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Viewing comments for Chapter 47 "Shovel Meyer"These are fictional character sketches.
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Comment from elchupakabra
I thought this was a really great piece. I enjoyed the rhyming quatrain because you employed really solid alliterations throughout the piece. I also thought that you did a good job alluding to your character and theme. Fantastic work overall on this piece, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2014
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I thought this was a really great piece. I enjoyed the rhyming quatrain because you employed really solid alliterations throughout the piece. I also thought that you did a good job alluding to your character and theme. Fantastic work overall on this piece, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Jack, for giving this a look.
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the aaaa rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with dimes/mimes/limes. Good proximate rhyming with wine/time. Good alliteration with daily/dance...dimes/dirty...dance/double...shovel/shuffled. Good rhythm and flow. Good simile use with Like a nudist or mortician...like seagulls on the foamy brine...like spittle on his dollar wine. Good complimentary photo followed by a thought provoking message.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2014
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Good use of the aaaa rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with dimes/mimes/limes. Good proximate rhyming with wine/time. Good alliteration with daily/dance...dimes/dirty...dance/double...shovel/shuffled. Good rhythm and flow. Good simile use with Like a nudist or mortician...like seagulls on the foamy brine...like spittle on his dollar wine. Good complimentary photo followed by a thought provoking message.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2014
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Wow! Thank you, RR, for a comprehensive and positive review. Bill
Comment from lindalcreel
We sometimes forget about the people who perform on the busy streets fro a few coins here and there. I don't see it much in Florida, but I know it's a common occurrence in New York. Loved the picture, as sad as it was; it seemed to go well with the poem.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2014
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We sometimes forget about the people who perform on the busy streets fro a few coins here and there. I don't see it much in Florida, but I know it's a common occurrence in New York. Loved the picture, as sad as it was; it seemed to go well with the poem.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Linda, for giving this a look.
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My pleasure:)
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Bill - this shares such a deep realization too many are living. Haunting write which keeps me wondering how can we find a balance in life for all.
A well penned post with reality's truth.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2014
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Dear Bill - this shares such a deep realization too many are living. Haunting write which keeps me wondering how can we find a balance in life for all.
A well penned post with reality's truth.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 02-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Maureen, for giving this a look.
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of mono-rhyming, including proximate rhymes, in each quatrain
good alliteration in dance in double
effective/creative similes
great alliteration and assonance in Shovel shuffled
vivid detail of the street performers
I like the closing where after all that work he only made two bucks
Brooke
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014
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solid use of mono-rhyming, including proximate rhymes, in each quatrain
good alliteration in dance in double
effective/creative similes
great alliteration and assonance in Shovel shuffled
vivid detail of the street performers
I like the closing where after all that work he only made two bucks
Brooke
Comment Written 01-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Brooke, for the thoughtful review.
Comment from l.raven
HI Bill, with the talent these people have...I don't know why they don't look for other work...But as long as they are happy that is what counts....they learn to live on what they make...life can be very hard...your poem is very well written...with the perfect picture...Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014
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HI Bill, with the talent these people have...I don't know why they don't look for other work...But as long as they are happy that is what counts....they learn to live on what they make...life can be very hard...your poem is very well written...with the perfect picture...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 01-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Linda, for the thoughtful review.
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you are so very welcome...xxoo
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Bill,
I've often wondered what makes people do the variety of street entertainment with the hat out for donations. I mean, okay for a weekend if you like to entertain, but to do it every day instead of getting a job - I just don't get it. Guess I'm too old to understand it.
Good read.
Cheers,
Keep Smiln'... Jax
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014
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Hi Bill,
I've often wondered what makes people do the variety of street entertainment with the hat out for donations. I mean, okay for a weekend if you like to entertain, but to do it every day instead of getting a job - I just don't get it. Guess I'm too old to understand it.
Good read.
Cheers,
Keep Smiln'... Jax
Comment Written 01-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Jax, for the thoughtful review.
Comment from 9999pool
Performing on the streets is an honest living and career to say the least. Though they may get only two dollars worth at the end of the day, they live by.
For their love of dancing, art or in whatever form which is their love.
With enough to survive, they are happy with their lives, even if it means sleeping on the sidewalks.
So the next time we see a street performer, a dollar is not too much to give away which is little to us. Have a heart and some respect.
Cheerio, good write with a message, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014
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Performing on the streets is an honest living and career to say the least. Though they may get only two dollars worth at the end of the day, they live by.
For their love of dancing, art or in whatever form which is their love.
With enough to survive, they are happy with their lives, even if it means sleeping on the sidewalks.
So the next time we see a street performer, a dollar is not too much to give away which is little to us. Have a heart and some respect.
Cheerio, good write with a message, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 01-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Ritchie, for the thoughtful review. Bill
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Hi Bill,
Nice to read something different as in this write, smiles.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
Have a great weekend.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Five good mono rhyme stanzas about Shovel Meyer - strange name - a couple of near rhymes but the whole is a good read. It is a good poem about endurance and not giving up. He only made two dollars dancing that day - but tomorrow he'd start anew. A good poem. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014
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Five good mono rhyme stanzas about Shovel Meyer - strange name - a couple of near rhymes but the whole is a good read. It is a good poem about endurance and not giving up. He only made two dollars dancing that day - but tomorrow he'd start anew. A good poem. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 01-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Dorothy, for the excellent review.
Comment from kiwijenny
Shovel shuffled for his dimes
Competing with the silent mimes
'Gainst fire eaters, bards with rhymes
And a guy who juggled limes
Poor Shovel Meyer...what a good poem
God bless
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014
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Shovel shuffled for his dimes
Competing with the silent mimes
'Gainst fire eaters, bards with rhymes
And a guy who juggled limes
Poor Shovel Meyer...what a good poem
God bless
Comment Written 01-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Jenny, for giving this a look. Bill
