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Surprise!

a kyrielle

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Comment from seaglass
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This is a lovely poem with smooth rhyme and meter describing some of the surprises of spring. No wonder we love it so much, so many things emerge brand new.

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
    seaglass, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from L.M.Mullins
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Wonderful poem with a smooth flow and easy rhythm to follow. I like the repletion of the last line of each stanza.
Len

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
    Len, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
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Hi Brooke,

I've often thought about throwing some flower seeds into the wind and where they lay is where they stay. Trouble is, with my 'black thumb', they would turn into thistles and dandelions!! LOL

Nice spring/summer poem.

Cheers,
Keep Smilin'.... Jax

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
    Jax, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from RYME4U
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I like the unique rhyme scheme here. Each stanza is a delight to read.You have given vivid imagery to the reader. Well p[resented...great job.

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
    RYME4U, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from risktaker
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I love the phrase "surprises happen every day". This true if we look for the smiles and positives of each day. I like the descriptions of the interconnectedness of various events. I see the seeds and the final products coming into fruition. The words and the structure flow effectively and I love the colors. The photo is outstanding.

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
    Risktaker, thank you so much :-) Brooke
reply by risktaker on 10-Jun-2014
    ok risktaker
Comment from Angel Debbie
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This is a neat way of looking at surprises, just as a child would especially with the birds eggs and polliwogs. My children loved watching the changes in both and were surprised. Great write once again my dear Lady. Bravo.

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
    Angel Debbie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from tfawcus
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One of your best! What a lovely reminder of the small miracles of nature and the wonderfully uplifting feeling we gain from friendship in adversity. The kyrielle is just the perfect form for this one! Such a refreshing poem to wake up to this morning.

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
    tfawcus, thank you so much for your generous and encouraging response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from paulah60
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A lovely reflection, Brooke, on the wondrous nature of what we've sadly come to regard as ordinary occurrences. Too much happens that makes us systematically numb and close our hearts. And in a culture where many young people have developed a narcissistic sense of entitlement, the beauty around and within us is eclipsed by our temporal reality.
But indeed, 'surprises happen every day' if we're open!
Cheers
Paula

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
    Thank you so much, Paula, for your very thoughtful reading of this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Sasha
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I love the kyrielle and haven't read one in quite some time. Lovely poem about the amazing surprises in nature. Just love the photo of Dad popping out of the sand. Sawyer looks pretty happy too. Very nice work with this one, I love the rhyme scheme of the kyrielle. Great work.

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
    Thanks so much, Valerie. Andy is so good with his son. Sawyer is always laughs and smiles around him :-) Brooke
reply by Sasha on 08-Jun-2014
    My ex was great with the kids too. He laughed, tickled and told them wonderful stories. We didn't communicate much...maybe I was too old...lol
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
    Andy is the kind of guy who gets standing ovations at a karaoke place. :-)
Comment from Capricorn30
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Who doesn't love surprises?!
Nature's brilliant hues and magical creations give children and adults alike reasons to smile;
"meadow's in full bloom";
"blue perfection"; nice visual imagery;
A pleasurable read on nature's smallest gifts bringing great happiness.


 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
    Capricorn, thank you so much :-) Brooke