I Played My Song
a wrapped refrain173 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
This flows so smoothly, both in content of the thought being presented and in meter. It follows the prompt rules, including an excellent rhyme scheme as required--and it is adorable. Love Sawyer with his guitar. He looks so intent.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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This flows so smoothly, both in content of the thought being presented and in meter. It follows the prompt rules, including an excellent rhyme scheme as required--and it is adorable. Love Sawyer with his guitar. He looks so intent.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Debi, thanks so much. Yes, he does get that intent look in many situations because, I think, he really is "into" what he's doing :-) Brooke
Comment from maggieadams
You write this wrapped refrain with such flawless ease...your poem pays tribute to whom you share your life...what a nice tribute. You make a long relationship sound beautiful when you choose your path. Nice sensory details and rhyme and rhythm.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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You write this wrapped refrain with such flawless ease...your poem pays tribute to whom you share your life...what a nice tribute. You make a long relationship sound beautiful when you choose your path. Nice sensory details and rhyme and rhythm.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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maggieadams, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Brooke,
Shades of "Back to the Future" with a Woodstock contender or maybe just a new teen age heartthrob in the making? Either way a delightful piece of poetry.
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Dear Brooke,
Shades of "Back to the Future" with a Woodstock contender or maybe just a new teen age heartthrob in the making? Either way a delightful piece of poetry.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Reg :-) Brooke
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
A GOOD WRITE WITH IMAGERY AND NEEDS NO CHANGES. Hi, I enjoyed reading your piece of writing. The picture blends well with the script. Thanks for sharing. Mary
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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A GOOD WRITE WITH IMAGERY AND NEEDS NO CHANGES. Hi, I enjoyed reading your piece of writing. The picture blends well with the script. Thanks for sharing. Mary
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Mary, thank you so much for your generous rating and thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Just Pete
A winning entry, there's no doubt. Definitely singable and with gret rhyme. In this, I can see the child's point of view but also the mother's. Best of luck - Pete
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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A winning entry, there's no doubt. Definitely singable and with gret rhyme. In this, I can see the child's point of view but also the mother's. Best of luck - Pete
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Pete, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Matoshka
What a precious rockstar, Brooke. He is so into his song and a southpaw at that. I so enjoyed your words and the picture of Sawyer, made my heart smile. Blessings
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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What a precious rockstar, Brooke. He is so into his song and a southpaw at that. I so enjoyed your words and the picture of Sawyer, made my heart smile. Blessings
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Matoshka, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Brooke, that IS a delightful photo of Sawyer, and the poem does it justice. The wrapped refrain is an interesting competition and form of poetry that looks quite challenging. I enjoyed reading this one and wonder if I dare enter the competition, Giddy
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Brooke, that IS a delightful photo of Sawyer, and the poem does it justice. The wrapped refrain is an interesting competition and form of poetry that looks quite challenging. I enjoyed reading this one and wonder if I dare enter the competition, Giddy
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Giddy :-) You should enter whatever competitions you want to without worrying about the competition. You never know what will catch the fancy of reviewers :-) Brooke
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Thanks, Brooke :) :)))
Comment from Bina1
Seems like he is strumming the strings of your heart! What a lovely poem, thank you for sharing. What a fine musician you have on your hands!
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Seems like he is strumming the strings of your heart! What a lovely poem, thank you for sharing. What a fine musician you have on your hands!
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Bina, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Jackarrie
Hi Brooke, this is the first time I have heard of a wrapped refrain. You have written a lovely poem following the instructions given for it.
Great word choices in your lovely poem
each note imbued with meaning as I play my song.
Sawyer has given the real image of the musician.
Well done, and good luck in the contest, Mary
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Hi Brooke, this is the first time I have heard of a wrapped refrain. You have written a lovely poem following the instructions given for it.
Great word choices in your lovely poem
each note imbued with meaning as I play my song.
Sawyer has given the real image of the musician.
Well done, and good luck in the contest, Mary
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Mary, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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you are welcome. Mary
Comment from Tegan1311
A really great poem which flowed well and was easy to understand. The only thing I'm not sure of is how the first paragraph connects to the second. The first is about a song and the second is about a path. I don't see the connection, but otherwise very well done.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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A really great poem which flowed well and was easy to understand. The only thing I'm not sure of is how the first paragraph connects to the second. The first is about a song and the second is about a path. I don't see the connection, but otherwise very well done.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Tegan, thank you for your review. Both stanzas are spoken from the POV of a person who finds something lacking in her life, some connection, and in both stanzas the appearance of the person being addressed makes life considerably better. Brooke
