I Played My Song
a wrapped refrain173 total reviews
Comment from poetbear
A John Denver lyric
" This old guitar took me to sing a love song
Taught me how to laugh and how to cry
Taught my life and living'How I love to sing my songs for you"
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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A John Denver lyric
" This old guitar took me to sing a love song
Taught me how to laugh and how to cry
Taught my life and living'How I love to sing my songs for you"
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Maddy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from freepass
Very good poem
I see nothing wrong
5 very big stars*****
Good luck in the contest
and win win win!
And the word flowed.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Very good poem
I see nothing wrong
5 very big stars*****
Good luck in the contest
and win win win!
And the word flowed.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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freepass, thank you for your kind encouragement :-) Brooke
Comment from marion
Hi adewpearl ... how you write these, each as original as the next, I don't know! What I do know, each line must be so difficult, exact words, the flow into the next and on I can go. It has to be perfect or it won't work. So I guess because it does work, it is perfect. I love the opening line. Huge emotional grabber. I'd skip the comma, though! But only you know perfection. Marion.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Hi adewpearl ... how you write these, each as original as the next, I don't know! What I do know, each line must be so difficult, exact words, the flow into the next and on I can go. It has to be perfect or it won't work. So I guess because it does work, it is perfect. I love the opening line. Huge emotional grabber. I'd skip the comma, though! But only you know perfection. Marion.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Marion, thank you so much. You are extremely gracious :-) Brooke
Comment from NurseBarb
Great poem and can be taken in so many ways. I perceive it as two people who have a unique connection that no other person can ever fill. Maybe a husband and wife, mother and child, grandparent and grandchild and so on. Such a creative poem that makes each reader have their own perception. Very well done!
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Great poem and can be taken in so many ways. I perceive it as two people who have a unique connection that no other person can ever fill. Maybe a husband and wife, mother and child, grandparent and grandchild and so on. Such a creative poem that makes each reader have their own perception. Very well done!
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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NurseBarb, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from michaelcahill
I love this. Many will be able to adopt this more than one way. I think most will take it as a theme for themselves as couples. But, many might see it is a spiritual journey and view it as what happens when one discovers that they are not alone. Great piece that has a delayed reaction. It hits home and then it starts to hit harder a little later! mikey
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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I love this. Many will be able to adopt this more than one way. I think most will take it as a theme for themselves as couples. But, many might see it is a spiritual journey and view it as what happens when one discovers that they are not alone. Great piece that has a delayed reaction. It hits home and then it starts to hit harder a little later! mikey
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Mikey, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Irish Rain
AWWWWW! Great picture...great poem, I played my song...one of your best yet, and so very sweet, how the words were finally heard, the path finally found, by someone who knew the special magic they'd contain, and unfold! Wonderful!
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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AWWWWW! Great picture...great poem, I played my song...one of your best yet, and so very sweet, how the words were finally heard, the path finally found, by someone who knew the special magic they'd contain, and unfold! Wonderful!
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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justjo, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Janet Foor
I always look forward to seeing you name in my messages saying you have a new poem. They are so often uplifting, fun and insightful and even have a moral that teaches us or reminds us to be better. This one is exceptional. Loved each line.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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I always look forward to seeing you name in my messages saying you have a new poem. They are so often uplifting, fun and insightful and even have a moral that teaches us or reminds us to be better. This one is exceptional. Loved each line.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Janet, thank you so much for your thoughtful comments and generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from amada
This Wrapped Refrain style is very nice. You wrote a thoughtful and at the same insightful work, I see faith on it...Best wishes to Sawyer!
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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This Wrapped Refrain style is very nice. You wrote a thoughtful and at the same insightful work, I see faith on it...Best wishes to Sawyer!
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Nancy, thank you :-) Brooke
Comment from CheyLGwriter
This is an adorable piece. The picture makes you fall in love with him. It also makes you want to sing along. I really enjoyed this read. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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This is an adorable piece. The picture makes you fall in love with him. It also makes you want to sing along. I really enjoyed this read. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Chey, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Quire's Gal
Hi Brooke,
I played my song, but no one heard
until you sang it word for word, Now that's poetry! Unlike some of the other, I can hear the meter change from 8 to 12 with little difficulty, espechially in the first stanza. I hear 12 syllables as...
ONE two three, FOUR five six, SEVEN eight nine, TEN eleventwelve. I hear this grouped in 3s with an accent on the fist beat of each 3 syllables. In music these are called triplets, and they flow nicely if done right. although there are other aceent group that fit the 12 syllable like, yours flows berre that other entries I've read.
Good luck in the contest!
Katherine
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Hi Brooke,
I played my song, but no one heard
until you sang it word for word, Now that's poetry! Unlike some of the other, I can hear the meter change from 8 to 12 with little difficulty, espechially in the first stanza. I hear 12 syllables as...
ONE two three, FOUR five six, SEVEN eight nine, TEN eleventwelve. I hear this grouped in 3s with an accent on the fist beat of each 3 syllables. In music these are called triplets, and they flow nicely if done right. although there are other aceent group that fit the 12 syllable like, yours flows berre that other entries I've read.
Good luck in the contest!
Katherine
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Katherine, thank you so very much for your generous rating and for your knowledgeable and attentive review. This was so difficult for me in making the switch to the 12 syllable lines, so after all my sweating and fretting and rewriting, I truly appreciate your comments :-) Brooke
