A Step is not a Journey
quatrains in abcb rhyme160 total reviews
Comment from zanya
Lao-tzu would definitely concur with this poetic musing no doubt a la steps and journeys ! -a delightful questioning tone pervades the stanzas
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Lao-tzu would definitely concur with this poetic musing no doubt a la steps and journeys ! -a delightful questioning tone pervades the stanzas
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Zanya, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from royowen
A nice easy flowing poem with some ecological metaphorical logic, that's the way you're supposed to use it. I love this even metered, skilfully rhymed poem! I really like you style Brooke and I suspect a lot of others do as well, I wished you lived close enough to " pop in" for a cup of coffee! Blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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A nice easy flowing poem with some ecological metaphorical logic, that's the way you're supposed to use it. I love this even metered, skilfully rhymed poem! I really like you style Brooke and I suspect a lot of others do as well, I wished you lived close enough to " pop in" for a cup of coffee! Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Roy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Carole Rosa
Brooke, Foot Prints in the sand! Sawyer is a busy little boy. Miranda is a wonderful mother. She does so many things with him. He's learning something new every day. I enjoy this journey with Sawyer. I look forward to your poems about Sawyer each day. Smiles and hugs. Carole
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Brooke, Foot Prints in the sand! Sawyer is a busy little boy. Miranda is a wonderful mother. She does so many things with him. He's learning something new every day. I enjoy this journey with Sawyer. I look forward to your poems about Sawyer each day. Smiles and hugs. Carole
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much :-) Miranda's great joy in life is doing things with Sawyer. She likes beaches like Topanga that aren't boardwalk/sideshow kinds of places, and Sawyer seems to love them too :-) Brooke
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Brooke, Thank you for your sweet reply.
Comment from ArtGal
Brooke, another short but powerful one that says so much. Yes, we have to take that first step in order to start our journey. What got me to stop and think was when you wrote that just a single raindrop is all it took to start the sea. And without the sea, we would be back to sand, and without footprints there would be no journey. Why can't I think like you??? I love these poems with a wonderful message. Just wish I could get into your head for a little while, lol. BRAVO with this one. . .Sharon
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Brooke, another short but powerful one that says so much. Yes, we have to take that first step in order to start our journey. What got me to stop and think was when you wrote that just a single raindrop is all it took to start the sea. And without the sea, we would be back to sand, and without footprints there would be no journey. Why can't I think like you??? I love these poems with a wonderful message. Just wish I could get into your head for a little while, lol. BRAVO with this one. . .Sharon
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Sharon, thank you so much - you've left me smiling. I so appreciate your encouragement and generosity :-) Brooke
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Oh Brooke, your writing is just too good, and you should be putting these into books! I look forward to each poem, no matter if it's funny, with a message or without, just because of how you write. So very, very good!!!
Comment from RYME4U
So true this is. Great rhyme and rhythm. A great lesson for life here... you cant achieve big things without starting out small. Very well done. Great picture.
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So true this is. Great rhyme and rhythm. A great lesson for life here... you cant achieve big things without starting out small. Very well done. Great picture.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
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RYME4U, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from paulah60
Some powerful messages implicit in this one, Brooke. I particularly like:
'just like a single raindrop
that helped to build the sea,
but if there were no rain drops,
the seas would turn to sand'
We can feel so insignificant in this world, just a mere 'drop in the ocean', and forget that every drop creates a ripple. These lines also empower the truth that 'All is One'.
I like that you've used 'footstep', and haven't tried to fit 'footprints' in there, which has become a little cliched.
You have the gift of both reminding adults of the simple truths that are eclipsed by, well, life (!), and teaching children.
Cheers
Paula
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Some powerful messages implicit in this one, Brooke. I particularly like:
'just like a single raindrop
that helped to build the sea,
but if there were no rain drops,
the seas would turn to sand'
We can feel so insignificant in this world, just a mere 'drop in the ocean', and forget that every drop creates a ripple. These lines also empower the truth that 'All is One'.
I like that you've used 'footstep', and haven't tried to fit 'footprints' in there, which has become a little cliched.
You have the gift of both reminding adults of the simple truths that are eclipsed by, well, life (!), and teaching children.
Cheers
Paula
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
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Paula, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from krys123
Brooke, correlation in this poem between a single footsteps or a drop of rain In its simplicity can start something large and anew. Your rhyming was done excellently and neither of your rhymes were forced, labor or strained and your rhythms
meter and tempo Was extremely well done and flowed smoothly throughout your poem. Thank you for sharing and posting this for everyone and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Brooke, correlation in this poem between a single footsteps or a drop of rain In its simplicity can start something large and anew. Your rhyming was done excellently and neither of your rhymes were forced, labor or strained and your rhythms
meter and tempo Was extremely well done and flowed smoothly throughout your poem. Thank you for sharing and posting this for everyone and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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thank you so much, Alex, for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
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You are so sincerely welcome my friend. I really enjoy your interpretations by using your grandson in your pictures.
Alex
Comment from Ed_Anderson
In your notes you thank the person who supplied the picture, in my review I would like to thank you. Whether intentional or not you have reminded me that taking the first step is not the journey and not to be discouraged right away, just because something doesn't go my way. Thank you!
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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In your notes you thank the person who supplied the picture, in my review I would like to thank you. Whether intentional or not you have reminded me that taking the first step is not the journey and not to be discouraged right away, just because something doesn't go my way. Thank you!
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Ed :-) Brooke
Comment from Ben Colder
I hope you are keeping these poem concerning Sawyer. He will enjoy them someday in remembrance Another goodie Brooke. Enjoyed as always. Shalom.
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I hope you are keeping these poem concerning Sawyer. He will enjoy them someday in remembrance Another goodie Brooke. Enjoyed as always. Shalom.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Ben, thank you so much - yes, saving them all :-) Brooke
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You will be glad you did.
Comment from Just Pete
A somewhat philosophical chain of thought, each one a valid idea. "The longest journey begins with the first step" (can't remember who said that). Another nicely worded and rhymed poem. Always a pleasure to read your fine work. Pete
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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A somewhat philosophical chain of thought, each one a valid idea. "The longest journey begins with the first step" (can't remember who said that). Another nicely worded and rhymed poem. Always a pleasure to read your fine work. Pete
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Pete, thank you so much :-) Brooke
