Soldier's Prayer
Many gave some, but some gave all...61 total reviews
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A very good 3/5/3 with a superb picture - I hesitated over the word plumes - but it is acceptable. I thought the phrase above the title was excellent - Many gave some, but some gave all. So true, and this moved me as I am just at the moment watching Band of Brothers on DVD. Good luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 28-May-2014
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A very good 3/5/3 with a superb picture - I hesitated over the word plumes - but it is acceptable. I thought the phrase above the title was excellent - Many gave some, but some gave all. So true, and this moved me as I am just at the moment watching Band of Brothers on DVD. Good luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 28-May-2014
reply by the author on 28-May-2014
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Thanks, Dorothy, and HBO's Band of Brothers is a spectacular tale of WWII. Produced by Tom Hanks, they did a wonderful job with the plot, characters and authenticity.
Comment from royowen
I like this 3-5-3 poetic contest entry, this is a touching poem and combined with the photo is a wonderful combination, I imagine this will de well received in this competition, I love it, good luck, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 28-May-2014
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I like this 3-5-3 poetic contest entry, this is a touching poem and combined with the photo is a wonderful combination, I imagine this will de well received in this competition, I love it, good luck, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 28-May-2014
reply by the author on 28-May-2014
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Thanks for the very encouraging review, Roy. I sure hope it does well.
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I couldn't imagine being a soldier and seeing and doing what they do. They deserve so much and we can never repay them for what they have done for us. Great, great job with this
reply by the author on 27-May-2014
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I couldn't imagine being a soldier and seeing and doing what they do. They deserve so much and we can never repay them for what they have done for us. Great, great job with this
Comment Written 27-May-2014
reply by the author on 27-May-2014
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Thanks for your encouraging review, ExperiencingLiphe. I appreciate it!
Comment from TAB_that's me
What a great little 3-5-3 air poem. I liked smoke wafting. Perfect timing with Memorial day too. Good luck in the contest.
Teresa
reply by the author on 27-May-2014
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What a great little 3-5-3 air poem. I liked smoke wafting. Perfect timing with Memorial day too. Good luck in the contest.
Teresa
Comment Written 27-May-2014
reply by the author on 27-May-2014
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Thanks, Teresa. I really appreciate the encouraging review and kind comments.
Comment from Delahay
Very clever and meaningful way to write within the guidelines given. The picture you chose goes right along with what I believe you are trying to convey.
reply by the author on 27-May-2014
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Very clever and meaningful way to write within the guidelines given. The picture you chose goes right along with what I believe you are trying to convey.
Comment Written 27-May-2014
reply by the author on 27-May-2014
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Thank you.
Comment from JB Lynn
This is expertly crafted, and I say that because you make us work to understand your description by splitting your 1st and 3rd line apart with "With men's pluming pleas". We have to sit with the final line "Windswept prayer" for a minute to get that it's tied into the smoke image. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-May-2014
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This is expertly crafted, and I say that because you make us work to understand your description by splitting your 1st and 3rd line apart with "With men's pluming pleas". We have to sit with the final line "Windswept prayer" for a minute to get that it's tied into the smoke image. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-May-2014
reply by the author on 27-May-2014
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Thank you very much, JB Lynn. I certainly appreciate the encouraging review, and I only hope others catch on to that as well.
Comment from judy.gordon
These few syllables speak volumes. I wish to add my words of thankfulness for those who fight to protect our freedom. I would not have the courage to kill or be killed.If I ever found myself on a battlefield, my prayers would indeed waft to God's ear. I would pray that the same thing would happen to me that happened to the Israelite nation. God directly intervened many different times in many different ways. Refer to the Old Testament on read about these battles.Good words chosen by the author to give us good visualization.
reply by the author on 27-May-2014
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These few syllables speak volumes. I wish to add my words of thankfulness for those who fight to protect our freedom. I would not have the courage to kill or be killed.If I ever found myself on a battlefield, my prayers would indeed waft to God's ear. I would pray that the same thing would happen to me that happened to the Israelite nation. God directly intervened many different times in many different ways. Refer to the Old Testament on read about these battles.Good words chosen by the author to give us good visualization.
Comment Written 27-May-2014
reply by the author on 27-May-2014
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Thank you very much for such an insightful and encouraging review, Judy. I truly appreciate it.
Comment from artisart4u
A nice poem just in time for Memorial Day.
Just a few words can say so much.
You have the required amount of syllables and you are right
"prayer is just one in my "Oxford New Desk ...."
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-May-2014
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A nice poem just in time for Memorial Day.
Just a few words can say so much.
You have the required amount of syllables and you are right
"prayer is just one in my "Oxford New Desk ...."
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-May-2014
reply by the author on 27-May-2014
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Thank you very much, artisart4u. I appreciate your very encouraging review.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
I think the message is lovely and lilting, but I do not see how this meets the contest requirements. The message uses a word related to air but does not speak to air as required. I see in no dictionary where the word pray-er is listed as one syllable so this does not meet the syllable requirements either. It is a lovely verse though and I thank you for sharing it with me.
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reply by the author on 27-May-2014
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I think the message is lovely and lilting, but I do not see how this meets the contest requirements. The message uses a word related to air but does not speak to air as required. I see in no dictionary where the word pray-er is listed as one syllable so this does not meet the syllable requirements either. It is a lovely verse though and I thank you for sharing it with me.
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Comment Written 27-May-2014
reply by the author on 27-May-2014
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Thanks, Mystic Angel. The contest rules say it can relate to breath, and the frosty plumes I'm referring to is the soldier's breath hanging in the figid air as they pray. So actually, you have two elements of air going on, freezing plumes of breath, and the frigid air.
As far as my dictionary goes, it lists prayers as one syllable. Perhaps I will change it to avoid any futher confusion.
Thanks so much again!
Comment from dennis0530
This is writing along the theme of sacrifice and fighting for freedom. The illustration is very symbolic and by itself could speak a thousand words.
The "plume" might represent a feather from a bird. An accidental victim of the fighting? Or might have been a soldier's helmet decoration blown away. Blown away would be a more pleasant condition. Could the soldier himself been a casualty and buried under the snow?
Looking at it another way, the soldier has just buried a dead comrade and having whispered a prayer, is about to mark the grave with the frosty plume. Since this writing should have been for the Memorial Day and the writer speaks of "some giving all," this refers to the fallen soldier-hero.
The soldier alive is "giving some" and the dead comrade "gave all."
reply by the author on 27-May-2014
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This is writing along the theme of sacrifice and fighting for freedom. The illustration is very symbolic and by itself could speak a thousand words.
The "plume" might represent a feather from a bird. An accidental victim of the fighting? Or might have been a soldier's helmet decoration blown away. Blown away would be a more pleasant condition. Could the soldier himself been a casualty and buried under the snow?
Looking at it another way, the soldier has just buried a dead comrade and having whispered a prayer, is about to mark the grave with the frosty plume. Since this writing should have been for the Memorial Day and the writer speaks of "some giving all," this refers to the fallen soldier-hero.
The soldier alive is "giving some" and the dead comrade "gave all."
Comment Written 27-May-2014
reply by the author on 27-May-2014
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You nailed it, Dennis, right on the money, my perceptive friend. I leave the interpretation completely up to the reader. I find things generally work out better that way. However, you got the symbolism engrained within the writing, and I truly appreciate that!
