Bel Air: A Bard's Guide
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Back From the Dead & A Kidnapping"Sequel to The Bard of Bel Air.
12 total reviews
Comment from Sasha
I found this very interesting and quite clever. However, I think I may have to go back and read the first book to truly understand all the nuances and references to the first book in this one. You are doing a great job, it is just my brain is on overload and I can't quite piece it all together...sorry.
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I found this very interesting and quite clever. However, I think I may have to go back and read the first book to truly understand all the nuances and references to the first book in this one. You are doing a great job, it is just my brain is on overload and I can't quite piece it all together...sorry.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2014
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, this is a good installment that seems to stay on the rails and adds some fun humor. With the new kidnapping the plot gets more interesting. I liked having the poem at the end of the write. It is less disjointed for me. One tiny thought-The usual way to say this line is there's more to him than meets the eye, but you may have wanted it to be different. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, this is a good installment that seems to stay on the rails and adds some fun humor. With the new kidnapping the plot gets more interesting. I liked having the poem at the end of the write. It is less disjointed for me. One tiny thought-The usual way to say this line is there's more to him than meets the eye, but you may have wanted it to be different. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 31-May-2014
Comment from ravenblack
Fantasyland/orgasmatron (Woody Allen)- now that is the kind- of banter we were missing when the last book spiralled. Please keep Winston out of the picture, have it turn out to be more of a "routine" kidnapping perpetrated by someone outside the family so that Tenyaya and the Bard can function more as detectives and less as action heroes.
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Fantasyland/orgasmatron (Woody Allen)- now that is the kind- of banter we were missing when the last book spiralled. Please keep Winston out of the picture, have it turn out to be more of a "routine" kidnapping perpetrated by someone outside the family so that Tenyaya and the Bard can function more as detectives and less as action heroes.
Comment Written 30-May-2014
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hi Michael, the chunk of dialogue at the end was my fave part.
Tbe plot thickens, I see!
An interesting read. Thank you.
Hope you've had a great day.
Sonali
walkway here, but the Orgasmatron is down for repair(.)"
Ya know(,) honey(,) my buddy Walt and I were thinking
Tenaya didn't (overreact) to anything
Lucy pulled (out?) from the curb and sped to the
DNA were not a factor)(,) as far as Harpster was concerned(,) when it came to Angela
Amber alert. We(')re almost at the house
reasons for keeping (their) laughter to themselves
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Hi Michael, the chunk of dialogue at the end was my fave part.
Tbe plot thickens, I see!
An interesting read. Thank you.
Hope you've had a great day.
Sonali
walkway here, but the Orgasmatron is down for repair(.)"
Ya know(,) honey(,) my buddy Walt and I were thinking
Tenaya didn't (overreact) to anything
Lucy pulled (out?) from the curb and sped to the
DNA were not a factor)(,) as far as Harpster was concerned(,) when it came to Angela
Amber alert. We(')re almost at the house
reasons for keeping (their) laughter to themselves
Comment Written 29-May-2014
Comment from seaglass
Yep, just when the dust is settling we hit another bump. The charges against Winston will keep accumulating until he never get released.
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Yep, just when the dust is settling we hit another bump. The charges against Winston will keep accumulating until he never get released.
Comment Written 29-May-2014
Comment from Sankey
hehe good one mate! COngratulations on the correct use of "loose" I kno too many Uncle sam's criwd get iut wrong use "loose" for 'lose' etc.
Good work. No spags! I am shocked!
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hehe good one mate! COngratulations on the correct use of "loose" I kno too many Uncle sam's criwd get iut wrong use "loose" for 'lose' etc.
Good work. No spags! I am shocked!
Comment Written 29-May-2014
Comment from Nosha17
This was an interesting chapter where we are introduced to more characters. It is flowing along nicely and the storyline is good. The Bard has surely come into his own and he is a likeable character. Enjoyable read. Before I forget you might like my New Forest poem I just posted. It was the haunt of William the Conqueror. Faye
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This was an interesting chapter where we are introduced to more characters. It is flowing along nicely and the storyline is good. The Bard has surely come into his own and he is a likeable character. Enjoyable read. Before I forget you might like my New Forest poem I just posted. It was the haunt of William the Conqueror. Faye
Comment Written 29-May-2014
Comment from l.raven
OMG Michael, when I so who was on that amber alert...and I love the remarks at the end between Lucy and Bard and Harpster and Tenaya...to funny...well if seems everyone is going to pull together to find Angela...Susan's daughter...lets see where it takes us...a great job you...loving it!!! Luff Linda xxoo
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OMG Michael, when I so who was on that amber alert...and I love the remarks at the end between Lucy and Bard and Harpster and Tenaya...to funny...well if seems everyone is going to pull together to find Angela...Susan's daughter...lets see where it takes us...a great job you...loving it!!! Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 29-May-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
You really favor women in your work. I love that. Very unusual for a man I think. I like that you are heading in a more conventuinal direction. I think that lets these great characters shine more. Simple detective work chasing bad guys! Lots of dialogue!!! NG
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You really favor women in your work. I love that. Very unusual for a man I think. I like that you are heading in a more conventuinal direction. I think that lets these great characters shine more. Simple detective work chasing bad guys! Lots of dialogue!!! NG
Comment Written 29-May-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
I love Harpster came back from the dead. He wanted to help his granddaughter. I think he wants to control his children too. They took Lincoln too. Lincoln knows a lot about both sides. Here they go again. Time to round up everyone again.
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I love Harpster came back from the dead. He wanted to help his granddaughter. I think he wants to control his children too. They took Lincoln too. Lincoln knows a lot about both sides. Here they go again. Time to round up everyone again.
Comment Written 29-May-2014
