Comment from chasennov

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 19 - Teddy Bear
Chapter 19 of the book Steve's Poems for Kids It's a busy life being a bear... "Teddy Bear" This is a great little children's poem you have brought out again here, Steve. This is the kind of stuff kids love so much at bed time. Well done.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014

Thank you!

Steve

reply by chasennov on 04-Aug-2014

My pleasure, Steve.

Comment from L.M.Mullins

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 19 - Teddy Bear
Sound like the makings of a great children's book. Brilliant imagination and flow throughout the entire piece. None of your rhymes seemed forced (maybe china/Jemima)
Excellent work and congratulations.
Len

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014

Thanks, len.

Steve

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 19 - Teddy Bear
Hi Steve - This is not just very well written with good punctuation but flows along perfectly and tells a good story. I like the clever way you split the word swashbuckle in the end line of stanza 2 - an altogether good poem that children will love. Kind regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014

Thanks, Dorothy - glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from gypsycaravan

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 19 - Teddy Bear
Totally delightful poem. I loved reading it out loud. The story flowed without all those unnecessary words and phrases some poets insert just to make the rhyme. Wish I had a grandchild young enough to enjoy this. Terrific poem.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014

Looks like you'll just hav to wait for great grand-kids!

Thanks for the kind review.

Steve

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 19 - Teddy Bear
A fine poem you've written, you have have a great imagination, this was sheer artistry Steve, I enjoyed it no end, it was articulate, with great descriptive language, it was fluid, it was imaginative, with great rhythm to it, a work of art! Couplet rhyming, even meter. Well done, blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014

Thanks, Roy - glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 19 - Teddy Bear
great aabb rhyming scheme compliments the story. Only thing
I can fault which is really chicken shit was the rhyming of China/ Jemima proximate but not phonetically perfect

only a very small glitch not really worth worrying about I suppose...can you think of a girl's name spelt with suffix "ina" and rhyming with china?

sounds like a great book Steve.

dip

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014

Thanks, Dip - glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from strandregs

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 19 - Teddy Bear
Would a teddy fit into the tub, do you s'pose?Now into our 'jamas and ready for bed;
For better flow -
Would my teddy enjoy a warm dip, do you s'pose?
Lovely bed time rhyme to take my mind off other matters :-)
I'm your book will be a classic
A hit
Don't ever quit.
Z.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014

Thanks for the warm words.

Hang in there.

Steve

Comment from Tigerman55

Good

Rating of Chapter 19 - Teddy Bear
A well written poem especially for young children. It takes one back to when you you were much younger and loved playing imaginary games. Poems like this are fun to read. Well done.

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 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014

Thank you!

Steve

reply by Tigerman55 on 04-Jan-2016

Keep up with your writing, it sounds good

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 19 - Teddy Bear
Perfect fun poem for kids, Steve.

Great harmless swashbuckling adventures in vivid imagery, including the fun 'There's jam on my jacket and mud on my nose'.

A bit long for me, but the innocent fun held my attention. Oh, if only to be a child again.

Congrats on the win.

Cheers, Ray

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014

Thanks! Yes, this does take us back to our imaginative childhood days.

Steve

Comment from CHIGYSISKI

Exceptional

Rating of Chapter 19 - Teddy Bear
This is a beautiful poem. The day is aptly described in the text.I can readily identify with the day starting instantly with play for a young child and her teddy.The rhyming is ingenious! Best of luck with your book!

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014

Thanks so much for the great review and the six shiny stars.

Steve