A Step is not a Journey
quatrains in abcb rhyme160 total reviews
Comment from visionary1234
love it - always - how the pic of Sawyer absolutely inspires EXACTLY the most fitting thoughts, Brooke. This is one lucky little boy - he'll have the equivalent of the old Encyclopedia Britannica of verses all inspired by him and written by his grandma! A delight, as always. My only question was on the use of word 'aspired' - I thought one customarily aspired TO something, so it was odd to see it hanging there just as a verb ???
:)Sharyn
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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love it - always - how the pic of Sawyer absolutely inspires EXACTLY the most fitting thoughts, Brooke. This is one lucky little boy - he'll have the equivalent of the old Encyclopedia Britannica of verses all inspired by him and written by his grandma! A delight, as always. My only question was on the use of word 'aspired' - I thought one customarily aspired TO something, so it was odd to see it hanging there just as a verb ???
:)Sharyn
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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thank you, Sharyn - yep, my use of aspire there is totally not grammatical and I did it anyway. LOL Sort of like one of my favorite songs by the Turtles - Me and you, and you and me...so happy together :-) Brooke
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well I figured you knew exactly what you were doing, Brooke dear :)S
Comment from c_lucas
A journey cannot begin without the first step. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read..
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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A journey cannot begin without the first step. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read..
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Charlie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Brooke,
I love this photo of Sawyer. I like your thought process in this too, which in turns amplifies Sawyer's footprints.
Cheers,
Keep Smilin'... Jax
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Hi Brooke,
I love this photo of Sawyer. I like your thought process in this too, which in turns amplifies Sawyer's footprints.
Cheers,
Keep Smilin'... Jax
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Jax, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
WOW! I've never heard it expressed better than this:
just like a single raindrop
that helped to build the sea,
You are a genius, Brooke. There's no other word for it. Bravo and loud applause for this magnificent poem, all the more amazing for its brevity. A genius like you needs very few well-chosen words to say what I'd say, badly, in 1000.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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WOW! I've never heard it expressed better than this:
just like a single raindrop
that helped to build the sea,
You are a genius, Brooke. There's no other word for it. Bravo and loud applause for this magnificent poem, all the more amazing for its brevity. A genius like you needs very few well-chosen words to say what I'd say, badly, in 1000.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Phyllis, you can make me smile even when I'm feeling totally grumpy. Thank you so much for your encouragement and generosity :-) Brooke
Comment from Petriesan
um, first time, I have a question about construction: does the second line refer to the step or the journey?
that was all I saw, and it made me stop, which usually does not happen in your work.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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um, first time, I have a question about construction: does the second line refer to the step or the journey?
that was all I saw, and it made me stop, which usually does not happen in your work.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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a step is not a journey, but still it is required - a step is required to start the journey :-) Thanks for your review, Petriesan :-) Brooke
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ok, I See the referent now, usually it is the noun immediately preceding. . .got it
Comment from Capricorn30
One step begins a journey of plenty, as Sawyer is nicely demonstrating;
A well-penned poem incorporating nice alliteration of:
"single"; "sea";
"seas"; "sand";
As the sea is formed by many drops of rain, so too our dreams are formed, beginning with imperative elements of the earth.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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One step begins a journey of plenty, as Sawyer is nicely demonstrating;
A well-penned poem incorporating nice alliteration of:
"single"; "sea";
"seas"; "sand";
As the sea is formed by many drops of rain, so too our dreams are formed, beginning with imperative elements of the earth.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Capricorn, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from angelface2
Another good poem with rhyme and rhythm very nice. I wonder what journey Sawyer is on, one step at a time. He's so cute. This is a good picture for the poem. Hugs. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Another good poem with rhyme and rhythm very nice. I wonder what journey Sawyer is on, one step at a time. He's so cute. This is a good picture for the poem. Hugs. Miss Sally
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Miss Sally, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from fastdigits
Your words as always are beautifully
structured in artistic majesty, but are
more than just more poetic thoughts.
Within your artistry is this simple message
that for every action there is a reaction
which can change the world as we know
it.
Beautifully done
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Your words as always are beautifully
structured in artistic majesty, but are
more than just more poetic thoughts.
Within your artistry is this simple message
that for every action there is a reaction
which can change the world as we know
it.
Beautifully done
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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fastdigits, thank you so much. I truly appreciate your generous rating and your lovely comments :-) Brooke
Comment from MissMerri
This is the best poem I've read all day! I love the premise, the words and rhyme, the perfect meter and the adorable picture that illustrates the entire concept so perfectly. There is no way it could be better, so it must be exceptional. At least, it is the total package and totally lovely. MM
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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This is the best poem I've read all day! I love the premise, the words and rhyme, the perfect meter and the adorable picture that illustrates the entire concept so perfectly. There is no way it could be better, so it must be exceptional. At least, it is the total package and totally lovely. MM
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Adonna, thank you so very very much, my gracious friend :-) I truly appreciate that compliment and your generous sixth star. I nearly tore my hair out over the final stanza, so I'm thrilled that you think it all turned out well in the end :-) Brooke
Comment from Raphael Montonaro
Nice use of rhyme. Made it a bit it a bit of a story! that's what a good poet wants. Good form and content. Nothing wrong here.......keep writing, this was good!
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Nice use of rhyme. Made it a bit it a bit of a story! that's what a good poet wants. Good form and content. Nothing wrong here.......keep writing, this was good!
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Raphael, thanks so much :-) Brooke
