A Step is not a Journey
quatrains in abcb rhyme160 total reviews
Comment from Delahay
A very nice, poetic way of saying every journey starts with a single step. Big things are made out of small efforts, long trips are started with a one step, millions of raindrops make a river.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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A very nice, poetic way of saying every journey starts with a single step. Big things are made out of small efforts, long trips are started with a one step, millions of raindrops make a river.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Ward, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
This makes you stop and think because you are so right but I've never heard it put like this before. You did a great job friend :)
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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This makes you stop and think because you are so right but I've never heard it put like this before. You did a great job friend :)
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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ExperiencingLiphe, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from mbagby23
Where ever we go in our life it takes all kinds of steps that makes up our jouerny. Then the jouerny makes up the memories we share in our life.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Where ever we go in our life it takes all kinds of steps that makes up our jouerny. Then the jouerny makes up the memories we share in our life.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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mbagby, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from flylikeaneagle
A Step is not a journey.
I really like the image of the step to a journey and the rain drop to the sea. I noticed that you are writing a quatrain with abcb rhyme, but all the lines are 7 syllables except for the "might fade from memory" which is 6 and is missing the word to rhyme with sea. Maybe try "flee or flees."
We all have beginnings, we need to start, do something, write, etc. to move on our journey of life. I really like your poem and the punch of thought at the ending. Great inspiration. flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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A Step is not a journey.
I really like the image of the step to a journey and the rain drop to the sea. I noticed that you are writing a quatrain with abcb rhyme, but all the lines are 7 syllables except for the "might fade from memory" which is 6 and is missing the word to rhyme with sea. Maybe try "flee or flees."
We all have beginnings, we need to start, do something, write, etc. to move on our journey of life. I really like your poem and the punch of thought at the ending. Great inspiration. flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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flylikeaneagle, I appreciate your feedback and your generous rating :-) Brooke
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
And each year those little footsteps will grow bigger and bigger. Then the journey of the man can be measured against what he has become.
The step that starts a journey might fade from memory.
Wonderful line,
:-) Carolyn
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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And each year those little footsteps will grow bigger and bigger. Then the journey of the man can be measured against what he has become.
The step that starts a journey might fade from memory.
Wonderful line,
:-) Carolyn
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Carolyn, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from nancyjam
Excellent meter and rhyme
throughout this thoughtful piece.
Sawyer seems not to miss a step in
his journey through childhood. He has had
so many wonderful experiences which will prepare
him for what lies ahead. Nancy
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Excellent meter and rhyme
throughout this thoughtful piece.
Sawyer seems not to miss a step in
his journey through childhood. He has had
so many wonderful experiences which will prepare
him for what lies ahead. Nancy
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Nancy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Irish Rain
Beautifully true...and as I love the sea...and I just adore rain...let it pour! Wonderfully inspiring...cute picture! Blessings tonight! Judy
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Beautifully true...and as I love the sea...and I just adore rain...let it pour! Wonderfully inspiring...cute picture! Blessings tonight! Judy
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Judy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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you are always welcome!
Comment from Dean Kuch
So true Brooke. Nothing ventured, nothing gained. If we believe in ourselves and our God given talents and abilities, and yet we allow them to languish on the shelf collecting cosmic dust, we have done a great disservice to not only ourselves, but to all who might have benefited from it.
Well done...
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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So true Brooke. Nothing ventured, nothing gained. If we believe in ourselves and our God given talents and abilities, and yet we allow them to languish on the shelf collecting cosmic dust, we have done a great disservice to not only ourselves, but to all who might have benefited from it.
Well done...
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Dean :-) Brooke
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
A step is not a journey,
but still it is required.
No dream is ever realized
until it is aspired.
The step that starts a journey
might fade from memory,
just like a single raindrop
that helped to FILL the sea,
but if there were no rain drops,
the seas would turn to sand,
and if there were no footsteps,
no JOURNEY COULD BE PLANNED Used 'journey' in line 1
A steady 7676 with a abcb meter makes for a smooth read. Suggestions only.
Regards:
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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A step is not a journey,
but still it is required.
No dream is ever realized
until it is aspired.
The step that starts a journey
might fade from memory,
just like a single raindrop
that helped to FILL the sea,
but if there were no rain drops,
the seas would turn to sand,
and if there were no footsteps,
no JOURNEY COULD BE PLANNED Used 'journey' in line 1
A steady 7676 with a abcb meter makes for a smooth read. Suggestions only.
Regards:
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Stephen, for your thoughtful feedback :-) Brooke
Comment from Dawn Munro
HAHAHAHA - well, it might not be the moon, but it's still a precious step, and this precious poem immortalizes it - what a collection this child will have to show HIS kids!
As always, CHARMED!!!
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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HAHAHAHA - well, it might not be the moon, but it's still a precious step, and this precious poem immortalizes it - what a collection this child will have to show HIS kids!
As always, CHARMED!!!
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Dawn - I wonder what a toddler thinks of the ocean, just the sheer size of it. Brooke :-)
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I imagine pure excitement! :0)
