Air: A Bard's Guide
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Invisible Yacht, Vegas Bound"Sequel to The Bard of Bel Air.
10 total reviews
Comment from ravenblack
Oh no, not Winston. Please, kill him off this time. Just want to mention that you write children well which is not exactly easy to do convincingly. Like art, they sometimes come out looking (in writing, sounding) like little adults. You keep them children.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Oh no, not Winston. Please, kill him off this time. Just want to mention that you write children well which is not exactly easy to do convincingly. Like art, they sometimes come out looking (in writing, sounding) like little adults. You keep them children.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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I hate killing people, but I'm trying to convince myself that he is one that should be killed in a fiendish way. Appreciate that you think I'm writing the kids well. Good to know.
Comment from CR Delport
Barry got a nasty surprise when Elsa was not where she was supposed to be. I knew Winston had something to do with the whole thing. This is another great chapter and I didn't spot any obvious errors.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Barry got a nasty surprise when Elsa was not where she was supposed to be. I knew Winston had something to do with the whole thing. This is another great chapter and I didn't spot any obvious errors.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Yeah. I've had Winston waiting in the wings for awhile. I didn't want him bringing the army with him though!
Comment from Sankey
Good chapter be good to know where we are going. Interesting reading. Getting more and more exciting I reckon. Only one spag...He stood their (there) dumbfounded
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Good chapter be good to know where we are going. Interesting reading. Getting more and more exciting I reckon. Only one spag...He stood their (there) dumbfounded
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Great to hear! Trying to not go off on some crazy side trip for once. Hahaha. Their/there... There must be some way to cure me of that! I do know the difference!!! mikey
Comment from seaglass
All the bases are covered, except the cat. lol More mystery for us to look forward to solving, and the chase gets more difficult as the bad guys fan out.
"He stood (their) dumbfounded." No, no, no, Mikey. It's (there)
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
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All the bases are covered, except the cat. lol More mystery for us to look forward to solving, and the chase gets more difficult as the bad guys fan out.
"He stood (their) dumbfounded." No, no, no, Mikey. It's (there)
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
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I need treatment!!! I keep doing that over and over. Hear/here TOO!!! When we're rich, people will handle that for us, right? mikey
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LOL, when our ships come in.
Comment from nordicgirl
Everything us moving right along smoothly. A good idea I think to get to dry land. Vegas an excellent choice!! With the music connections of Harpster and the others that can get some play. NG
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Everything us moving right along smoothly. A good idea I think to get to dry land. Vegas an excellent choice!! With the music connections of Harpster and the others that can get some play. NG
Comment Written 14-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Thank you. I thought that was a good idea to get them out of the water. Yes! I want to get Ruby and Diamond up on a stage and back in the story. mikey
Comment from l.raven
OH Michael, a homeless mentally ill poetically interesting detective...LOL...Bard...LOL...
anyway...Barry got back with the cat...but the boat was gone...Elsa was dealing with Winston...And now Angela and others are stuck in the bottom deck of the boat...told to be quiet...and their getting ready to move them...and Barry is coming...and the police are coming...and were off...Next...well done my man...LOL...luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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OH Michael, a homeless mentally ill poetically interesting detective...LOL...Bard...LOL...
anyway...Barry got back with the cat...but the boat was gone...Elsa was dealing with Winston...And now Angela and others are stuck in the bottom deck of the boat...told to be quiet...and their getting ready to move them...and Barry is coming...and the police are coming...and were off...Next...well done my man...LOL...luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 14-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Got to get them all to Vegas where the ghost of Elvis can talk to the Bard and make a plan!! mikey
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I think you slipped your dripper...LOL...ya nut you...Luff
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Pretty scene. It's getting good. I always like lots of characters and live action!!! Woo--your author notes are growing. Aye, mate, this looks extra good! I can tell, you put extra work in it, I like the introduction of new characters.It's excitement to the fullest. I will read it again, so, I don't miss any key clues. I never took the Catalina ferry when I lived at Upland. You can definitely tell where the scene is at, using this letterbox technique and headers in blue. Really, looks good, I must say. Over all, a good addition to this novel. This thing is taught as a mizzen, lugsail, jiggers, aback tradewinds. Shipshape. Mostly, I enjoyed it, which is good enough for me.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Pretty scene. It's getting good. I always like lots of characters and live action!!! Woo--your author notes are growing. Aye, mate, this looks extra good! I can tell, you put extra work in it, I like the introduction of new characters.It's excitement to the fullest. I will read it again, so, I don't miss any key clues. I never took the Catalina ferry when I lived at Upland. You can definitely tell where the scene is at, using this letterbox technique and headers in blue. Really, looks good, I must say. Over all, a good addition to this novel. This thing is taught as a mizzen, lugsail, jiggers, aback tradewinds. Shipshape. Mostly, I enjoyed it, which is good enough for me.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Trying to make it easy to follow. We're here, no we're here, now we're there...... Hahaha. Yeah, a lot of characters running around. The Catalina ferry is cool, the seagulls go along with it all the way to the island catching bread thrown from the boat. Reba was on board one time. mikey
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Made something disaterous could happen on a ferry ride. Hit some rocks or reef? I will be reviewing tonight. I been busy as a bee. Just popped in for a minute.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
So it's Winston's doing... of course! Should have let him rot in jail. Do the other kids know where Angela hides? I guess they must. I'll feel better when they are rescued. Hurry up! :)
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2014
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So it's Winston's doing... of course! Should have let him rot in jail. Do the other kids know where Angela hides? I guess they must. I'll feel better when they are rescued. Hurry up! :)
Comment Written 14-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2014
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The other kids are a lot more passive than her. They come from poorer backgrounds and have had bad treatment from Elsa and the others. They see what she does and it scares them more than anything. Hopefully it will inspire Trip to take some action with her. We'll see. mikey
Comment from Nosha17
That was an interesting chapter, lots of action and loose ends being tied. So, Barry escaped and all the action is moving to Vegas now, should be fun. Enjoyable and great read. Faye
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2014
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That was an interesting chapter, lots of action and loose ends being tied. So, Barry escaped and all the action is moving to Vegas now, should be fun. Enjoyable and great read. Faye
Comment Written 14-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2014
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Yeah. I don't like Barry so I think they're going to catch up to him pretty soon. Hahaha. I thought Vegas might be a fun back drop. mikey
Comment from Sasha
I have clearly jumped into the middle of this, but as far as I can tell it is a fascinating story. Still, too much to catch up on. Maybe sometime in the future I can find the time to go back and read this from the beginning...both books. Just though I'd check in and add one more to your number of review (always good). Keep up the good work and let me know when you start a new book, so I can get in on the action from the start.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2014
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I have clearly jumped into the middle of this, but as far as I can tell it is a fascinating story. Still, too much to catch up on. Maybe sometime in the future I can find the time to go back and read this from the beginning...both books. Just though I'd check in and add one more to your number of review (always good). Keep up the good work and let me know when you start a new book, so I can get in on the action from the start.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2014
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I will. Glad you stopped by. I do appreciate you adding to the numbers, they have slipped a bit! Hahaha. I'll let you know. I'm tired of writing about these guys, but don't tell anyone... mikey
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Your secret is safe with me....
