Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

Your poem showed the tortured time before the crucifixion. When Jesus wrestled with the knowledge of knowing his fate. How terrifying that must have been. But I love the lines not mine but thy will be done. When I'm wrestling with my own demons, I repeat thy will be done over and over. It helps me accept what's next. Beautifully written. Gretchen

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023

Hi Gretchen,
Thank you for sharing your insights and pointing out what you liked best. Thank you for sharing a bit of yourself as well.
Debi

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

There is so much to be learned, copied and repeated here. Learn what it is to be humble. Copy the pattern of humility that Jesus always showed. Learn to repeat this action as often as possible, and you just might earn the right to live upon the earth in perfection forever.

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023

Hi nomi338,
Thank you for such an insightful review. I appreciate you stopping by to read and leave your impressions.
Debi

reply by nomi338 on 06-Apr-2023

Always, dear sis.

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

I don't remember writing a trionet, I like it. Do you have to write in rhyme and meter?

Your poem about God is very spiritual...sounds like a prayer. You did well. Too bad you missed the contest.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023

Hi Gypsy,
Thank you for the encouraging comments about the poem.
In answer to your question:
The trinet does not require rhyme or meter. It was the first form I recall seeing that was based on word count. Here is the form per shadowpoetry.com
Trinet
The Trinet, created by zion, is a form with these specifications:

Line 1 - 2 words
Line 2 - 2 words
Line 3 - 6 words
Line 4 - 6 words
Line 5 - 2 words
Line 6 - 2 words
Line 7 - 2 words

Repeat this pattern 2 more times, if centered correctly it looks like three crosses.

reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 05-Apr-2023

Thank you!

reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023

You are welcome.

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

- cool trinet poems
- good construction
- nice rhyme and flow


thank you for sharing



shelley ð?¦?

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 Comment Written 05-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023

Hi Shelley,
Thank you for stopping by to review this poem. I appreciate your time and response.
Debi

Comment from jessizero

Excellent

I am sorry you missed the contest. This was a beautiful poem, and you did a great job with the format. I also like that each stanza seems to be in the shape of a cross. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023

Hi jessizero,
Thank you for the encouraging comments about the the poem. The shape is a requirement of the form. I am happy you noticed.
Debi

Comment from Pam (respa)

Exceptional

-Thanks for sharing the artwork and poem, Debi.
-You did a good job with the form and the ideas in the poem.
-You take us through the steps that Christ must have felt in this situation.
-You capture emotions and thoughts very well in the first verse.
-Then you show "Such sorrow and agony he bore," and still asks that "His will be done.
-A very good concluding verse. I am glad you shared this.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023

Hi Pam,
Thank you for the shiny six stars and the encouraging comments. I appreciate the comments about the writing and the theme of the verse. I am happy you enjoyed this one.
Debi

reply by Pam (respa) on 06-Apr-2023

You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Debi. I appreciate your reply.

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

Beautiful!! Very meaningful and insightful and I am glad you shared it. If would have been an excellent entry. It's a wonderful Easter meditation. Thank you very much.
Wendy

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023

Hi Wendy,
Thank you for the kind comments. I happy you found this a meaning Easter medication.
Debi

Comment from Julie Lau

Excellent

Your presentation is very clever, the length of the lines forming a cross in each verse. Also, I'm intrigued by your profile photo: do you identify with the beautiful white show pony, or with the tiny little, ever-so-brave monkey perched upon its neck? Julie L

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023

Hi Julie Lau,
Thank you for the encouraging comments about the poem.
The picture in my profile is a unicorn and a fairy. I like fantasy fiction so I like both. Thank you for asking.
Debi

Comment from Mintybee

Excellent

This is a beautiful description of the story of Jesus' death. You use the trinet structure well. The repetition of "not this but that" structure is good for contemplation. The way you contrasted opposites was skillfully done.
Mintybee

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023

Hi Mintybee,
Thank you for your kind analysis of the poetry form and execution. I appreciate the encouragement.
Debi

Comment from Faith Williams

Excellent

You used this configuration well so those two-word lines stand out when reading them. Love how you rhyme the longer lines in contrast to the shorter ones. A fitting poem for Holy Week. Thanks so much for sharing your amazing poem!

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023

Hi Faith Williams.
Thank you for the excellent analysis of the form and pointing out what worked. I am happy you liked this presentation for Holy Week.
Debi