From our soul.
Viewing comments for Chapter 46 "Divine."Mostly romance.
23 total reviews
Comment from Ronni
This is absolutely stunning, surreal, serene, sensual, sensitive,
eclectic, enchanting, engrossing and so exceptionally conveyed
as if one is cast into a brief but wonderous hypnotic spell. So
gorgeous! Pili...you are truly awesome with this one.
This is absolutely stunning, surreal, serene, sensual, sensitive,
eclectic, enchanting, engrossing and so exceptionally conveyed
as if one is cast into a brief but wonderous hypnotic spell. So
gorgeous! Pili...you are truly awesome with this one.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2005
Comment from Lisloh
Simply beautiful Pili.
Because you used this picture, I can sense this is written to your understanding of God. I see sheets of hope among the clouds.
As a human being, this could be written to a love that is now not present.
Either way, it works. It's very eloquently stated.
Simply beautiful.
Thank you for creating this and sharing.
Take care & be safe
Lisloh
Simply beautiful Pili.
Because you used this picture, I can sense this is written to your understanding of God. I see sheets of hope among the clouds.
As a human being, this could be written to a love that is now not present.
Either way, it works. It's very eloquently stated.
Simply beautiful.
Thank you for creating this and sharing.
Take care & be safe
Lisloh
Comment Written 24-Aug-2005
Comment from sswhiplash
You write a lot of poems about separation from your lover. This is an interesting theme. Do you ever get together with this distant lover? Is this reality or based on reality or just a vehicle to present ideas of loneliness and separation? I don't really expect answers to these questions, but they do spring to mind as I read this poem and realize the similarity in theme to many of your previous postings. You develop this simple theme effectively and usually without error. The images are not convoluted. I enjoy the poems.
You write a lot of poems about separation from your lover. This is an interesting theme. Do you ever get together with this distant lover? Is this reality or based on reality or just a vehicle to present ideas of loneliness and separation? I don't really expect answers to these questions, but they do spring to mind as I read this poem and realize the similarity in theme to many of your previous postings. You develop this simple theme effectively and usually without error. The images are not convoluted. I enjoy the poems.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2005
Comment from DySaintDrama
Hi Pili. The only change I'd make is changing the "i" in 5th last line to a capital "I". I really like: "on the soft
crackling sand,
brought
by gentle winds,"
The juxtapostion of soft and crackling is nice. Jeff
Hi Pili. The only change I'd make is changing the "i" in 5th last line to a capital "I". I really like: "on the soft
crackling sand,
brought
by gentle winds,"
The juxtapostion of soft and crackling is nice. Jeff
Comment Written 24-Aug-2005
Comment from bfonf
Awesome poem, very well written and powerful. Small little typo:
as you and i
Capitalize the 'I' and then you have a perfect poem.
Awesome poem, very well written and powerful. Small little typo:
as you and i
Capitalize the 'I' and then you have a perfect poem.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2005
Comment from bayley
I read this poem on 2 levels. Firstly it seems like a prayer of gratitude to the entity who created the magnificence that you sense, feel and see. On another level it reads as the most sensual, passionate imploring to the person who ignites the fire in your loving heart. I absolutely love this ~Sean
I read this poem on 2 levels. Firstly it seems like a prayer of gratitude to the entity who created the magnificence that you sense, feel and see. On another level it reads as the most sensual, passionate imploring to the person who ignites the fire in your loving heart. I absolutely love this ~Sean
Comment Written 24-Aug-2005
Comment from Sarlou
This is a beautiful poem!
Lovely visualisation, it really drew on my emotions and imagination.
It flowed well and used beautiful descriptions. What a wonderful feeling.
I get the impression this is about someone far away, someone very special and that not even the immense distance can come between you.
Well done.
This is a beautiful poem!
Lovely visualisation, it really drew on my emotions and imagination.
It flowed well and used beautiful descriptions. What a wonderful feeling.
I get the impression this is about someone far away, someone very special and that not even the immense distance can come between you.
Well done.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2005
Comment from ishta
Very divine. I really liked this piece, the pic. accentuated it well. Very good job with a hard topic. You breezed through it like it was easy. Good job, making it look easy.
Very divine. I really liked this piece, the pic. accentuated it well. Very good job with a hard topic. You breezed through it like it was easy. Good job, making it look easy.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2005
Comment from sengwriter
Let me a bit personal while reviewing your poem, right at the moment, I'm going through some disturbances around me and your poem worked immensly on my turbulant mind. An advance appreciation for that.
Now come to your lines of this poem. How your realization buzzes your mind and soul is always reflected here in your expressions.
Seperations sometimes glorify our aspirations, always remember. So let you be glorified by any detatchment that you're going through.
Words one after another used by you here are superbly glamourised by your true feelings and made the poem so easy to grasp.
Take my best felt commendation for this effort and looking forward for your realizations to be consolidated further.
Gautam
Let me a bit personal while reviewing your poem, right at the moment, I'm going through some disturbances around me and your poem worked immensly on my turbulant mind. An advance appreciation for that.
Now come to your lines of this poem. How your realization buzzes your mind and soul is always reflected here in your expressions.
Seperations sometimes glorify our aspirations, always remember. So let you be glorified by any detatchment that you're going through.
Words one after another used by you here are superbly glamourised by your true feelings and made the poem so easy to grasp.
Take my best felt commendation for this effort and looking forward for your realizations to be consolidated further.
Gautam
Comment Written 24-Aug-2005
Comment from Sandisan
A lovely poem. It speaks to love and passion. I love the wording. The poetry does flow very well. I cannot see anything to change except the i to I.
A lovely poem. It speaks to love and passion. I love the wording. The poetry does flow very well. I cannot see anything to change except the i to I.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2005