I Played My Song
a wrapped refrain173 total reviews
Comment from Hareem.S
This is a very good poem you have penned down here. I like the form and structure of this poem. It's very unique and it was a pleasure to read it.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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This is a very good poem you have penned down here. I like the form and structure of this poem. It's very unique and it was a pleasure to read it.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Hareem, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from missjosi
Wonderfully written and said... your poem has a beautiful structure and rhythm to it.... Lovely words all melded together nicely. Excellent! Warmest wishes and blessings :)
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Wonderfully written and said... your poem has a beautiful structure and rhythm to it.... Lovely words all melded together nicely. Excellent! Warmest wishes and blessings :)
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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missjosi, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, brooke, you did an excellent job writing this wrapped refrain about the one that cleared the path to love. I enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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this is very well written, brooke, you did an excellent job writing this wrapped refrain about the one that cleared the path to love. I enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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sweetwoodjax, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from c_lucas
The forth coming craze of rock is warming up. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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The forth coming craze of rock is warming up. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Thanks so very much, Charlie :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
Comment from Fleedleflump
Love the change in pace as you close each stanza, reflecting and commenting on the previous lines. You've given this a philosophical tone that drive me to think about your words. A lovely piece.
Mike
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Love the change in pace as you close each stanza, reflecting and commenting on the previous lines. You've given this a philosophical tone that drive me to think about your words. A lovely piece.
Mike
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Mike, thank you so much, my thoughtful friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Dean Kuch
Very nice, Brooke, and yet another form of poetry I've yet to see. I get the gist of the format, however, and I must say that you've really nailed it, as usual.
That photo of Sawyer is great! He's even got the classic guitar player rockin' stance down to a tee, LOL!
Great job, very inspirational piece of writing.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Very nice, Brooke, and yet another form of poetry I've yet to see. I get the gist of the format, however, and I must say that you've really nailed it, as usual.
That photo of Sawyer is great! He's even got the classic guitar player rockin' stance down to a tee, LOL!
Great job, very inspirational piece of writing.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, Dean. Sawyer loves music. He can't play the guitar yet but he has an impressive singing repertoire :-) Brooke
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You're very welcome, Brooke. A future Stevie Ray Vaughn perhaps? (LOL)
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or perhaps Tom Petty - he just LOVES to sing along to Free Falling :-)
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Petty's just fine by me!...8>}
Comment from GWinterwin
Good poem with a good picture. Good word flow and rhyming. Good story about the little one playing along, all seems to flow well.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Good poem with a good picture. Good word flow and rhyming. Good story about the little one playing along, all seems to flow well.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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GWinterwin, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is yet another interesting and beautiful piece of writing that the author has created with this post. Sawyer seems to be happy plucking away on the strings. This is the sheer bliss of youth. Its a pity that we have to grow up.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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This is yet another interesting and beautiful piece of writing that the author has created with this post. Sawyer seems to be happy plucking away on the strings. This is the sheer bliss of youth. Its a pity that we have to grow up.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Tomes, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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My pleasure
Comment from akulkumol
This poem is beautiful. It feels like you are talking about your Son, before his coming life was dull and without meaning.
His entry in your life changed everything, just like you said
Not one step have I stumbled in pain's aftermath
since my eyes first beheld you as I sought my path.
Really enjoyed reading it.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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This poem is beautiful. It feels like you are talking about your Son, before his coming life was dull and without meaning.
His entry in your life changed everything, just like you said
Not one step have I stumbled in pain's aftermath
since my eyes first beheld you as I sought my path.
Really enjoyed reading it.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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akulkumol, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
I like the sentiment of the little verse, but am curious as to why the first four lines of each stanza are metered and the last two are not? Reads great to me, but requires a pause at the completion of the rhyming quatrain, and a change in attitude to complete the read. I guess the last two lines are meant to be the summary/discovery thought, as if the speaker is addressing himself. Kenny
I guess I answered my own question. Good luck.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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I like the sentiment of the little verse, but am curious as to why the first four lines of each stanza are metered and the last two are not? Reads great to me, but requires a pause at the completion of the rhyming quatrain, and a change in attitude to complete the read. I guess the last two lines are meant to be the summary/discovery thought, as if the speaker is addressing himself. Kenny
I guess I answered my own question. Good luck.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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thanks for your thoughtful review, Kenny - there was no way I could make iambic meter work with the switch to 12 syllable lines, and since iambic meter is never specified, I went with what sounded best :-) Brooke
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It made for a dramatic read. I like it.
