Comment from Dreamdancer

Excellent

Hi Miss P,
Wow... Very powerful and romantic piece. This was beautiful... One of those Ahhhhhh.... poems. You are such a talented writer and I look forward to each of your posting:-) Thanks for sharing! Buddy

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2005

Comment from AuroraSky

Excellent

Now when did you sneak this intriguingly woven poem past me? I can see why it's the top poem on the front page--way cool...I'm going to check my pm's out now.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2005

Comment from meringue

Excellent

Thanks for sharing this,this is quite your usual, unobtrusive but brilliant style:)
Suggestion:
As I stand
on the soft
crackling sand,

As I stand
on the soft
whispering sand,

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2005

Comment from Mrs Jones

Excellent

So romantic Pili. Nice line breaks. Nothing wrong here.
"your song
brought
by gentle winds,
reaches me
caressing
my senses."
Well done
Rose

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2005

Comment from Jon Kuntz

Excellent

This is very good. "Cracklin sand" is excellent. I never heard it before
but I know just what you're saying. You must have had a strong love
sometime in the past and you think of him always.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2005

Comment from Diny

Excellent

NOW that was romantic and sweet!

You are such a gentle soul...

I so loved this one girl!
I could actually see these two walking along a beach somewhere BRAVO!
Write on
Diny

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2005

Comment from Winbow

Excellent

Serene divinity reading your poetry. Another really well written poem Pili. The spirituality of it beckons my spirit to float across and embrace the ocean of separation. Great flow and tone. Love the picture as well.
Desi

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2005

Comment from mfwilkie

Excellent

Oh, Pili, this is a perfectly wonderful write, my friend.
"Between
pure sheets
of hope, " - I love this!


Just one suggestion:

your song,
brought
by gentle winds, for flow.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2005

Comment from Black Wren

Excellent

Wee!
Another beautiful poem with wonderful descriptions of images and emotions.
I love this piece and I love the picture that you chose.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2005

Comment from Genuine Suede

Excellent

Until the last stanza I was thinking you were writing about being separated from one or more of your children. The last stanza makes me pause in that thought.
"Between
pure sheets
of hope,
I can't contain
my dreams;
immersed
in clear
and pure waters,
as you and I
slide gently
into a state
of serenity
Divine.
Nope. LOL It's not the kids your talking too here. :0)
This is a very nice piece. Beautiful, vivid imagery.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2005