Bel Air: A Bard's Guide
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Destination Long Beach"Sequel to The Bard of Bel Air.
10 total reviews
Comment from nordicgirl
Sorry I don't have a six for this. The insert written by the rat is the kind of thing that sets your work way apart from all others. To attempt such a crazy thing is one thing... to pull it off without interupting the flow of the story is amazing. Your work has its own atmosphere and things work for you that wouldn't work for anyone else. This is genius!!! NG
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2014
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Sorry I don't have a six for this. The insert written by the rat is the kind of thing that sets your work way apart from all others. To attempt such a crazy thing is one thing... to pull it off without interupting the flow of the story is amazing. Your work has its own atmosphere and things work for you that wouldn't work for anyone else. This is genius!!! NG
Comment Written 13-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2014
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Thank you
Comment from seaglass
This segment is a series of connecters to what's coming next. I call connecters "bridges'. when reading a book you hardly notice them but in our way of posting on this site they stand out for what they are.
I'm confused in the "Unknown Author's Room" why the rat would want the cat to remove the chip?
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This segment is a series of connecters to what's coming next. I call connecters "bridges'. when reading a book you hardly notice them but in our way of posting on this site they stand out for what they are.
I'm confused in the "Unknown Author's Room" why the rat would want the cat to remove the chip?
Comment Written 12-Jun-2014
Comment from Nosha17
That was a fun chapter, lots of things happening to add to the story. Guess we will have to wait and see what happens next. Enjoyable read as always. Faye
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2014
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That was a fun chapter, lots of things happening to add to the story. Guess we will have to wait and see what happens next. Enjoyable read as always. Faye
Comment Written 12-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2014
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More fun to come. Glad you liked this. Thanks as always. mikey
Comment from Sankey
Love it!! And the personal e-mail a real gag mate! Maybe the rat is related to the Bard somehow? I guess if you are an Evolutionist they are related what!! Sigh! Give Up Geoff!
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Love it!! And the personal e-mail a real gag mate! Maybe the rat is related to the Bard somehow? I guess if you are an Evolutionist they are related what!! Sigh! Give Up Geoff!
Comment Written 12-Jun-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
That mouse picture is cute. I got a tuxedo cat next to me, that would like him. Amusing, the cat ate the rat, who ate the microchip. Great imagination. I saw the Spruce Goose and the Queen Mary at Longbeach when I lived in Upland, Ca. after I got of the navy. Now, with the story. I loved the unknown author's room, now, that was a twist taken on the persona of a rat like you did. That is clever. This is something only Mikey can do. I can't recall anything like this. You created an unknown profile. That was good! This brings something new and entertaining to the cat. I would like to hear from the mouse again, Shhh he's back. He can't hear our conversation, he may kill our little cat & mouse game. Damn, Mikey is coming, I hear his footsteps. He looks like a madman with that quill between his teeth. Hebetter not write us out of this fracking story. We got animal rights!!! Cat & mouse. I like your artwork. the bold big blue words looks good. I been experimenting for new styles to tell people where the scene takes place. This would definitely work and look much better than what I been using. This was very entertaining, I really liked this chapter. That is a clever rodent. Did you meet Rosie Perez? Crap, I don't have but two stars left, but I feel compelled. Rats! this is too good to not give you a six. A five would be an insult, i go with me instinct, I know I owe others but this deserves a six regardless. Count your doubloons Mikey. I really enjoyed this one. Good day, mate. wackydo, do loco.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2014
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That mouse picture is cute. I got a tuxedo cat next to me, that would like him. Amusing, the cat ate the rat, who ate the microchip. Great imagination. I saw the Spruce Goose and the Queen Mary at Longbeach when I lived in Upland, Ca. after I got of the navy. Now, with the story. I loved the unknown author's room, now, that was a twist taken on the persona of a rat like you did. That is clever. This is something only Mikey can do. I can't recall anything like this. You created an unknown profile. That was good! This brings something new and entertaining to the cat. I would like to hear from the mouse again, Shhh he's back. He can't hear our conversation, he may kill our little cat & mouse game. Damn, Mikey is coming, I hear his footsteps. He looks like a madman with that quill between his teeth. Hebetter not write us out of this fracking story. We got animal rights!!! Cat & mouse. I like your artwork. the bold big blue words looks good. I been experimenting for new styles to tell people where the scene takes place. This would definitely work and look much better than what I been using. This was very entertaining, I really liked this chapter. That is a clever rodent. Did you meet Rosie Perez? Crap, I don't have but two stars left, but I feel compelled. Rats! this is too good to not give you a six. A five would be an insult, i go with me instinct, I know I owe others but this deserves a six regardless. Count your doubloons Mikey. I really enjoyed this one. Good day, mate. wackydo, do loco.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2014
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I'm so glad you liked this chapter. I decided to just go for it and do anything I wanted!! I thought it would be funny to have the rat take over the story while I went off on a wild goose chase after Rosie Perez. Hahaha. That Spruce Goose was mind blowing. Damn it was big. He got it off the ground too! I went to the Queen Mary every Fourth for fireworks. I was twenty minutes down the Long Beach freeway from there most of my life. Now I'm an hour and a half away in the desert! Thank you mucho, do loco. miguel
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Are you near San Bernodeno or Fulton? I remember when I left Cal for Miss. I made a wrong turn. I heard about the grapevine and cut through it to the other side of the mountains. Hell!!!! that road got narrow and scary as hell!! I was shitting in me britches. I was wondering why I didn't see no traffic. Have you been through the grapevine?
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San Berdo is east about forty miles. We're still L.A. county just north of the city about fifty miles. Oh yeah, the Grapevine... In the fog... insane. Right off the cliff! Angeles Crest isn't much better.
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hell, I went during the heat of the day. When I got to the top and looked down, it scared the living daylights out of me! I was pulling an U haul behind me too. My tires were riding the edge of the road. Hell, I logged 2000 hours in a P 3, this was more scarier. That scene below was burned into me mind, I can still see it. Dusty roads back in 1985.
Comment from l.raven
HI Michael, I am still trying to get over the poor little rat dying...sigh...ok now Elsa is heading to pick up the cat that eat the rat...and bard is entertaining Lucy with the Candyman song...I love Bard...what a trip...LOL...so off to the vets...this is a good chapter...well done...They are all good...but so I like better than others...LOL great job you...very well written sweets...Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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HI Michael, I am still trying to get over the poor little rat dying...sigh...ok now Elsa is heading to pick up the cat that eat the rat...and bard is entertaining Lucy with the Candyman song...I love Bard...what a trip...LOL...so off to the vets...this is a good chapter...well done...They are all good...but so I like better than others...LOL great job you...very well written sweets...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 11-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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You must have missed chapter ten! The rat had a trick up its sleeve. I could tell that it was going to make you too sad to see the rat eaten so I saved him. Hahaha. I don't think people got notices for that chapter or something. mikey
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let me go back and see...sometimes Michael they don't pop up on my pm...but I always try to go back and catch up...later...luff
Comment from DanielEkine
A well planned out work by the author.
Great use of SPAG and a nice opening concept.
The artwork complements the piece very well.
The presentation and entirety of the work is very well done. Great job to the author.
I love the artwork. Very inviting to the readers.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2014
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A well planned out work by the author.
Great use of SPAG and a nice opening concept.
The artwork complements the piece very well.
The presentation and entirety of the work is very well done. Great job to the author.
I love the artwork. Very inviting to the readers.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2014
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Glad you liked it. Working on making the presentation appealing. Pleased that you noticed. Thank you.
Comment from ravenblack
Now we are in side a cat's head? And the rat got away? Crank up the Yanni ( no, please don't). The writing as usual is spot on, but tangential plots (cat and mouse) get zanier by the minute. Just one problem with the chip scenario- to be in a rat's foreleg, it would have to be incredibly small. And the vet does not track chips. It is up to the owner to report their chipped pet missing and then the company that makes the chips initiates a search. Sorry.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2014
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Now we are in side a cat's head? And the rat got away? Crank up the Yanni ( no, please don't). The writing as usual is spot on, but tangential plots (cat and mouse) get zanier by the minute. Just one problem with the chip scenario- to be in a rat's foreleg, it would have to be incredibly small. And the vet does not track chips. It is up to the owner to report their chipped pet missing and then the company that makes the chips initiates a search. Sorry.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2014
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Yeah, I needed some oxygen that night! I would never crank up Yanni and I plan an untimely end for any character that would. It was a New York sewer rat?
Comment from CR Delport
Haha, Mike, your sense of humor is a ray of sunshine. Like always, I enjoy your writing and the occasional chuckle. This is well written.
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Haha, Mike, your sense of humor is a ray of sunshine. Like always, I enjoy your writing and the occasional chuckle. This is well written.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
LOL! Love what the rat added. You really need not worry about it tho. He can be sacrificed if it leads to the kids being saved. Real life has pathos and tragedy, so should stories that are realistic. And it's only a freakin rat! Angela will get over it. Just don't have thm tell her he was eaten or something if you're concerned about her feelings.
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LOL! Love what the rat added. You really need not worry about it tho. He can be sacrificed if it leads to the kids being saved. Real life has pathos and tragedy, so should stories that are realistic. And it's only a freakin rat! Angela will get over it. Just don't have thm tell her he was eaten or something if you're concerned about her feelings.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2014
