Softly ... from the Heart
John Lennon got it right ...87 total reviews
Comment from Glasstruth
An organization in the U.S. is finding apartment for the homeless, and if they ever do earn an income, a certain percentage will go for that. They say it's cheaper than having them live on street, and winding up in the emergency room. Your Pantoum is awesome with the repetition, especially the last two lines really finish this on a high note. Great writing! Les
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An organization in the U.S. is finding apartment for the homeless, and if they ever do earn an income, a certain percentage will go for that. They say it's cheaper than having them live on street, and winding up in the emergency room. Your Pantoum is awesome with the repetition, especially the last two lines really finish this on a high note. Great writing! Les
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Oh Les, I think we've officially formed a Mutual Admiration Society! Thx so much for your lovely sixer!
:)Sharyn
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You welcome
Comment from 9999pool
Firstly, the black title against a black background can hardly be read, smiles.
Imagine everything in the world built our of love for nature and mankind. The user friendly eco-cities full of parks and rest areas with beautiful children's play ground. Everyone is kind and considerate. A free cuppa for everyone. But alas, this is but a dream that cannot materialize as we become more greedy and environmentally unfriendly, :)).
As in any sonnet, a love of something that can never be, as a twist to the story.
Great write and well penned.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
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Firstly, the black title against a black background can hardly be read, smiles.
Imagine everything in the world built our of love for nature and mankind. The user friendly eco-cities full of parks and rest areas with beautiful children's play ground. Everyone is kind and considerate. A free cuppa for everyone. But alas, this is but a dream that cannot materialize as we become more greedy and environmentally unfriendly, :)).
As in any sonnet, a love of something that can never be, as a twist to the story.
Great write and well penned.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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I know re the black title, Ritchie - I had at least three e mails with "Tom" who seems rather obtuse in this department. I've noticed it in others' works, too, where they chose to use light font on black background. It should have nothing to do with what appears in the title box but there's obviously some kind of system glitch that makes it happen. Believe me, I tried to fix it! (That's why I put the title below, in the body of the piece - it's the only time I've ever done that).
Thx for your eagle eyes!
:)Sharyn
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Hi Sharyn,
If you try using a light background color, the title will appear very bold, smiles. But I am sure Fanstory can perform some magic for us later, smiles.
No worries because when i shifted my view on the screen i can make out the title, lol. Yes, I was peeping and peering for the title if that makes you giggle, :))
Cheerio, Ritchie.
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well it didn't make ME giggle Ritchie - bloody frustrating! but I didn't slash my wrists, fortunately ...
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Aww...I can understand the frustration sis, but be patient and let them sort out the problem. Btw, they have taken out the "Search" in our Portfolio, lol. Why?
Smiles, Ritchie. :))
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I think you can still get to it, Ritchie, after you click on, for example, 'poetry' - then a search box comes up ... took me a while to figure it out the other night!
:)
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Oh yes. Now I remember how I got to it. Thanks for reminding my old brain, lol. You are a darling and took the time to tell me, smiles.
Hugs, Ritchie. :))
Comment from Pullmanspb
When I read poetry, one thing I do is to pay attention to what images come to mind. This reminded me of a recent 3-month stay in Ecuador. All the symphonic concerts were free, as the government funded them. It wants its citizens to have exposure to good music.
A lovely recollection and all due to your poem.
Thanks
Steven
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When I read poetry, one thing I do is to pay attention to what images come to mind. This reminded me of a recent 3-month stay in Ecuador. All the symphonic concerts were free, as the government funded them. It wants its citizens to have exposure to good music.
A lovely recollection and all due to your poem.
Thanks
Steven
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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I'm off to Ecuador then, Steven! Thank you!
:)Sharyn
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What can I say that describes my thoughts on this amazing Pantoum Sonnet, Sharyn? I have only just learnt to write the sonnet...now you do this!! I really admire your theme too, I wrote a poem yonks ago about a homeless lady and even further back about the homeless people in general. I doubt any of them made a conscious choice to go homeless. These days there are more being thrown on the streets because they can't afford their rent or mortgage. And still the rich get richer, how does that happen?
This poem rhymed perfectly, Sharyn, it was beautiful in every sense of the word. :) xsx Sandra (I do go on a bit, don't I! lol)
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What can I say that describes my thoughts on this amazing Pantoum Sonnet, Sharyn? I have only just learnt to write the sonnet...now you do this!! I really admire your theme too, I wrote a poem yonks ago about a homeless lady and even further back about the homeless people in general. I doubt any of them made a conscious choice to go homeless. These days there are more being thrown on the streets because they can't afford their rent or mortgage. And still the rich get richer, how does that happen?
This poem rhymed perfectly, Sharyn, it was beautiful in every sense of the word. :) xsx Sandra (I do go on a bit, don't I! lol)
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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I LOVE it when you 'go on a bit' Sandra - thank you so much. You can 'go on a bit' any time you like ... and I'll be very happy to take that lovely sixer, too.
:)Sharyn
Comment from Quire's Gal
wow Sharyn, firstly, I think anyone who can even get through a pantoum sonnet deserves a six. They're hard! I love the meaning, your choice of words and everything about this piece. Just brilliant is all I can say.
Good luck with this amazing entry Sharyn.
Katherine
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wow Sharyn, firstly, I think anyone who can even get through a pantoum sonnet deserves a six. They're hard! I love the meaning, your choice of words and everything about this piece. Just brilliant is all I can say.
Good luck with this amazing entry Sharyn.
Katherine
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Katherine, thank you so much for your lavish praise, for 'getting' my piece, and, of course, for your lovely six! Pantoum's are like a challenging crossword (I'm hopeless at crosswords though!) - but when those repeating lines finally 'click' it feels good! Bless you!
:)Sharyn
Comment from chasennov
SOFTLY ... FROM THE HEART.' An excellent poem you have shaped here as a Pantoum Sonnet. It is a complicated type of poem but you did it rather well. Good job.
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SOFTLY ... FROM THE HEART.' An excellent poem you have shaped here as a Pantoum Sonnet. It is a complicated type of poem but you did it rather well. Good job.
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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thx so much chas!
:)S
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You are most welcome, Sharyn.
Comment from Alan K Pease
You have carried your paintbrush to this canvas and created a Pantoum of descriptive strength. I wish I had a six Sharyn.
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You have carried your paintbrush to this canvas and created a Pantoum of descriptive strength. I wish I had a six Sharyn.
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Bless you AK!
:)Sharyn
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Sharyn,
This line just blew me away: with city symphonies of pulsing lights
I immediately envisioned N.Y.C. Lights are musical in a way and definitely rouse excitement and a sense of adventure.
Of course I'm sympathetic to homeless people, but in so many cases it's best not to give handouts that will only feed drug habits.
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Hi Sharyn,
This line just blew me away: with city symphonies of pulsing lights
I immediately envisioned N.Y.C. Lights are musical in a way and definitely rouse excitement and a sense of adventure.
Of course I'm sympathetic to homeless people, but in so many cases it's best not to give handouts that will only feed drug habits.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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NYC was what I was visualizing Lou. My first impression of NYC was when, as I sat in a taxi, I watched a homeless man amble past with his piled up shopping trolley. He was silhouetted against the city lights just as a limousine was driving by. That image has stayed with me for 20 years.
:)S
Comment from Bharanee
A nice Pantoum Sonnet.I think your title is excellent...love it.The end rhymes and the rhymed couplet contribute a lyrical quality to the poem.
My fav line:
where Man builds empires softly ... from the heart
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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A nice Pantoum Sonnet.I think your title is excellent...love it.The end rhymes and the rhymed couplet contribute a lyrical quality to the poem.
My fav line:
where Man builds empires softly ... from the heart
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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thx so much Bharanee - glad you liked it!
:)Sharyn
Comment from Caressa_08
Your poem has a wonderful lively rhythm to it. A subject manner to contemplate, though with the way our world is now, that is about how far I think it will go, by just a passing thought & to try to visualize begging to be an art, I don't think that will fly ....Though, in my town we have plenty of caring, homeless shelters, & think the big cities are lacking...Though a haven for beggars that play on peoples sympathy to them, Yet, think a majority are really needing that dime..
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Your poem has a wonderful lively rhythm to it. A subject manner to contemplate, though with the way our world is now, that is about how far I think it will go, by just a passing thought & to try to visualize begging to be an art, I don't think that will fly ....Though, in my town we have plenty of caring, homeless shelters, & think the big cities are lacking...Though a haven for beggars that play on peoples sympathy to them, Yet, think a majority are really needing that dime..
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Thanks so much Caressa. I always wonder how those people ended up there ... and were they ever young, with hope ...
:)Sharyn
