Aging
All too often- the process of aging31 total reviews
Comment from bilzo
A very sweet/sad portrayal of one of life's certainties. Memories in bits and pieces with occasional clarity. I've watched my own parents live this trial.
Excellent piece.
Bill
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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A very sweet/sad portrayal of one of life's certainties. Memories in bits and pieces with occasional clarity. I've watched my own parents live this trial.
Excellent piece.
Bill
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Thank you for the kind review of my work
Comment from JavaJunkie
So sad but true. You have captured what I have experienced with at least one of my grandparents. Unfortunately she was in a nursing home 3,000 miles from me. I hate that she felt so lonely and confused so much.
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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So sad but true. You have captured what I have experienced with at least one of my grandparents. Unfortunately she was in a nursing home 3,000 miles from me. I hate that she felt so lonely and confused so much.
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Thank you for the kind review of my work
Comment from TAB_that's me
This poem says exactly what aging is. It is written in the perfect syllable count for the 5-7-5 contest. Good luck.
Teresa
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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This poem says exactly what aging is. It is written in the perfect syllable count for the 5-7-5 contest. Good luck.
Teresa
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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thank you so much for the kind review of my work
Comment from Joan E.
I was attracted by your compelling, single-word title. Your use of the original "Spiral memories" and poignant "loneliness" is quite effective. Best wishes to us both in the contest. -Joan
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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I was attracted by your compelling, single-word title. Your use of the original "Spiral memories" and poignant "loneliness" is quite effective. Best wishes to us both in the contest. -Joan
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Thank you so much for such a kind review of my work... and good luck to us both.
Comment from bbranch06
Great haiku! But you make aging seem like the most terrible thing in the world. Anyways, I love you diction and the personification you use to get that negative point of view of aging across.
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Great haiku! But you make aging seem like the most terrible thing in the world. Anyways, I love you diction and the personification you use to get that negative point of view of aging across.
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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oh..... didn't intend to make aging seem bad or a terrible thing..I am loving it. Just an insight to what follows for many.
Comment from dennis0530
Though this is a 5-7-5, I wanted to play it around and look how it comes out.
loneliness prevails
moving within disjoints
memories spiral
Aging or ageing is such a controversial subject. The healing and medical sciences say that it is their success that life-prolonging medicines and procedures have contributed to the longevity of the population.
Now other agencies state that the aging population will overwhelm their services and resources. So,on whose side will we converge?
Will we choose a young population or care for our aging folks and let them share with us their cumulative wisdom?
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Though this is a 5-7-5, I wanted to play it around and look how it comes out.
loneliness prevails
moving within disjoints
memories spiral
Aging or ageing is such a controversial subject. The healing and medical sciences say that it is their success that life-prolonging medicines and procedures have contributed to the longevity of the population.
Now other agencies state that the aging population will overwhelm their services and resources. So,on whose side will we converge?
Will we choose a young population or care for our aging folks and let them share with us their cumulative wisdom?
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Nice twisting of the words..it is indeed fun to do that. Thanks for the kind review. Aging, science, ... what to do and who will care for who? too many questions with no clear answer
Comment from DDLacy
Intriguing words! A very precise and descriptive thought on aging! Best of luck in the 5-7-5 Poetry Contest category and thanks for the share.
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Intriguing words! A very precise and descriptive thought on aging! Best of luck in the 5-7-5 Poetry Contest category and thanks for the share.
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Thank you so much for the kind review of my work.
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Oh you're welcome! :)
Comment from Hudblack
I settle the swing
The chains are rusted
The seat is buckled
A young face is close
I'll live beside you
Swinging...
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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I settle the swing
The chains are rusted
The seat is buckled
A young face is close
I'll live beside you
Swinging...
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Thanks for the come back...all the best to ya
Comment from c_lucas
As we aged, we are separated from our memories and sometimes from our loved ones. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 23-May-2014
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As we aged, we are separated from our memories and sometimes from our loved ones. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 23-May-2014
reply by the author on 23-May-2014
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thank you so much for such a kind review of my work
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You're welcome.
Comment from McMurry903
Very powerful 5-7-5 poem! I like 'Spiral memories'. You made excellent use of each syllable to convey a sad truth many seniors face daily. I wish you the best of luck!
Brian
reply by the author on 23-May-2014
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Very powerful 5-7-5 poem! I like 'Spiral memories'. You made excellent use of each syllable to convey a sad truth many seniors face daily. I wish you the best of luck!
Brian
Comment Written 23-May-2014
reply by the author on 23-May-2014
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Thank you so much for the nice review of my work
