Finding Daisy
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Dinner"Another Ess and Oz comic fantasy
4 total reviews
Comment from Adri7enne
"Do you want to rub my feet to take your mind OF it?" OFF
"Shades gently prised her off HER arm and leant away from her." HIS???
I like the reversed roles, where Shades plays the "kept" man! Fun!
Ooh, Shades is so dark and dangerous. I can understand how Ess might have the hots for him. Nice little action scene, snod. I get right into it so that I'm a little surprised at finding myself back in Canada when it's all over. For a few minutes, I was in an alley, back in London - with Shades. Yum! LOL!
Still having fun, Snod!
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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"Do you want to rub my feet to take your mind OF it?" OFF
"Shades gently prised her off HER arm and leant away from her." HIS???
I like the reversed roles, where Shades plays the "kept" man! Fun!
Ooh, Shades is so dark and dangerous. I can understand how Ess might have the hots for him. Nice little action scene, snod. I get right into it so that I'm a little surprised at finding myself back in Canada when it's all over. For a few minutes, I was in an alley, back in London - with Shades. Yum! LOL!
Still having fun, Snod!
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Thanks. I was a little concerned that my attempts to describe the taekwondo hold would interfere with things. Glad you liked it
Comment from Carrie Carson
Unexpected dinner invite, great job. Just moseying along and then pow.
Moves well. I didn't spot any spag.
I'll have to go back and read. And the cooler things is I don't have to to be able to enjoy this. Good job. :) Carrie
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Unexpected dinner invite, great job. Just moseying along and then pow.
Moves well. I didn't spot any spag.
I'll have to go back and read. And the cooler things is I don't have to to be able to enjoy this. Good job. :) Carrie
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Thanks. Of course, you don't have to enjoy this, but if you do, it's even cooler for e.
Comment from comanalbert
Seems like she's close to something and definitely it is a case of missing person, no volontary departure in secret. Or maybe Daisy's father wants to check up on the progress?
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Seems like she's close to something and definitely it is a case of missing person, no volontary departure in secret. Or maybe Daisy's father wants to check up on the progress?
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Thanks. Yes, The more people are interested the closer she's getting, I think.
Comment from CR Delport
That still raised the question, why did he followed her? Who wants her observed? This is very interesting and very well written and makes for a good read.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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That still raised the question, why did he followed her? Who wants her observed? This is very interesting and very well written and makes for a good read.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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You're very kind, thank you. Yes, I hope it raises questions, but I don't want to answer them at the moment otherwise it would make for a very short book ;)
