I Played My Song
a wrapped refrain173 total reviews
Comment from Glasstruth
Awesome guitarist, I see. His outfit could use a little improvement. LOL. I think everyone would love to have a song they wrote be heard. Superb rhyming. Would make good lyrics. Good luck with the contest. Les
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Awesome guitarist, I see. His outfit could use a little improvement. LOL. I think everyone would love to have a song they wrote be heard. Superb rhyming. Would make good lyrics. Good luck with the contest. Les
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Les, thank you :-) When my daughter posted this on Facebook, the first thing I told her was he needed a decent pair of rocker pants. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from Hitcher
Sawyer, the rock-star on his Guitar:) I had a quick look at the form(the wrapped refrain), don't think I've tried one of these, but you my friend smashed it out of the ball park. Very cool, very cool indeed, good luck!
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Sawyer, the rock-star on his Guitar:) I had a quick look at the form(the wrapped refrain), don't think I've tried one of these, but you my friend smashed it out of the ball park. Very cool, very cool indeed, good luck!
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Hitch, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Ben Colder
You wrapped it up tight and left it singing. Looks as if Sawyer is getting ready for the big moment. Well done Brooke. Another goodie. Best to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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You wrapped it up tight and left it singing. Looks as if Sawyer is getting ready for the big moment. Well done Brooke. Another goodie. Best to you in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Ben, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from CR Delport
Ah, look at the Cute Little One rocking out on his guitar :) This is very well written and having the Cute Little One as support, the others stand no chance. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Ah, look at the Cute Little One rocking out on his guitar :) This is very well written and having the Cute Little One as support, the others stand no chance. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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CR, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from nomi338
This poem type was a little tricky at first, but I caught the rhythm and was ok after a time. The poem was good, as if you have ever written one that was not good. I loved the picture of Sawyer playing a guitar, this really helped to sell the poem. As always this proved to be a welcome addition to your growing list of well written poems.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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This poem type was a little tricky at first, but I caught the rhythm and was ok after a time. The poem was good, as if you have ever written one that was not good. I loved the picture of Sawyer playing a guitar, this really helped to sell the poem. As always this proved to be a welcome addition to your growing list of well written poems.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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nomi, thank you for your thoughtful feedback :-) Brooke
Comment from Just2Write
A new, (to me) form that looks to be a bit of a challenge with its changing line length. You do the switch well and have written another delightful poem/song for us to enjoy.
Rose.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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A new, (to me) form that looks to be a bit of a challenge with its changing line length. You do the switch well and have written another delightful poem/song for us to enjoy.
Rose.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Rose, and you are spot on with that comment about the 12 syllable lines :-) Brooke
Comment from mfowler
This one appears to be about Sawyer's obvious musical prodigious talent, but it really masks a love poem exhorting life improved, in the presence of 'you'. The musical metaphor is spread throughout the verses, building the sense of harmony and joy experienced in the other's company. Very enjoyable! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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This one appears to be about Sawyer's obvious musical prodigious talent, but it really masks a love poem exhorting life improved, in the presence of 'you'. The musical metaphor is spread throughout the verses, building the sense of harmony and joy experienced in the other's company. Very enjoyable! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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mfowler, thank you so much for your thoughtful review and kind contest wishes :-) Brooke
Comment from Opal H.
This poem is beautiful. I'm sure we all can relate to it in some way or other... we all need others to listen and support us to be happy.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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This poem is beautiful. I'm sure we all can relate to it in some way or other... we all need others to listen and support us to be happy.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Opal, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hi Brooke,
The first lines of the poem are so compelling in their depth and scope. We sing our song of life, waiting for someone to understand our verse. When that person appears, life becomes complete. Suddenly, trials become easier with the help of a mate to stand beside. Wonderful thought and delivery...top notch! Best wishes, Bill
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Hi Brooke,
The first lines of the poem are so compelling in their depth and scope. We sing our song of life, waiting for someone to understand our verse. When that person appears, life becomes complete. Suddenly, trials become easier with the help of a mate to stand beside. Wonderful thought and delivery...top notch! Best wishes, Bill
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Bill, thank you so much for your generous rating and gracious comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Pili Pubul
Excellent poem , very meaningful , expressed in perfect style
as you always do . To me is a great love poem.
Sawyer is such delight ! Little Elvis picture LOL..
I won't be around a couple of weeks... See you after that. ;:--). Pili
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Excellent poem , very meaningful , expressed in perfect style
as you always do . To me is a great love poem.
Sawyer is such delight ! Little Elvis picture LOL..
I won't be around a couple of weeks... See you after that. ;:--). Pili
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Pili, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You very welcome,e. Pili
