KayCee
A cautionary tale...66 total reviews
Comment from Treischel
What a delightful and well written story takl written in poetic format with a peppery tetrameter and aabb rhyming. It flowed very well and was interesting throughout. Loved the humor. The poetry was excellent. I'll have to look some of your other work.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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What a delightful and well written story takl written in poetic format with a peppery tetrameter and aabb rhyming. It flowed very well and was interesting throughout. Loved the humor. The poetry was excellent. I'll have to look some of your other work.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thanks for the great review and the six stars - I appreciate it.
Steve
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hi Steve,
Just checking out the Poem of the Month nominees.
I was thinking Victorian cautionary tales when I came to your author notes.
Brilliant - love it! Impeccable rhyme and metre ... and, of course punctuation, oh Most Punctilious One!
REAL poetry.
Hope you win! :)
Sonali
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Hi Steve,
Just checking out the Poem of the Month nominees.
I was thinking Victorian cautionary tales when I came to your author notes.
Brilliant - love it! Impeccable rhyme and metre ... and, of course punctuation, oh Most Punctilious One!
REAL poetry.
Hope you win! :)
Sonali
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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I suspect more people think of Maureen's pieces as real poetry - she has three poems in POM! I doubt whether my 'comedy' can defeat her 'tragedy' but at least, thanks to picking up a couple more six star reviews today, KayCee has made it to the top of the 'Best Poems' list...
Still haven't had inspiration for a sequel to match this - needs to be relevant to modern life and kids...
Thanks, Sonali, for your enthusiasm and support.
Steve
Comment from amahra
She used her phone for six hours straight[I would take out the word 'six' and keep the flow] [She used her phone six hours straight] I loved this poem. It's long but unlike other long ones it's very entertaining and engaging.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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She used her phone for six hours straight[I would take out the word 'six' and keep the flow] [She used her phone six hours straight] I loved this poem. It's long but unlike other long ones it's very entertaining and engaging.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from SaluteDobby
This poem I rate two plus four
And since I'm from Bangalore,
I'll also say, "bloody hell!
This was really swell!"
LOL. I can't stop thinking in rhymes now, thanks to you! You've certainly outdone yourself, Steve! I absolutely loved this poem and hope that you win the contest (no reprisal of the bridesmaids poem this time round, eh?) I was either smiling or chuckling all through this poem. Brought back memories of my own youth, when my eyes and fingers were glued to the cell phone. My parents thought that my generation was hopeless, but I realize that we were pretty ok, compared to the kids these days! Not just kids- adults are also disconnecting from the real world, preferring to communicate "online". I really hope you start your series. This was a really fun read (I read it to my mom and she agrees) and I can't wait to read more!!
All the best with the contest!! Rooting for you1
Namratha
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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This poem I rate two plus four
And since I'm from Bangalore,
I'll also say, "bloody hell!
This was really swell!"
LOL. I can't stop thinking in rhymes now, thanks to you! You've certainly outdone yourself, Steve! I absolutely loved this poem and hope that you win the contest (no reprisal of the bridesmaids poem this time round, eh?) I was either smiling or chuckling all through this poem. Brought back memories of my own youth, when my eyes and fingers were glued to the cell phone. My parents thought that my generation was hopeless, but I realize that we were pretty ok, compared to the kids these days! Not just kids- adults are also disconnecting from the real world, preferring to communicate "online". I really hope you start your series. This was a really fun read (I read it to my mom and she agrees) and I can't wait to read more!!
All the best with the contest!! Rooting for you1
Namratha
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Hi, namratha. Thanks so much for the great review and the six stars. I fear KayCee has little chance of winning the POM - in another month she might have made it but there are too many strong and emotionally powerful pieces this month so humour will take a back seat.
I am glad you weren't offended by the Bangalore reference - it was just too tasty to resist and a little bit of non-PC language spices up the best limericks and humorous pieces.
I somehow suspect that the iPhone generation will manage to turn out OK in the end, just as the Flappers, the Rock and Rollers, the Drugs and Drop-Outers etc all have before them...
Thanks again for the support - much appreiciated.
Steve
Comment from MisinformedPoet
Oh, that is terrible, horrible and Fabulously wicked!! Fantastic to see such a well thought out tale in poetic form, completely up-to-date and with a great moral ending. I love the names you have used and the way you refer to them and your reference to the 'peeing app' (is that real? Ii must check it out :-)). Really enjoyed reading this one and i will be sure to share it with my preteen daughter and hope she takes note!
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Oh, that is terrible, horrible and Fabulously wicked!! Fantastic to see such a well thought out tale in poetic form, completely up-to-date and with a great moral ending. I love the names you have used and the way you refer to them and your reference to the 'peeing app' (is that real? Ii must check it out :-)). Really enjoyed reading this one and i will be sure to share it with my preteen daughter and hope she takes note!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Thanks, MP - so glad you enjoyed this piece of nonsense.
Steve
Comment from Erik McGinley
Hilarious, not just literal warning of wasting your mind upon verbosity but maybe metaphoric warning of dreaming of the purple tingle.
Never met someone solely dick oriented, male or female, who wasn't a brainless moron. :D
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Hilarious, not just literal warning of wasting your mind upon verbosity but maybe metaphoric warning of dreaming of the purple tingle.
Never met someone solely dick oriented, male or female, who wasn't a brainless moron. :D
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Thanks for the kind review.
Steve
Comment from Muffins
Although it is a long poem the point is hilarious and frightful true. My niece has an I phone but my sister is strict on her use of it. Once she my niece did something she wasn't suppose to do and was off phone duty for months. Luckily, my niece has other interest and didn't go insane( she just turn 10, so maybe her young age had something to do with it). The adults are worse. I see them text as they are crossing a busy street and have the nerve to give cars a dirty look. Poor Kaycee, I guess she got what she wanted to be with her phone all the time.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Although it is a long poem the point is hilarious and frightful true. My niece has an I phone but my sister is strict on her use of it. Once she my niece did something she wasn't suppose to do and was off phone duty for months. Luckily, my niece has other interest and didn't go insane( she just turn 10, so maybe her young age had something to do with it). The adults are worse. I see them text as they are crossing a busy street and have the nerve to give cars a dirty look. Poor Kaycee, I guess she got what she wanted to be with her phone all the time.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Thanks for the kind words.
Of course this obsession like others can be monitored and controlled by sensible parenting and teaching, but as a teacher I see many teens for whom the phone is indispensable.
Steve
Comment from rouskin
Where she can lie, warm, dry and clean To be an answering machine...:)))) A bit long but very enjoyable read Great work
Blessings, Rouskin
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Where she can lie, warm, dry and clean To be an answering machine...:)))) A bit long but very enjoyable read Great work
Blessings, Rouskin
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from GracieAnn
kiwi, this write is all too universal for so many who either are glued to technology or watch those around them become techno-Borgs. Great humor and rhyme. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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kiwi, this write is all too universal for so many who either are glued to technology or watch those around them become techno-Borgs. Great humor and rhyme. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Thanks, GracieAnn.
Steve
Comment from aanneee
So! I am chuckling away like I had good sense. This is unbelievably odd and I have had more fun with this than I've had in years at this time of the evening (slight exaggeration). The second time I read it out loud and it just seemed to go faster and faster and faster until I was virtually tripping over my tongue. Of course I wanted a happy ending, but I will forgive you for not giving me one as you gave me so much fun - Dinah
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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So! I am chuckling away like I had good sense. This is unbelievably odd and I have had more fun with this than I've had in years at this time of the evening (slight exaggeration). The second time I read it out loud and it just seemed to go faster and faster and faster until I was virtually tripping over my tongue. Of course I wanted a happy ending, but I will forgive you for not giving me one as you gave me so much fun - Dinah
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Thank you very much for the kind comments.
Of course the poem also reflects this thought which I found on somebody's profile page:
"I fear the day that technology will surpass our human interaction the world will have a generation of idiots"
Steve
