Surprise!
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Comment from c_lucas
A very significant scene of father and son bonding. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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A very significant scene of father and son bonding. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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thank you so much, Charlie :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Brooke - a delightful children's poem, lovely images, and skillfully penned. The picture of Cutie Pie is funny - looks like he is having a blast.
Nicely done and I enjoyed the read.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Dear Brooke - a delightful children's poem, lovely images, and skillfully penned. The picture of Cutie Pie is funny - looks like he is having a blast.
Nicely done and I enjoyed the read.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Maureen, thank you so very much :-) Andy, his dad, has a bigger than life personality. He is a hoot with kids. Brooke :-)
Comment from Donya Quijote
What a fun and endearing way to express the simple joys of life. Surprises do happen every day and we should grateful for them. Another smile-making poem and I do believe that is one that could be turned into a folk type song. Very rhythmic and upbeat. A winner all the way. Sawyer looks like he was having fun at the beach.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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What a fun and endearing way to express the simple joys of life. Surprises do happen every day and we should grateful for them. Another smile-making poem and I do believe that is one that could be turned into a folk type song. Very rhythmic and upbeat. A winner all the way. Sawyer looks like he was having fun at the beach.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Donya. Sawyer LOVES his daddy :-) Brooke
Comment from Debra White
Hi Brooke, this is a lovely children's poem :) I especially like the repeat line and the 'but soon...' line in each verse, kids get a feel for what comes next because of the familiarity of those lines. I love the theme of transformation and surprise... Fun and exciting. Love the pic too though I would hate to buried up to my neck in sand! Kindest regards, Debra :)
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Hi Brooke, this is a lovely children's poem :) I especially like the repeat line and the 'but soon...' line in each verse, kids get a feel for what comes next because of the familiarity of those lines. I love the theme of transformation and surprise... Fun and exciting. Love the pic too though I would hate to buried up to my neck in sand! Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Debra, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from donnadiann
Good repeating line and interesting alliterations. Good enjambment...last stanza...have gone astray, till soon a friend is at the door. Great pictures through your well-chosen words:)
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Good repeating line and interesting alliterations. Good enjambment...last stanza...have gone astray, till soon a friend is at the door. Great pictures through your well-chosen words:)
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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donnadiann, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Brooke:-)
"Surprise!" is a superior poem that will delight children by calling their attention to the ordinary magic of living on this beautiful globe. It is also an example of superior poetry craft: figurative language and imagery, rhyme and rhyme scheme and meter.
Preston
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Hi, Brooke:-)
"Surprise!" is a superior poem that will delight children by calling their attention to the ordinary magic of living on this beautiful globe. It is also an example of superior poetry craft: figurative language and imagery, rhyme and rhyme scheme and meter.
Preston
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Preston, for your generous sixth star and gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
surprises happen every day.
But it's never a surprise when Brooke posts a poem that I just KNOW I'm going to love, and this one is no exception.
Does Miranda take enough photos of Sawyer? He probably thinks Mom has a camera for a face! But they really are precious... what a fabulous collection and he's just tiny. You'll never run out of topics for your kids' books! And they come with their own illustrations, too! :)
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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surprises happen every day.
But it's never a surprise when Brooke posts a poem that I just KNOW I'm going to love, and this one is no exception.
Does Miranda take enough photos of Sawyer? He probably thinks Mom has a camera for a face! But they really are precious... what a fabulous collection and he's just tiny. You'll never run out of topics for your kids' books! And they come with their own illustrations, too! :)
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Phyllis. :-) Yeah, I wonder if he thinks every child spends his days posing for a photo shoot. LOL Her brother thinks she's batty. LOL Brooke
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well, look at it this way.... there's good money in modeling and they always need more boys and men since it's mostly girls who go into it. he's used to the camera, that's for sure.
Comment from Delahay
I like the simple way this poem paints the imagery of the way nature changes things from one small, seemingly unimportant thing into something different. A lowly caterpillar becomes a beautiful butterfly, a tiny drop of rain becomes a river.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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I like the simple way this poem paints the imagery of the way nature changes things from one small, seemingly unimportant thing into something different. A lowly caterpillar becomes a beautiful butterfly, a tiny drop of rain becomes a river.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, Ward :-) Brooke
Comment from mermaids
There is a good feeling in your words. Love the verse about the raindrop finding the river bed which leads to finding the sea. Your words show how nature is full of surprises and gifts. Love the pic.
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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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There is a good feeling in your words. Love the verse about the raindrop finding the river bed which leads to finding the sea. Your words show how nature is full of surprises and gifts. Love the pic.
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Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Elaine, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from barbara.wilkey
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHH, cute. Sawyer and his daddy are having so much fun. What a wonderful day and what wonderful parents. Sawyer is so lucky. I feel like I'm a surrogate grandma. LOL Loved your poem.
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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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AHHHHHHHHHHHHHH, cute. Sawyer and his daddy are having so much fun. What a wonderful day and what wonderful parents. Sawyer is so lucky. I feel like I'm a surrogate grandma. LOL Loved your poem.
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Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Barbara :-) Sawyer has a couple hundred surrogate grandparents, and I just love it! Brooke
