From our soul.
Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "Emptiness."Mostly romance.
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Comment from ladywriter39
I don't know if you write stuff like this from your heart and soul...or just from a very good imagination.....but all I say.....is that your writings feel like they are written specifically for and about me.....It's hard to write the "Poetry" things that I like about it....because I think that the tears I can't stop are all it needs for 5 stars.....Thanks for sharing...Rhonda
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I don't know if you write stuff like this from your heart and soul...or just from a very good imagination.....but all I say.....is that your writings feel like they are written specifically for and about me.....It's hard to write the "Poetry" things that I like about it....because I think that the tears I can't stop are all it needs for 5 stars.....Thanks for sharing...Rhonda
Comment Written 22-Aug-2005
Comment from Olivia_j_douleur
It is an outstanding poem. That is both visibly and audibly appealing. There is nothing that I can think of that should be changed about it.
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It is an outstanding poem. That is both visibly and audibly appealing. There is nothing that I can think of that should be changed about it.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2005
Comment from suneagle
Pili, that sounds odd grammatically in places, but the effect is nevertheless outstanding. It is the oddness that creates a resonance of beauty within the poem. Don't change anything, except the one bit of punctuation I mention below. Well done.
my choice,
(my choice. [Comma changed to period.])
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Pili, that sounds odd grammatically in places, but the effect is nevertheless outstanding. It is the oddness that creates a resonance of beauty within the poem. Don't change anything, except the one bit of punctuation I mention below. Well done.
my choice,
(my choice. [Comma changed to period.])
Comment Written 22-Aug-2005
Comment from Black Wren
that () now
don't want
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I didn't find it at all repititive.
I like the voice in this one.
Very well written and good job with conveying feelings with it.
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that () now
don't want
(I)
I didn't find it at all repititive.
I like the voice in this one.
Very well written and good job with conveying feelings with it.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2005
Comment from born2wright
A heartfelt poem. Rather sad, but afterall - life isn't all roses. I love the picture you selected to accompany this, and I like how your words flowed. There was a definite thought pattern and conclusion. Very well done.
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A heartfelt poem. Rather sad, but afterall - life isn't all roses. I love the picture you selected to accompany this, and I like how your words flowed. There was a definite thought pattern and conclusion. Very well done.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2005
Comment from Eldora
Beautifully said, Pili. The depth of emotion rings out in this piece, and the artwork flows right into the poem, enhancing the words. Nicely done.
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Beautifully said, Pili. The depth of emotion rings out in this piece, and the artwork flows right into the poem, enhancing the words. Nicely done.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2005
Comment from Sarlou
This is a moving poem!
I liked it's content and it's sentiment.
In it's majority it flowed well.
You've used a beautiful picture.
I'm not sure if I like the way it rhymed at times and not others.
Well written though.
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This is a moving poem!
I liked it's content and it's sentiment.
In it's majority it flowed well.
You've used a beautiful picture.
I'm not sure if I like the way it rhymed at times and not others.
Well written though.
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Comment Written 22-Aug-2005
Comment from Swagman
I really found myself able to relate well to the theme of this poem, my personal experience of having depression left me feeling very empty inside - almost to the point when I felt not like a person anymore. I think this poem has been written well and structured well, it reminded me a lot of that same feeling of emptiness I used to feel and would easily forget if I could.
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I really found myself able to relate well to the theme of this poem, my personal experience of having depression left me feeling very empty inside - almost to the point when I felt not like a person anymore. I think this poem has been written well and structured well, it reminded me a lot of that same feeling of emptiness I used to feel and would easily forget if I could.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2005
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is a very good picture to use with your writing I like this piece it flows well and is very well written , the only thing I would say is you may wish to brighten the writing slight , but this doesn't change my thoughts well written very good choice of pic
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This is a very good picture to use with your writing I like this piece it flows well and is very well written , the only thing I would say is you may wish to brighten the writing slight , but this doesn't change my thoughts well written very good choice of pic
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Comment Written 22-Aug-2005
