Softly ... from the Heart
John Lennon got it right ...87 total reviews
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hi Sharyn,
This was a wonderfully rhymed and metered piece of work. I appreciated your message of the plight of the homeless, as I was recently touched to write a piece on their behalf myself. I loved the setting you portrayed with the feel of the cold city streets, and the idea that all could be improved by a change of heart and attitude. Well designed and delivered... all my best, Bill
reply by the author on 22-May-2014
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Hi Sharyn,
This was a wonderfully rhymed and metered piece of work. I appreciated your message of the plight of the homeless, as I was recently touched to write a piece on their behalf myself. I loved the setting you portrayed with the feel of the cold city streets, and the idea that all could be improved by a change of heart and attitude. Well designed and delivered... all my best, Bill
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 22-May-2014
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Thank you so much for your lovely review, Bill - and, of course, for your magic sixer!
"Mahalo"
Sharyn
Comment from c_lucas
Highlighting your title will bring it up. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. Ignoring the unfortunates makes them individual to those who don't want to admit the problem is there. Good job.
reply by the author on 22-May-2014
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Highlighting your title will bring it up. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. Ignoring the unfortunates makes them individual to those who don't want to admit the problem is there. Good job.
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 22-May-2014
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no, it doesn't help at all I'm afraid Charlie - I just gave up and put it in the body of the text!
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I was able to read the title by dragging the cursor over it. it was highlighted blue over white. Sorry you are having problems.
Comment from victor 66
Wow! Your poem is very good and I don't know if I completely understand it. Even your 'Author Notes' were quite an education. The picture did help in relation to your poem. And, isn't that what all artists do, create and express what they observe? Very impressive.
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Wow! Your poem is very good and I don't know if I completely understand it. Even your 'Author Notes' were quite an education. The picture did help in relation to your poem. And, isn't that what all artists do, create and express what they observe? Very impressive.
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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thx so much victor - the pantoum sonnet is a very specific form, so don't let the form confuse you ...
:)Sharyn
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Well Sharyn, I get lost walking around the block. But I do appreciate it when someone has such a grasp of their craft and can explain it so well. That's impressive.
Comment from BLACKDYKE
Never mind the concept feel the poem 1234'.
I just love this and it's rolling and such
rollicking rhythm. Repetition is all in this
diamond. Well, the reflection is repetitive.
Well worthy of my sixer. Eric
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Never mind the concept feel the poem 1234'.
I just love this and it's rolling and such
rollicking rhythm. Repetition is all in this
diamond. Well, the reflection is repetitive.
Well worthy of my sixer. Eric
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Thank you so much Eric! I'm honored by your sixer! I haven't seen you around for a while???
hugs
Sharyn
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My pleasure Sharyn, and no, I've been a little ill, but am surviving.
Comment from Pili Pubul
Excellent poem and no more six stars... Sad. Sad poem too
because is so real, excellent style , powerful imagery and a gran finale.
Good luck in the contest, to me is a winner. Pili
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Excellent poem and no more six stars... Sad. Sad poem too
because is so real, excellent style , powerful imagery and a gran finale.
Good luck in the contest, to me is a winner. Pili
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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So glad you liked this one Pili! I love writing pantoum because of the musicality ...
:)Sharyn
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Love it ... You welcome Sharin. Pili
Comment from lakeport
Softly from the heart, indeed that's a very nice expressed
poem, nice in form. I enjoyed reading it,Good luck at the contest.God bless you.Lakeport.
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Softly from the heart, indeed that's a very nice expressed
poem, nice in form. I enjoyed reading it,Good luck at the contest.God bless you.Lakeport.
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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bless you dear!
:)Sharyn
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your welcome,Hugs!Lkaeport.
Comment from TAB_that's me
You are such a wonderful writer. This is so well said and a beautiful pantoum sonnet for the contest. By the way, I voted for yours in the poem of the month contest:) and good luck in this one.
Teresa
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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You are such a wonderful writer. This is so well said and a beautiful pantoum sonnet for the contest. By the way, I voted for yours in the poem of the month contest:) and good luck in this one.
Teresa
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Teresa, what a sweetheart! On both counts - your lovely reading of my pantoum sonnet, AND also in the Poem of the Month contest! Thank you so much fo ryour lovely six on this one!
:)Sharyn
Comment from Mai Mai
This is an interesting piece. It gave way to make me imagine, not only the world you described, but so much more. Good work and good luck.
Mai Mai
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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This is an interesting piece. It gave way to make me imagine, not only the world you described, but so much more. Good work and good luck.
Mai Mai
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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thx Mai Mai! :)Sharyn
Comment from Dean Kuch
A lyrically lovely Pantoum Sonnet, Sharyn, on a terribly sad subject. Talk about your irony! Beauty displaying the ugliness of life's less fortunate, and the callousness of some of those who observe them as less than human...
With city symphonies of pulsing lights
the bright and motley crowds will move as one.
In flowered parks that fade to smoky nights,
those coffee crowds are lemmings on the run.
As you stated in your description, John Lennon got it right.
Well done!
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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A lyrically lovely Pantoum Sonnet, Sharyn, on a terribly sad subject. Talk about your irony! Beauty displaying the ugliness of life's less fortunate, and the callousness of some of those who observe them as less than human...
With city symphonies of pulsing lights
the bright and motley crowds will move as one.
In flowered parks that fade to smoky nights,
those coffee crowds are lemmings on the run.
As you stated in your description, John Lennon got it right.
Well done!
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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He did indeed, Dean. Thank you dear!
:)Sharyn
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You're very welcome-------8>}
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very well done, Sharyn! If I were to recreate life, I'd leave out the trash-filled alleys and homeless who occupy them in favor of increasing business activity to give everyone a job that paid enough to support a family. And I'd structure govt aid to keep families TOGETHER instead of the way it is set up now... to remove the father from the home. Did you know that 50 years ago only 7% of black families had no father in the home? Today it is over ten times as many at 73%.
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Very well done, Sharyn! If I were to recreate life, I'd leave out the trash-filled alleys and homeless who occupy them in favor of increasing business activity to give everyone a job that paid enough to support a family. And I'd structure govt aid to keep families TOGETHER instead of the way it is set up now... to remove the father from the home. Did you know that 50 years ago only 7% of black families had no father in the home? Today it is over ten times as many at 73%.
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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wow! I had no idea of that statistic, Phyllis! There's something very sick in a society where this could exist. My very first impression of New York as I was sitting in a taxi was the irony of a homeless man pushing a shopping trolley ... he was silhouetted against a limousine driving by ... it's always been an image that's stayed in my brain.
hugs
S
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We've alway had extremes and always will. But the fact that a full 47% of adults do NOT pay any income tax is verrrry skewed toward poverty. We have far too many poor people, and now the middle class has lost a lot of their former income and/or buying power. It's only going to get worse as the fed keeps printing money and business is hamstringed by over-regulation and high taxes.
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I hear you, Phyllis - I see all of those things and it cannot end well. The "Occupy" movement was just the first sign ... there will be more.
