Bel Air: A Bard's Guide
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Angela Plays It Cute, Ransom Demands"Sequel to The Bard of Bel Air.
12 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
love her inner thoughts about loving parents :-)
walking off to find Elsa, and - add comma
good dialogue that conveys emotion and attitude well
Brooke :-)
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love her inner thoughts about loving parents :-)
walking off to find Elsa, and - add comma
good dialogue that conveys emotion and attitude well
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
Comment from l.raven
HI Michael I do love Bard...LOL...Why...Johnny Ringo. You look like someone just walked all over your grave...tombstone...love it...and I am so heart broken the little mouse didn't eat all morning...sigh...ok!!! Uncle Barry seems the suck up everything Angela says...but she's not kidding Elsa...and a ransom is asked...but maybe not enough money...I have to move on...some how I got one behind...don't know how...but I did...later sweetie...another great chapter Michael...luff Linda xxoo
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HI Michael I do love Bard...LOL...Why...Johnny Ringo. You look like someone just walked all over your grave...tombstone...love it...and I am so heart broken the little mouse didn't eat all morning...sigh...ok!!! Uncle Barry seems the suck up everything Angela says...but she's not kidding Elsa...and a ransom is asked...but maybe not enough money...I have to move on...some how I got one behind...don't know how...but I did...later sweetie...another great chapter Michael...luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
Comment from Nosha17
I don't know how you keep track of all the side plots, subplots, etc. It is good you have a key to the characters as there are a lot to keep track of. Is this story going to be part 2, a follow on from the other when you publish or is it an extension of the same book? I had read chapter 7- it was a good chapter, as you pointed out! Great write as always. Faye
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I don't know how you keep track of all the side plots, subplots, etc. It is good you have a key to the characters as there are a lot to keep track of. Is this story going to be part 2, a follow on from the other when you publish or is it an extension of the same book? I had read chapter 7- it was a good chapter, as you pointed out! Great write as always. Faye
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, this is another solid installment to the increasing tension and development of the story. Good consistency with characters. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, this is another solid installment to the increasing tension and development of the story. Good consistency with characters. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
Comment from ravenblack
A rat with a microchip implant?...where do you come up with this stuff? It sounds to me like Barry is engaged in child trafficking. If that's the case, be sure to launch a torpedo up his...as I was saying, good chapter.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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A rat with a microchip implant?...where do you come up with this stuff? It sounds to me like Barry is engaged in child trafficking. If that's the case, be sure to launch a torpedo up his...as I was saying, good chapter.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Torpedo's are armed. I had a vision of them in the Bel Air Vet with Angela wanting to see how far she could push her negligent parents. A dog got a chip and she threw a fit cause her pet rat didn't have one and her guilty parents had the vet put one in to shut her up! Hahaha. Sounds good to me...
Comment from seaglass
There are lots of possibilities popping up here. The chip in the rat, awesome possibilities. You would think parents so rich would put a chip in the kid. Do you have any reviewers who complain about thoughts being in italics. I have purchased a number of books in the last few years (best sellers) that do this and I like reading stories . hat do that but I have one reviewer who just can't accept it.
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There are lots of possibilities popping up here. The chip in the rat, awesome possibilities. You would think parents so rich would put a chip in the kid. Do you have any reviewers who complain about thoughts being in italics. I have purchased a number of books in the last few years (best sellers) that do this and I like reading stories . hat do that but I have one reviewer who just can't accept it.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
Comment from Sankey
Going well mate. Your individual style shines through as always. Unique Mikey for sure. But then if others are helping?? Is it really you? Ha! No spags good work.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Going well mate. Your individual style shines through as always. Unique Mikey for sure. But then if others are helping?? Is it really you? Ha! No spags good work.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Not getting much help. Hahaha. Reviews are hard to come by in the summer it seems. Glad you're enjoying. It took me awhile to come up with some clues to follow. Got to get the detectives out to sea for some real fun!
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
So Susan is in on the kidnapping? But surely she doesn't want them to kill her daughter! And Barry knows Angela isn't as dumb as she acts. How can anyone get out of this alive? Getting too scary!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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So Susan is in on the kidnapping? But surely she doesn't want them to kill her daughter! And Barry knows Angela isn't as dumb as she acts. How can anyone get out of this alive? Getting too scary!
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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No, she doesn't. She isn't in the position she thinks she's in. Barry has been played by Angela from the time he met her as a seven year old. I'm too sappy to kill anyone I like. Hahaha. I'll find a way.
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I shoulda known, you silly sap, you. Phew! I'm relieved. I don't like to lose the good guys/girls either. :)
Comment from nordicgirl
As always full of insights and thoughts abiut human nature. You have the character if Angela down to a tee. Many know her very well excellent believable portrayll. Plot rolling perfectly now. Action at sea might be in our future, yes? NG
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As always full of insights and thoughts abiut human nature. You have the character if Angela down to a tee. Many know her very well excellent believable portrayll. Plot rolling perfectly now. Action at sea might be in our future, yes? NG
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
Comment from c_lucas
In today's world of high tech, kidnapping doesn't pay. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
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In today's world of high tech, kidnapping doesn't pay. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
