Comment from mfowler

Excellent

Even with your well argued, but dubious explanation, I never thought you'd get this past the censors now that they hunt in committees (and like good governors charge a fee of 50cents). At least you didn't have the indignity of finishing last in the same comp. like my poor effort did. This is a clever idea and really kept me guessing till the very end. I knew it had to have a fun twist in the tale. Good fun.

 Comment Written 17-May-2014

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reply by the author on 17-May-2014

You thought right, Mark. Like ravenous wildebeasts, they are, lusting for struggling authors blood! Heh heh...

Oh well, nothing ventured, nothing gained. It was all in good fun. Thanks a bunch for the review!

Comment from visionary1234

Excellent

oh Dean this is way too funny! and seriously, it was disqualified? has no one a sense of humor? I'm not a horror fan but I can see your deft hand shining through this one and it definitely gave me a cackle. Bravo for rule breaking! (though I think you should have made more of the 'kid' 'napping' in your conclusion - as it is, it's a bit too subtle ... duh ... :)S

 Comment Written 17-May-2014

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reply by the author on 17-May-2014

Thanks a bunch, Sharyn. Your kind words are like salve to the open wounds my shattered pride has suffered LOL:}

I kind of think you're right, too!

reply by visionary1234 on 17-May-2014

i got a similar wrist slap once - I would have won the damned thing, too. But I live on ...

reply by the author on 17-May-2014

Sure, I mean, what choice do we have right?

8>D

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

The story line is well written with a very smooth flow of words. You should have drugged the kids and move them to another room. (The Little Linburg act.) Better luck next time.

 Comment Written 16-May-2014

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reply by the author on 17-May-2014

Thanks, Charlie. I guess you can't please 'em all, my friend...

reply by c_lucas on 17-May-2014

I had, what I thought to be a very humorous poem, blow up in my face a time a two. I was suspended one time when the "impartial" judge read the first paragraph. When I asked if he had read the whole story. I didn't hear for two hours when I was reinstated. You're a great writer, Dean. Charlie

reply by the author on 17-May-2014

Thanks, Charlie, and coming from you, a guy who I admire as a great writer himself, that means a lot to me. I appreciate that...

reply by c_lucas on 17-May-2014

You're welcome, Dean. I learned a long time ago, the committee does not have a sense of humor.

Comment from Zue65

Excellent

Dean I really had a good laugh here. Yes it is napping time with your kids where nappies have to be replaced when needed. You did comply with the kidnapping contest rules although you played around with the term. This means prompts are quite ridiculous, we can create anyway without complying with rules because writers have the license to break the rules, a necessary skill when writers create. An excellent write my friend.

 Comment Written 16-May-2014

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reply by the author on 16-May-2014

Yeah, nassus, I don't think I'll be entering anymore contests for a while. What a waste of %.50 in member dollars, not to mention the ones used to promote the story.

Oh well, live and learn, I suppose.

Comment from faragon

Excellent

Even tho they said you did not meet the qualifications, I really enjoyed your story. It was a fun play on words and a cute storyline!

 Comment Written 16-May-2014

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reply by the author on 16-May-2014

Thanks, faragon. I'm really happy that you liked it!

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

LOL!!!! You are SO BAD!!! (But your story is SO GOOD!) I just knew where you were going, of course, but I can't figure out how the little dickens gave up so easily - (*snicker*) they never met the ones I babysit occasionally...LOL. (You'll see...)

What a cute tale, Dean, and refreshingly different.

 Comment Written 15-May-2014

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reply by the author on 16-May-2014

Hee-hee...thanks, Dawn. I guess the lateness of the hour worked to his great advantage, and the little buggers just gave out. I really appreciate the reivew!

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Nice pun, Dean!

Lovely build up of tension - and then your anguished reader realizes it's just a longsuffering hubby after all!

Nicely done, friend. Best wishes for the contest.:)

Sonali


There (are) fifteen-year-old bottles of Maker's

(They are) unopened, too, with the tell-tale

red wax seals completely (intact).

 Comment Written 15-May-2014

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reply by the author on 16-May-2014

Thanks, Reach. I appreciate the read & review, and as always, the help.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

I'm loving the illustration
Great descriptive detail of the three kids
I love the narrator's inner thoughts
completely in tact - intact
First I laughed at the story, now I'm laughing at the author notes. LOL Fathers, you gotta love em. :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 15-May-2014

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reply by the author on 16-May-2014

Ha ha, yeah, somebody has to, Brooke! Thanks for the awesome review.

reply by adewpearl on 17-May-2014

I bet you never saw that disqualification coming ;-) LOL

Comment from nelliesellie

Excellent

I Love the picture. I love the story. I like the twist on the word. Kid napping works for me. I loved how threatened you felt and how normal people seemed to act..

 Comment Written 15-May-2014

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reply by the author on 15-May-2014

Thanks a bunch, nell. I appreciate the encouragement.

Comment from sibhus

Excellent

Definitely a inventive twist on the requirements, but it works well. A quirly little piece that was a good read. Good story and good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 15-May-2014

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reply by the author on 15-May-2014

Thanks, sibhus. I'm really happy to see that you enjoyed the story, and the little play on words. I really appreciate your review, my friend!