Comment from l.raven

Excellent

I love this Brooke, Look at the stance...Sawyer is truly on deep thought...does he sing??? I bet it is so sweet and cute...I love your poem and the picture is wonderful...very well done...can you imagine Brooke if back in our time she had to develop the pictures in the store...LOL...Luff Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014

Thanks so much, Linda. Yes, he does complete renditions of a bunch of songs, including the Itsy bitsy spider with all the hand movements. He also sings select lines from pop songs like Eye of the Tiger and one by Tom Petty where my mind is going blank trying to think of the title. LOL Many times when he wakes up in the morning he sings songs to himself while he's waiting for official wake up time - Miranda watches and listens to him on the monitor. :-) Brooke

reply by l.raven on 04-Jun-2014

that is so so sweet...luff

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi Brooke,

You give wonderful depth of emotion in this poem. I especially like these lines...

I sought my path, but none appeared,
but when you came, my way was cleared,
impediments all swept away,

As always, Mr. Sawyer is a cutie - he steals the show!

Good luck in the contest.

Cheers,
Keep Smilin'... Jax

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014

Jax, thank you so much for your thoughtful comments and kind contest wishes, and yes, Sawyer ALWAYS steals the show, and I couldn't be happier about that :-) Brooke

Comment from honeytree

Excellent

I love this art work so much for these words for this poem.

Introducing Sawyer to music and playing

Is wonderful for him

Music makes the world go around.

Annie

I have no six

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014

Thanks so much, Annie - he goes to music class once a week too, where they mainly play percussion instruments :-) Brooke

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

Excellent. The wrapped refrain is a new style to me. You have done it very well. The rhymes are great and the presentation of the poem showing Sawyer the rock star is adorable. Great job!

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014

Thanks so much, RYME4U :-) Brooke

Comment from Bananafish308

Exceptional

Wow Brooke. Incredible. Every word perfect. You have captured with exquisite eloquence the infinite impact of having one person unconditionally believe in a you. Loved the metaphors, especially the title, and great closing two lines. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014

Bill, thank you so much, my generous friend :-) Brooke

reply by Bananafish308 on 04-Jun-2014

You're quite welcome, Brooke. I meant to also mention how absolutely adorable the picture of Sawyer is!

reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014

He has to be one of the most photogenic kids alive :-)

reply by Bananafish308 on 04-Jun-2014

Absolutely!

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

This is fantastic....the love Of this little guy speaks volumes in your poem..
I like this wrapped refrain ......I love the rhyme and flow and the photo of Sawyer playing guitar is priceless
God bless

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014

kiwijenny, thanks so much :-) Brooke

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

All Sawyer is missing are the white socks and he could be the second coming of, what's his name? He made a couple of movies... Uh... Oh yea, Tom Cruise! Ala Risky Business.

I had to read about wrap around poems... Regardless, your voice came through in this one. I enjoyed reading it. John

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014

John, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from mommydear42

Exceptional

You and Sawyer penned a fine poem. Grandson #2 used to "hid" on the stairs with his little guitar and sang "Stuck in Lodi"
at the top of his voice. He'll be 28 in August.He and a buddy just left on a "road trip" to Salt Lake City where some movie is being filmed which includes a concert scene. Then I think they are heading to Big Sur. He may have taken his acoustic guitar, but the electric bass is still here.......I do want you to know how much I enjoyed the poem, as I do everything
you write. Linda Byrd

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014

Thank you so much, Linda Byrd - I keep wanting Sawyer to stop growing up, but you make it sound like adult grandsons can be quite a joy, too :-) I appreciate your generous sixth star :-) Brooke

Comment from royowen

Excellent

A nice entry in this wrapped poem contest, I liked the theme, because my preferred instrument is the guitar! My little granddaughter has a ukulele which I will teach her to play when she is old enough! As all the things you do, you have done, you will probably do well, good couplet rhyming, even meter! Blessings. Roy.

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014

Roy, thank you so much :-) A ukulele and a little girl - that sounds absolutely precious :-) Brooke

Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER

Excellent

Love the parallelism and the cadence in the way these two sections are constructed. For ex:

(I played my song,) BUT (no one) h(ear)d
until (you sang) it word for word,

(I sought my path), BUT (n one) app(ear)ed,
but when (you came), my way was cl(ear)ed,

Regards:

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014

Steven, thank you so much :-) Brooke