Comment from ROCHELLE MOORE

Excellent

you captured the essence beautifully
your last stanza is excellent

But to erase
memories
cannot
be done
and that
my friend,
is all
I want

I love the way you write in a pattern...lovely read

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2005

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

I was married for twenty years
and no longer am I married
there is nothing easy about spliting up
but I was fortunate
that we both deceided to put our kids first
and not make each others lives miserable
but even in all of that
it still was not an easy thing to do... John

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2005

Comment from Mzhurst

Excellent

I have to admit this is not one of my favorites from you.
It is good but just doesn't seem to be your usual quality.
I think the
is gone,
numbness
remains,
like cork
floating
around.
Is my nit, it just seems to detract from the the powerful emotions.

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2005

Comment from Zenbud

Excellent

We seem to write the same mood. . . that is so strange! You haven't read my post today "Shadow". Much in the same vein, let's hope you are not in this place, but remembering. Very nicely done, dark, foreboding . . . Zen

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2005

Comment from Always_Hope

Excellent

But to erase
memories
cannot
be done
and that
my friend,
is all
I want. - Oh, I know! Sometimes I wish my memories would disappear. Of course, especially the ones that hurt. :(

Good job, Pili.

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2005

Comment from bfonf

Excellent

Very good poem, and I love the picture and color scheme. One suggestion though:

floating
around

Maybe change to:

floating
just floating..

I dunno, but when I read it the around seemed a bit weak. Maybe it's just me.

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2005

Comment from Bryana

Excellent

Un poco triste mi amiga. It's somewhat sad, you are left
with only memories, well, I hope it's not biographical, it's just
from your prolific imagination that this awesome poem was born.
But to erase
memories
cannot
be done
and that
my friend
is all
I want.

This is heart felt, I loved it.
Un abrazote,
Ana

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2005

Comment from Nature's Voice

Excellent

Oh, Pili. I like ths one a lot. In its short lines, the poem flows smoothly and present a poignant message. The repetition works well, enhancing the totaility and beauty of the poem. Great job, my firend.

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2005

Comment from Wendyanne

Excellent

This is a lovely, heartfelt poem Pili. I think we all wish that we could erase some of our memories but it's impossible and we have to live with them and get on with our lives. Well done.

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2005

Comment from AuroraSky

Excellent

Yeah, memories can't be undone, but they can fade with time until something brings them to the surface again...sad poem Pili...numbness doesn't stop the reader from feeling the heartache of the existence though.

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2005