I'm Jivin' to Joy
a poem in rhyming couplets148 total reviews
Comment from Bharanee
Wow!wonderful poem about loving life.The end rhymes aabb and use of alliteration of the sound 'j' add a chant like quality to the poem.Sounds more like a song.The informal tone and the use of pronoun 'you' appeals to the reader,inviting us to join the song that celebrates life.Very cool atmosphere.Love this brilliant poem.Well done!
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
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Wow!wonderful poem about loving life.The end rhymes aabb and use of alliteration of the sound 'j' add a chant like quality to the poem.Sounds more like a song.The informal tone and the use of pronoun 'you' appeals to the reader,inviting us to join the song that celebrates life.Very cool atmosphere.Love this brilliant poem.Well done!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
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Bharanee, thank you so much for this gracious and generous review :-) Brooke
Comment from RGstar
A nice depiction of joy and feeling for the moment thereof.
A good image to compliment the work and an interpretation that fits your theme.
Good aabb structure with good end rhymes.
Good joyful write.
Best wishes,
RGstar
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
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A nice depiction of joy and feeling for the moment thereof.
A good image to compliment the work and an interpretation that fits your theme.
Good aabb structure with good end rhymes.
Good joyful write.
Best wishes,
RGstar
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
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Thank you, RG, for your thoughtful response to my poem :-) Brooke
Comment from DR DIP
Would have loved another stanza Brooke but I sure do love the beat and rhyme... perfect AABB rhyme at that!
I really think 4 line verse always warrants at lest 3 stanzas and i'm not talking about any anal rules of poetic Naziship here its just seems complete.
Don't get me wrong it has "adewpearl" all over it, it's just my thoughts that's all
dip
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
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Would have loved another stanza Brooke but I sure do love the beat and rhyme... perfect AABB rhyme at that!
I really think 4 line verse always warrants at lest 3 stanzas and i'm not talking about any anal rules of poetic Naziship here its just seems complete.
Don't get me wrong it has "adewpearl" all over it, it's just my thoughts that's all
dip
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
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Thanks for your feedback, Dip. My motto is to write what I have to say and then shut up. LOL Not to mention, I think another four lines of the J thing would have been forcing it. :-) I always appreciate hearing from you :-) Brooke
Comment from rouskin
but if you are thinkin' of joinin' this song,
just jiggle your toes and come dancin' along
Count me in :-)
You put the boom-boom into my heart
You send my soul sky high when your lovin' starts
Jitterbug into my brain
Goes a bang-bang-bang 'til my feet do the same
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
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but if you are thinkin' of joinin' this song,
just jiggle your toes and come dancin' along
Count me in :-)
You put the boom-boom into my heart
You send my soul sky high when your lovin' starts
Jitterbug into my brain
Goes a bang-bang-bang 'til my feet do the same
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
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Rouskin, thank you for your generous sixth star and your delightful review :-) Brooke
Comment from words
Thank you for posting this smile inducing verse, Brooke.
You capture so well the sheer exuberance of childhood.
I am so grateful for my grand kids ... they are the living embodiments of this joy each and every day.
Miranda has a real eye for photography. Thank you for sharing her talent with us. Your posts are always a treat for mind and eye.
Hugs,d
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
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Thank you for posting this smile inducing verse, Brooke.
You capture so well the sheer exuberance of childhood.
I am so grateful for my grand kids ... they are the living embodiments of this joy each and every day.
Miranda has a real eye for photography. Thank you for sharing her talent with us. Your posts are always a treat for mind and eye.
Hugs,d
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
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Diane, thanks so much :-) Yes, she has a great eye, which I tell her all the time :-) As always, I appreciate the pretty sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from Treischel
A free and airy delight expressed so jauntily with outstanding alliteration of the letter J throughout. The verse flows in rhythmic pulsations in each of these lovely aabb rhymed quatrains. The words bring the joyful image to life.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
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A free and airy delight expressed so jauntily with outstanding alliteration of the letter J throughout. The verse flows in rhythmic pulsations in each of these lovely aabb rhymed quatrains. The words bring the joyful image to life.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
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Treischel, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from marijmd
This little ditty had me tapping my toe the rhyme scheme was so fun. And a sweet little message to move it along and I read through
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
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This little ditty had me tapping my toe the rhyme scheme was so fun. And a sweet little message to move it along and I read through
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
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Thank you, marijmd, for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Liandra
Your words and the gorgeous photo put a smile on my face. Yes I tapped my feet as I read the words that went well with the toe-tapping music in my head.
Thanks for sharing,
:) Liandra
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
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Your words and the gorgeous photo put a smile on my face. Yes I tapped my feet as I read the words that went well with the toe-tapping music in my head.
Thanks for sharing,
:) Liandra
Comment Written 14-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
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Liandra, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Quire's Gal
Hi Brooke
this is so much fun with all those "J" words. The poem moves happily in a bouncy, buoyant kind of way. I love to see this fun side of your writing.
Be well and all that jazz.
Katherine
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2014
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Hi Brooke
this is so much fun with all those "J" words. The poem moves happily in a bouncy, buoyant kind of way. I love to see this fun side of your writing.
Be well and all that jazz.
Katherine
Comment Written 14-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2014
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Katherine, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Oz Harte
Joy and mirth permeate this poem. A beautiful work with liberal alliteration and rhyme. The picture is an excellent accompaniment. Well constructed and fun to read.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Joy and mirth permeate this poem. A beautiful work with liberal alliteration and rhyme. The picture is an excellent accompaniment. Well constructed and fun to read.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2014
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Oz, thanks so much for your gracious review :-) Brooke
