Comment from MIKECON

Excellent

Urban legends or not this piece was well written and keep ed my attention throughout, and yes it was scary.Your Interpretation was good and enjoyable to read,Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 31-May-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014

Thanks very much for sharing your thoughts with me about this story, MIKECON. I really appreciate your encouraging review.

Comment from Val Crisson

Exceptional

Well, I had to give this a six, actually it deserved a seven. None the less, this is a great story, and the set up is perfect. The author really brings us into the scene, and just shocks us. This was extremely well written, and I loved the author's notes about "urban legends" I usually hate too much information from author's notes, but these really made it real for me.

 Comment Written 30-May-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jun-2014

Thanks so much for such a stellar rating and review, Val. I really appreciate that, my friend!

I'm glad you liked the author's notes as well. I try to pack them with pertinent information, yet keep them as brief as possible.

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Long jaunt around the mulberries to fit an urban legend into a prompt. I like that sort of thing, and besides this is clearly and well written

 Comment Written 30-May-2014

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reply by the author on 30-May-2014

Well, at just 879 words, it's far shorter than most of the other entries competing in this contest.

Also, had I not told you it was based upon an urban legend, would you have known? I have studied urban myths and legends for decades, yet only recently learned of this one.

Anyhow, thanks for reading, and for giving me your take on the story.

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

Good story. A horror/thriller story, to be sure. The main character always has more to invest when it's his own child who's dead!

Only one small nit:

He felt for the button in the dark, repeatedly hitting in over and over again.[hitting IT? over and over again.]



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 Comment Written 30-May-2014

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reply by the author on 30-May-2014

I thought I'd fixed that error, Jay, as it was pointed out to me in my very first review by Mystic Angel 7777. Let me check...

Yep, it is showing me that it is fixed, so I can't understand how you are seeing the mistake. Perhaps something is amiss?

Anyhow, I really appreciate the kind and encouraging review.

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

I really wish I had a six for this but it is yours in spirit. This is a wonderfully engaging wild ride of thrilling prose. I think you have a typo: "He felt for the button in the dark, repeatedly hitting in over and over again." - I think you meant 'it' not in here. I wish you all the best in the contest as this is certainly a contender. Thank you so much for sharing this with me.

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 Comment Written 30-May-2014

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reply by the author on 30-May-2014

Oh, thanks a million for catching that error for me, Mystic Angel 7777! Now I have time to correct it before the contest begins. It seems no matter how many times one edits their own work, something is missed, and that is especially true in my case, LOL!

No "sixes" are necessary, my complimentary friend. The fact that you were entertained by the story is reward enough for me.

Thanks again for everything.

reply by Mystic Angel 7777 on 30-May-2014

I am glad you were able to fix it in time. Good luck.

reply by the author on 30-May-2014

Thanks again.
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